Shadows on the Ocean - 1. Chapter 1

You're quite the poet Layla and I can relate to your poem tremendously

a thoughtful and intelligent poem, exploring emotions convincingly and imaginatively. thanks for sharing.

So sad! That storm of emotions sounds frightening but after the storm comes...hope? Great job and thanks for sharing!

So sad. So depressing. To be alone with no hope of the situation changing. I felt every word.

Ooh, don't feel so lonely, you can have my teddy and she'll never leave you when the light comes.

I really like how you used the words to express the the coming of love and gone. I feel a bit of personification is somewhere, but I couldn't quite pinpoint what, but beautiful imagery. It's a very good poem, Layla.

The imagery you use helps to make it clear how alone the persona in the poem is. Sad and very well done.