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    JoejoeGreene
  • JoejoeGreene
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  • 04/10/2013
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Night Calls - 1. That Night

I didn’t answer your texts that night

Ten months ago

That night

You told me you had come back from work

That night

You were sick but had bills to pay

That night

You kept texting me

That night

Telling me that you loved me

That night

That you loved me but not the way I did

That night

“You and my mother are the only ones that really have loved me”, you said

That night

I read the messages you sent me

That night

I did not answer you at all

That night

“The next time I see you”

You wrote

“I will not love you the same as tonight”

And it was your last text sent to me

That night

You stopped the texting

After

That night

I did not seek you

I did not wonder about you

Since

That night

I called you recently, though

And pretended I was looking for your brother

She, your sister, answered and immediately recognized my voice

I corrected myself and asked for you

She said that you had died

Three days after

That night

Alone

No friends

No lovers

Copyright © 2013 JoejoeGreene; All Rights Reserved.
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Fishwings

Omg. WOW. I loved this!! The beginning was a hook, and the repetitions of "that night" really urged the reader to read on and on and on until BANG! A heartfelt, sickening impact at the end. There was no angst, but an implied melancholy and loneliness that was done well with the short isolated last few lines.

 

Amazing job, again, JJG.

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comicfan

The constant repetition tells you that everything changes because of "that night". As the reader you are dragged along and wait to see what the final sad conclusion is.

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layla

Wow, touching, sad, almost bitterly sad, i loved the repitition of 'that night' because as a reader I knew something was coming but that wasn't what i expected. Loved this :2thumbs:

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Yettie One

Damn

I could see that ending coming, but it didn't lessen the impact, take away the hurt, or draw any less of a body blow.

That was brutal.

The very idea that at times we choose so foolishly to be stubborn.

Lesson to be learnt in those words.

Heavy stuff, but amazing all the same.

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