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    Jay & Miles by ColumbusGuy

    in Stories Discussion Forum

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    And AC, his story Dignity is probably what sparked me to begin writing here--it was far more than the average erotica I had associated with the gay community before finding GA--and he extended the first hand in friendship and encouragement to someone who had only tried semi-historical fiction before, though there was an 'inner me' who longed for a chance to express himself.

     

    Thanks for the shout-out, but your talent, skill and drive are all you, buddy. Kiss kiss

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    Judas Tree by AC Benus

    in Promoted Author Discussion Forum

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    AC, I was listening to my music files, and this one came on--I'd completely forgotten about it--but it fits with the scene where Simon is talking about his dad seeing Wings as a kid.  It too, is a presentation of the deep bonds forged between boys, even as the years pass.

     

    Surprisingly, this emotion-filled song is by the same man who did Tie Me Kangaroo Down, Sport!

     

    Gosh, what a fascinating song. I should go look for an older, that is a period, recording of it. I did not except the one to be dying, but it is a war song, after all. 

    Poetry Prompt 3 – LYRICS

    in Peeks and Prompts

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    Irrri, thanks for the compliment--guess I'll have to look up Kate Bush since I have no clue who she is!  I stopped listening to radio when Dr. Demento went off...and mostly buy cds from no later than the early 80s New Wave era.  Most of my stuff goes back to medieval music by way of folk, classic Rock and 19th century ballads and Civil War era songs. :)

     

    AC, I guess I'm stuck...wonder if Jay can write a poem?

    Oh course Jay can write a poem. Anyone can write a poem! (how's that for teacherly encouragement ;)  )

    Poetry Prompt 3 – LYRICS

    in Peeks and Prompts

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    AC, I suck at poetry, probably lyrics too--and I don't think this fits the 'first morning' theme, but here goes, just for you:

     

    If I'm down, will you be my wings?

    I can't do it alone...

    If I drift, will you be my roots?

    See, I'm scared I'll be lost...

    With your love, I think I can fly--

    With you, my heart's at home.

     

    Cornflower-blue, and shining blond,

    These of you, to me sing...

    During the day, I'm your shade,

    Summer sweet, you to me...

    I'll be your roots, you be my wings,

     

    Sucky, but you may recognize the inspiration. :)

    For the readers of your Jay and Miles series, they will instantly recognize the 'voice' of this poem as coming from the teenage Miles. I love it, i hope you roll it into an upcoming installment. Maybe we can expect Miles to recite it directly to the boy with the cornflower-blue eyes....hint, hint ;)    

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    Poetry Prompt 3 – LYRICS

    in Peeks and Prompts

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    If you'd like to see the Bright flame of my Lyric 8-6-8-6 poem, have a look in the gallery or hit the link. I suppose I should have posted it earlier, before AC thought that it was the sun. :( Sorry about that, AC, I hope seeing the setting gives a better sense to the poem now. ;)

    It's beautiful, and at least i got the bare trees correct! :) And no need to say sorry, because in poetry there is no right or wrong interpretations, just images to see and feel, imo :)  

     

    But I'm glad you shared, as it's a beautiful picture!

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    Poetry Prompt 3 – LYRICS

    in Peeks and Prompts

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    I felt inspired. Unfortunately, inspiration doesn't strike in the morning for me and so it wasn't until later in the day that I was provoked.

     

    Here is the result: Lines and Squiggles Resembling Poetry - Chapter 3

     

    I both liked and liked all of the poetry responses that I have read. Please forgive my lack of actual input. Others have already said better than I feel that I could offer you.

    Thank you, Ron, for playing along! I left you a review on actual posting :)

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    Canadian Slang

    in The Lounge

    Posted · Edited by AC Benus

    I never thought there was Canadian Slang. Other than being teased for the way we say about, eh, among other words, who would have thought we had slang too :unsure:

     

    I guess since we get so much US Television and movies up here, we are well versed in what could be called American slang yet some common terms up here are not known south of the border.

     

    See you you do on this test and maybe share some of your slang from your country that maybe interesting to others:

     

    https://ca.screen.yahoo.com/editor-s-picks/americans-try-guess-canadian-slang-224355057.html

    Jesus Murphy!!! Thank you, Wildone, for this source! I've been working my way through a new project in the voice a 23-year old Ontarian, and with the sage advise and help of Headstall, have found it both challenging and rewarding. I love my new new expressions, like deke you out, slacked, and it's not Timmy Ho's!!!  

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    Poetry Prompt 3 – LYRICS

    in Peeks and Prompts

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    First Light

    Too early, and still it is not,

    my eyes stay firmly closed.

    The warmth's waging war with the cold,

    I don't want to hear -but-

     

    A white cup beckons me over,

    it's smell ambrosial.

    That's cheating my dear, I tell you,

    one kiss and time to go.

    I think everyone can relate. There's something magical about the connection (or flow...) of the first and second stanzas. It's almost as if a feeling of sleepiness is slowly being shaken off by the senses - perception of the cold, sound, smell and then taste - but the final sense is the lingering brevity of the kiss. I love that!     

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    Poetry Prompt 3 – LYRICS

    in Peeks and Prompts

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    Two Trains of Morning Thought

     

    Snowshoe paws land upon my chest

    Morning's hard awakening
    Go away, Cat; it's the weekend
    Pussy purring patiently 
     
    Waterdog Trail Loop calls my name
    Stretch limbs for pounding ride
    Bike's been sitting on the trainer
    But pumped and lubed, I'll glide

     

    I love both of them, but in the second one I think you'll see the 8-6 rhythm 'sounds' better when read. Try it out loud and I think you'll see what I mean.  I think with just a little adjustment, the 7 syllable lines from the first stanza can be adjusted down to 6. (If you want some suggestions, I have a couple ;)

     

    The cat one is a great image! I can just see the expression on the face, and feel the purring on my chest. Well done

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    Poetry Prompt 3 – LYRICS

    in Peeks and Prompts

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    Hmmm. Going to need to think about this, because *cough* what I thought about when waking was actually not what I expected it to be when you told me about the assignment, AC.

     

    Edit: There's the classic morning haiku that goes 

     

    "no no no no no...." etc.

    Oh my, the mind does wonder...a x-rated set of lyrics from Irri..? I for one, will encourage you to share your full. You're among safe company. 

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    Poetry Prompt 3 – LYRICS

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    The limerick's callous and crude,

    It's morals distressingly lewd.

    It's not worth the reading

    By persons of breeding;

    It's designed for us vulgar and rude!

    Wow, a limerick! Was this really part of the first emotions you had waking up this morning? If so, you are a very, very literary type person. ;) I love it!  

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    Poetry Prompt 3 – LYRICS

    in Peeks and Prompts

    Posted · Edited by AC Benus

    Poetry Prompt 3 – Lyrics

     

    Let's Write some Lyrics!

    I'm not talking about writing a song, at least not yet. But now that we have begun to think in terms of structure, and have been introduced to the concept of lines of poetry being made up of a set number of syllables, it's time to look at the most popular form in the western world. 'Lyrics' for my intents and purposes refers to a set of alternating lines of syllables - a discernible beat created through a repeating of line length.    

    Like the rhythm we have seen from Japanese verse of 5 and 7 syllables playing back and forth, the most common equivalent in lyrical Western verse is an 8 and 6 pattern. A little birdie has told me Irritable1 has a fantastic prompt coming up talking about the internal rhythm within a line, but for now let's just look at how lines can form lyrics by using two different syllable lengths.

    Emily Dickinson had an innate way to construct poems. They are often very lyrical, as in this example:

     

    Nature and God—I neither knew
    Yet Both so well knew me
    They startled, like Executors
    Of My identity.

    Yet Neither told—that I could learn—
    My Secret as secure
    As Herschel's private interest
    Or Mercury's affair—[1]       

     

    This is a perfect example for us to look at. For one, 835 (as it's known) is flawless as it alternates back and forth between 6 and 8 syllable lines. These lyrics also not no bother with rhyme, which we will get to in later prompts. For now, we can just read it and feel the connection to Tanka and Haiku, and we can build on it to write our own lyrics. And speaking of connection, I personally never feel I can understand Dickenson's poetry except in a queer context, and this poem once again reconfirms that for me as she speaks of feeling like Nature and God have never known her; that seems a very familiar doubt that every LGBT person has ever felt.

    Here's another Dickinson example (known as 551):

     

    There is a Shame of Nobleness—
    Confronting Sudden Pelf—
    A finer Shame of Ecstasy—
    Convicted of Itself—

    A best Disgrace—a Brave Man feels—
    Acknowledged—of the Brave—
    One More—"Ye Blessèd"—to be told—
    But that's—Behind the Grave—

     

    The prompt: write two stanzas of lyrics. Follow the 8-syllable/6-syllable pattern as you go. Base it on the first emotions you remember having when you woke up this morning. This is practice, so it is up to you if you wish to incorporate rhymes, and feel free to make the poem humorous if you like.  

     

     

     

     

     

    [1] The analogy in the second stanza is an interesting one. Hershel was a chemist who published multiple papers on his experiments with mercury. The play of that science (i.e. Nature) with the mention of the god Mercury's not-so secret (and same-sex loving) love life brings in the element of spirit (or of God) to contrast it. 

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    Clueless Camping by Timothy M

    in Stories Discussion Forum

    Posted

    It is the most famous place in Copenhagen for buying smørrebørd (open face sandwiches).

     

    See http://www.idadavidsen.dk/cms/Velkommen

    or English version: http://www.idadavidsen.dk/en-gb/cms/Welcome

    YUMMY YUMMY pictures! I love all seafood, so despite ColumbusGuy and his reticent disinclination for anchovy (lol), i could easily wile away an afternoon with Ida - who seems to be a lovely person too. Thanks Tim! 

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