Mark Arbour
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Interesting? I'm not with you on that one.
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Thanks Kitt. JJ announced his bisexuality at the conclave at Goodwell, so we'll have to believe him for now. I think he's just starting to bud as a character. If you look, you can see some of the same base insecurities we saw in Will (In Poor Man's Son).
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Good to hear from you Cody! I can see Zach hustling for bucks to buy clothes, but it's more likely that Stef got them squared away. I see Zach as a guy who does whatever it takes to get what he wants. He's like a white-trash jock version of Mary Ellen. :-) I think that this chapter was also interesting for the contrasts between JJ and Will. JJ is bitchy, but it hides his basic insecurities. That's probably why his outward appearance is so important. Will, on the other hand, is confident. He trusts his judgment, and he's been around enough guys who are messed up that he spots them pretty fast.
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Thanks for the review. You make some good points, and I do like your idea about a shorter story, so we'll have to see. The reason that Zach is at Don Bosco is because they had a stellar football program in 2002 and 2003. That's Zach's big ticket, so they'd have poached him for his football skills, and that's going to drive his college choices.
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The second part of the story was to illustrate the contrasts between Will and JJ (and the different maturation rates of teens). A study in how far all of them have (or haven't) matured and developed.
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I try not to make characters too similar, but there are often similarities within families, so there you go. John is a little more adventurous with his sexuality (that we can see) and but he has his father's social instincts. He's the guy everyone likes. I don't see Zach as the "Lark" of this story, because I'm not sure he and Will are going to be as good of friends. I think that Brad felt like he could trust Lark. I don't think Will trusts Zach at all. And while Lark (Scott Slater) is creepy, and definitely self-absorbed, he has shown occasions where he is a caring person. We haven't seen that with Zach.
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The good news is that Will doesn't trust him either. And Zach isn't going back to Ohio...yet. He's back east, at a private school.
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I think you're right about JJ and John, but then again, I can see John being friends with pretty much everyone. Zach and Will hooking up actually does make sense, if you stop and think about their ages, and how much they've matured over the last year or so. Zach may not be reformed, but he's a lot smoother. Will isn't the naive guy he used to be either. He has the ability to read people, and he's got Zach's number.
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You nailed Will pretty well. Thanks for the review. Real life has been throwing me some pretty wicked curves, but I'll get through it.
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Thanks for the review Kevin. I'm not sure that we're seeing Zach reform, but we are seeing him mature. My team is on top of things, it's me that's the delay at this point. But I'll try to maintain at least some level of production.
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Well, the point of this whole chapter was to show how all of these guys have matured. Whether they've matured for the better remains to be seen.
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September 28, 2001 Hollywood, CA John and I walked around the dining hall at the Mission, pretending to look at the displays showing pictures of Robbie. I tried not to notice them, because they just made me sadder, but I pretended I was gazing at them intently. It was really nice of John to hang out with me. I’d expected him to hang out with Will more than me, but I appreciated it. Ryan was focused on Shiloh, like he always was, and in some weird, twisted coincidence,
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Thanks so much for the review. More? Give me ten minutes. :-)
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Thanks for the review. Sorry to provoke tears, but it was kind of necessary. ;-)
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The estate may settle before that happens, in which case those profits won't be factored in. Even if it doesn't, they can value it at the date of death. In that case, those who own stock in Anders-Hayes will win.
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That would be pretty funny. But it's pretty unrealistic...I can't see Brad with the time (or the patience) to do that. Plus, unless things have changed, you need to have a certified driving course to get a license in CA.
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Happy birthday handsome!
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Happy Birthday!
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Actually, Mark is busy. This is not atypical for mid-semester (fall and spring), where I get overwhelmed by the real world and my writing suffers. It is what it is. But I do come back and pick things up when I can, so hang in there.
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Wow. Thanks for that review. I'm reading it at a time that it a bit traumatic for me, and it put a smile on my face when I needed it most. Thanks. I think that your prognosis on us getting to the 'moving on' part of the story is correct, although I can't say that for certain since I haven't written the next few chapters yet.
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So I'm the author who set this whole thing in motion, and I know it's all my fault, but I miss him too. Robbie was a character of extremes, one who was rarely in one stable place. He could be incredibly rational and irrational, incredibly balanced then incredibly unstable. A writer's wet dream.
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"saying goodbye and living goodbye are two very different things" And you hit on Brad's big challenge. But saying goodbye has to come first, so it's a beginning.
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That's a Jewel of a review. ;-)
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Thanks. I wanted to keep with the music scene to parallel their wedding, so it worked.
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You hit on Brad's biggest epiphany here: that his life was so much better with Robbie in it. Remembering those simple times of contentment is huge, something most of us don't do.
