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You are perceptive in your reflections. The boys should be more careful in the strange city.
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On the way to Ipalos The rising sun was just a reddish glimmer on the eastern horizon. It was also a promise of the day to come, a day that would hopefully bring something better than the previous one. So wished also the boy trudging along the sandy path, his mop of hair taking on its familiar golden glow in the dawn light. To make sure no one was following, he turned several times to look behind him, to where the sun was beginning to rise. Repeated glances caused the blond-haired
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Thank you. Good point. I partly agree, too much is too much. However, in serials like this, a cliffhanger is a clever way to get the readers to keep reading. But not so that every chapter ends with one.🙂
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Thank you 🙂 I like cliffhangers myself too. There will be more of them as the story progresses. New plot twists and new significant characters will also come on the scene as we get further along in the story.🤗
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Thanks for your comment! Yes, this opens up a new sub-plot in the story. If the story is long, there have to be several of them. In the next chapter we'll meet Josel and Zdain again.🙂
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"People of Paidos! The minions of Monteilon the Exploiter are still at large. Do not help the oppressor, but expose the enemies of the people who are hiding. Report saboteurs and imperialists directly to the provisional government. The best tips will be rewarded!" - Bulletin of the Shadow Cross in Paidos Courier, on 6th of Withies month 1592 * * * Bartos Paidos, Andiol Empire "Breakfast! Thanks, mate!" Darren was delighted when Bartos, a little embarrassed, handed him a pap
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Thank you all for the nice comments and likes. They make me very happy 🥳 @Seraph28 I'm glad the story makes you happy. At the same time, it's a bit of a shame that I can't update faster 🙁 A chapter a week works for me, as long as I'm not travelling. Luckily the summer holidays are coming up, so I can get away from work for a while and concentrate on this story. @akascrubber As Franz's story continues, we'll find out more about this helper and whether he's a good guy or a bad guy. For Franz's sake, let's hope for the former 😬 @drsawzall You are clever! Oddly enough, the helper looks like something out of an adventure book 🤨 Let's see where Franz goes next - as you say, he really can't go home.
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Franz Paidos, Andiol Empire When Franz Landez awoke, he had no idea whether it was day or night. He had dozed off for a while, but a sudden chill brought him back to consciousness. His back ached and his legs were numb from bad posture. Sleep came only in small doses, and waking was always miserable. He had been given nothing but a thin blanket, even though the stone walls radiated cold. After Franz fumbled his way through the darkness to the door, he found a fresh ration that had be
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@akascrubber You are right, their situation is not good. They are safe now, but for how long is another matter. @drsawzall All is quiet in Ipalos now. But there are dangers other than Shadow Cross lurking in the city. Let's hope the boys are on their guard.
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Thank you very much! Yes, this was a long chapter and therefore quite slow to translate. The next chapter is shorter, but it has a new narrator character. So we'll leave Josel and Zdain to walk to Ipalos for a while 🙂
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"At its simplest, the Might is the ability of someone to change the established laws of physics, to do something that should not be possible. The Might comes in various manifestations, and an individual usually has only one or two ways of channelling it. For example, some can use it to heal injuries or illnesses, others can move objects, and regrettably many can use it destructively. Then there are us seekers who can locate the Might in others. It is an absolutely innate trait, present in v
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Jolanda is used to getting what she wants. Conflict is possible.
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Ha ha 😁 There may be other characters coming into the picture as well. Romance is coming, but not yet.
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@akascrubber It will be some time before the plans of Zal and his partners become clear. You may have noticed that in chapter 7 (the interlude) there was a certain Zaltarim Fizol. Hmm...🙂 @drsawzall The boys are on a very slippery slope with their explanations. The situation does not look good for them 😬 By the way, Krahh is a female. The name doesn't sound very feminine, though. We'll hear more about this bird as the story progresses ☺️
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Apologies that it took a little longer than usual for this chapter. Translation is slow work and I've been busier than usual lately. The week starting now is also busy, so you'll have to wait a bit longer for the next chapter too 🙁
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"What is left of the nations that were ruling in the Age before the Oblivion? Only wind-swept crumbs - relics that have been dug out of the sand or drowned by the centuries, barely withstanding the ravages of time. Written sources were either not preserved or were purposely destroyed in the decades that followed the Oblivion. So few people survived, and even fewer wanted to remember what had been wiped out. Their children were left with a scorched earth where no grain germinated and no gras
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Jolanda is Isendar Vargan's blind spot. Vargan, on the other hand, was also absolutely right when he said, "These days there are other hunters than the Shadow Cross." Things are starting to get tense.
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@akascrubber Thank you for your comment. In the next chapter, we'll find out what happened to the boys and much more ☺️
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Isendar Paidos, Andiol Empire Isendar Vargan took a few aimless steps across the floor of his large study before pausing to look out the window framed by thick velvet curtains. As he did so, he stroked his long black hair. It felt greasy, but he didn't care. The man staring out the window was impatient for news. The hair didn't matter, the news did. The six-paned window offered only the garden, not the vital information he was feverishly awaiting. But at such moments Isendar had a ha
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Let's not rush😁 Josel has his bad moods and is not so quick to correct his view of another person. Veilwood is big and the pond is so small that it unfortunately doesn't show up on their map. However, I made a map of the Veilwood area on my own: @akascrubber In the next chapter there will be more answers to the question of whether the boys are safe - or indeed, there are two narrators, so there is another point of view character before Josel.
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Josel "Josel, stay at home. Curtus and I will come and get you. If you do not hear from us by morning, find baker Mommes in Little Street and tell him my name. He is reliable. If Paidos is not safe, travel to Ipalos and visit Marta Donthav, whom I know from before. She is living in the Merchant's District; you cannot miss the big yellow house. Destroy the message as soon as you have read it. With love, Andreuz." "It's from your father, huh? What does it say?" Zdain wonde
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One way or another, the paths of all the characters in the story will cross. I also think that a pretty girl is always necessary in stories 😏
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Thank you for your comment😊Yes, there are more of these new layers being built. As I recall, there are 27 or 28 chapters in this first book, so there is still a lot to come. I also think you're right: the plan for Danae is not going to work out quite as Aunt Anibella intended.
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Danae Naldau, Grand Duchy of Malkania Danae Dannkas nodded approvingly to the maid who had just finished doing her hair. She uttered a polite thank you, then sent the maid on her way, nodding again to her reflection for reassurance. The maid had done a first-rate job, especially remembering that Danae's hair was not the easiest to comb. Shoulder-length blonde hair tended to bend into defiant waves, which required precision and willpower to style into the latest trend in Naldau's high
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Unfortunately, I can't answer that because I don't want to spoil the fun😄 However, the story is only at the very beginning: there will be many plot twists, new characters and dangerous situations🤠
