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Adlai - 18. Chapter 18

Heralding a new day in Jerusalem, the sun arose above the surrounding hills, and the city emerged from shadow. Normally this was a time of celebration – it was Pesach 104 when the nation celebrated deliverance from a cruel tyrant. It was a time of joy and thanksgiving.

Or, so it should have been.

For on this morn the citizens awoke to an atmosphere of foreboding. The news of the execution was the only subject discussed throughout the night, but while the vast majority considered it to be unjust, they knew there was nothing that could be done to save Adlai. They were all uncertain – uncertain what the Romans might do if there were any angry remonstrations.

So they were all afraid.

In the fortress jail since early morning, Adlai had been repeatedly whipped and scourged. Blood from many open cuts oozed down his body and from his face, so much so that it was hard to determine his features. Once again, it was the younger centurions who applied the punishment with enthusiasm.

At some stage, Adlai had simply switched off and absorbed the savagery without even a whimper. His mind had accepted its fate so now he just physically went through the motions of existence. Time became meaningless.

Such was his surrender to the will of others he had no recollection of being led out of the Praetorian to the main road to Caesarea where the patibulum 105 was placed on his shoulders. Then a hand reached out and touched him causing him to look up - into the face of Demetris. He managed a small smile of gratitude and understanding. Demetris was crying freely. Then prodded by the guards the little procession began the short journey to Golgotha, 106 about two thousand long cubits 107 away.

Adlai was weak and stumbled often. The physical exertion caused his blood to flow faster, which in itself was a blessing, as it would lessen the length of his agony. But by now, he was bereft of any feeling. Shortly after leaving the portico of the Sheep’s gate, someone offered him a drink that he consumed while maintaining his stumbling gait.

But then suddenly, a major disturbance erupted. As they approached the ‘Fish’ gate, and before leaving the city proper, the crowd surged forward with hands outstretched. Voices were screaming for Adlai’s release. The soldiers tried to keep them back but realized too late that there were armed men within the crowd.

Now a vicious fight broke out and the scene before the gate became a melee of fighting men with much blood being spilled. Eventually and with great difficulty, order was restored leaving many zealot warriors as casualties. Once the guards had regrouped around the condemned, the little procession continued towards the hill of Golgotha now on the left hand side on the passway.

Reaching the execution site the experienced legionnaires went about their business with grim efficiency. When they had secured the hands to the cross beam, the Senior Centurion nodded satisfactorily,

“Good. Now bring me the nails.”

When the first nail was driven into his wrist, without fracturing bone and damaging the main artery, Tavi screamed. The pain was excruciating and did not lessen when the other nails were driven through his flesh. Now secured by the nails, he was raised onto the upright post and his feet were nailed about midway between toes and ankle. The centurions then moved back to admire their handiwork.

To Tavi, the process of dying had begun. Suspended by the cruel nails, his body hung limp with his lifeblood seeping away. Before changing place with Adlai, he had endured many open cuts that now bled freely.

Slowly, through all the searing pain, Tavi began to feel a numbness creep through him. It was getting dark even though the sun had yet to end its journey for the day.

 

I’ve not known this pain before . . . I feel cold . . . why is it getting dark? . . . I’m . . . I’m so sorry Adlai. Sorry Abba . . . so sorry I’ve caused you such trouble. I’ve done some very bad things . . . and I don’t know why. But . . . even with all this pain . . . pain, I know that making this sacrifice is a good thing . . . it’s probably the only good d . . . deed I’ve ever done. I ca . . . ca . . . . can’t . . . breathe now . . . can’t . . . can’t . . . emma! . . . emm . . .

 

From out of a small group gathered near the execution site an old man came forward slowly and approached the condemned. Such was the sorrow engrained on his face, the soldiers knew that he was a family member, and by his age and the tears, a close family member.

Yusuf looked up at his eldest son impaled as he was with blood now congealing on his wounds. He looked up into Tavi’s face and . . .

 

There you are Tavi. There you are with the signs of suffering writ all over your body. But this wretched corpse will not be my memory of you, my firstborn. No, I will remember the wriggling young babe I held in my arms at birth. I’ll remember your cries demanding attention and the cheeky youngster always challenging my authority. You will always be the joy of my life. How proud was I as you advanced into manhood. How proud I am my son that you have laid down your own life to save your brothers’ life.

I weep both tears of sadness and tears of pride. Your sacrifice this day will be acclaimed and remembered for all time by our people. Now it is the saddest of all tasks for a father to lay his son down to rest.

 

Yusuf moved closer and touched his son’s feet, pinioned and bloodied as they were.

“Come now son . . . (sob) . . . It’s time to take you home.” Cephas and Simon joined him and Yusuf asked the senior guard,

“Can I take my son home with me? Now that his tormented soul is no more we must lay his body in a peaceful place.”

“Yes, take your son old man. He died bravely. I’ve never seen a deceased looking so peaceful in death. Surely, the sun will set on all our lives soon enough. Take him now, so we can all go home.”

 

Epilogue

 

For some time after Tavi’s death, Adlai and Maria stayed away from prying eyes at the safe house in Jerusalem. Any joy at Adlai’s escape from crucifixion was dampened by the awesome sacrifice Tavi had made. Only Cephas, Simon, and Yusuf knew of the circumstances leading up to Tavi’s sacrifice.

When Maria’s time drew near, they moved to Idra’s house for the baby to be born. It was a boy and they named him – Tavi. Adlai and Mary eventually joined Farhan in Nabataea where Adlai established a centre for learning based on not only his own beliefs but including the teachings of Ibrahim and the Buddhist faith.

There was great sorrow in the land at Adlai’s apparent death. As is often the case, Adlai’s fame became more in death than it ever was in life. A movement began, headed by Demetris and including Adlai’s followers that continued with his teachings. And it grew steadily with the passing of time.

So when Adlai began to make appearances it was deemed a miracle and that he had risen from the dead.

And so the legend began. As all legends begin from humble origins and change over time into folklore and mystery, the story of Adlai ben Yusuf was no different.

Perhaps it isn't so much the person that's important but the message. What a wonderful world it would be if the good from every religion the world has known were to be extracted and the bad discarded. There is no such thing as sin. What has been deemed as sin is only . . . prejudice, bigotry, ignorance injustice and discrimination.

 

ANNEXURE NOTES

 

104: Passover

105: Wooden crossbeam

106: Roman ‘Calvary’

107: About 1 kilometre

 

CAST OF CHARACTERS

 

 

Abir ben Micah >>> A leader of the Pharisees living in Sepphoris

Adlai ben Yusuf >>> Son of Yusuf and Mariam, brother to Tavi and Magdella

Annus >>> Formerly Chief Priest and Father-in-Law to Caiaphas

Brother Zechariah >>> Leader of the ‘Essenes’ based on Qumran

Cephas >>> Son of Idra and cousin to Tavi and Adlai

Herod Antipas >>> Son of Herod the Great and ruler of the Provence of Israel

Idra >>> Father of Cephas and Uncle to Adlai and Tavi

Jessica >>> senior housekeeper to Idra ben Micah

Joseph Caiaphas >>> Chief Priest of the temple and son-in-law to Annus

Judah the Galilean >>> Founder of the Sicarii with Zadok

Magdella >>> Sister to Tavi and Adlai

Maria bat Idra >>> Daughter of Abir ben Micah

Mariam >>> Wife of Yusuf

Martha >>> Wife of Idra

Rufus Julius Antonius >>> Roman centurion

Ruth bat Idra>>> Youngest daughter of Abir and sister to Maria

Simon ben Judah>>> Son of Judah the Galilean who had been killed

Tavi >>> Elder brother to Adlai and Magdella

Valerius Gratis >>> Governor of Judea until 26CE

Varus >>> Optio or second in command to Rufus

Yusuf ben Toshe >>> Husband to Mariam

Zacchaeus >>> Chief Roman Tax Collector residing

 

Well that's it. I hope you've enjoyed. I've a mind to rewrite the story and expand on the character of Cephas. Any suggestions would be welcome. Thanx again
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I can't say that the last chapters were easy to read, -there's too much pain, death and betrayal there for my taste. There is a detachment

in the biblical version that seems to moderate the story. Your version is personal and touches the emotions and the pain is sharp.

I suppose that's a sign of a talented writer. What you say in the final paragraph here couldn't be more true, and is the most important

message to take away from this tale.

 

 

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I really don't know how to answer your comment. Yes Stephen it's not easy reading and I had real difficulty scoping the chapter. I hope that, on the whole, the story is acceptable to all. Do you think I should expand on the role of Cephas? Do i need to bring us gays more significantly into the dialogue?

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I just now read your comment from Wednesday, and I didn't expect to see a response. Cephas is a likeable character, but is really secondary

to Adlai and Tavi. I like the way you portray him and can't think of any reason to change him, -or the story for that matter. It is a tragedy, and

those are sad and this one is no exception. Unless you are dissatisfied, then don't change a thing. Now if you are thinking about writing a story

about Cephas' adventures I'd read it. But that's a differet matter, isn't it?

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Wow . . . thank you. Thats a great idea. I'm always on the prowl for story ideas and your comment is worthwhile. Thanx again

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Hi Graham,

Great story! I loved it. I knew almost from the start (the names of Adalai's parents from Nazareth, &  Yusuf  being a carpenter were give aways ) that this was a "retelling" of the life of Jesus. Good job! i love how you weaved into it elements from the traditional Biblical version in the Gospels, but then changed it up alot, like how Maria rides to Jerusalem while pregnant on a donkey (reminiscent both of Jesus's ride into Jerusalem on Palm Sunday before his crucifixion, & Mary's ride into Bethlehem at Jesus's birth). You did this numerous times & i would have enjoyed  had you done this even more often, yet with the "twists" of plot you are so good at. What is also good is how as i read, i found myself feeling, "yes, it really could have happened this way" & that it was much more plausible then the Biblical account. One item i feel warrants a bit more plot development to make it seem more true to life, was the exchange of Tavi for Adalai  It seemingly happened in full day under heavy Roman Guard, who were not at all lax in performance of duty (to have failed as you have the guard do here would have most likely resulted in their own execution). Just an idea of how it could have happened would be if say the Roman guard Demetris were enlisted to help make the swap, say in the darkness of the prison cell ... also it would have helped if you had the two brother's Tavi/Adalai look more alike, as i recall they looked very different. On the question of expanding the Cephus/Amenko romance ... there was none, only the allusion to it, but it was obvious. I mean you develop both the the romances of the two brothers with the women, yet you fail to do the same with Cephus & Amenko, which would have also been a great opportunity to have had Adalai (Jesus) affirm an accepting non-judgemental stance toward same sex relationships. It would not have been outside your plot line either i feel, as you start the story with the 3 boys on the "hunt" ... so it would fit that you would include all three in their romances as well. I don't think it would have made the story much more long, as you are very good at plot development w/out being overly wordy.  I was a pastor for more then 25 years & also an avid reader of theology, of all traditions. I like how you summarize/compare the various faiths, without being "preachy." And you weave the "theology" into the story almost seamlessly & with tact. I know the historical record of the times & you so do you. You know what you are writing about. Thank you for a most enjoyable & thought provoking & heartwarming story.

Warm Regards,

BobW

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Thnx for your comments. It's really helpful to us scribblers to hear from readers particularly with helpful comments. Yes, you're right about the switch; I racked my brains on how to handle this. I opted for the intersession thinking that the blood and bruising would be significant camouflage. But you're right, Adlai and Tavi are different physically and I missed this. I was thinking I'd write a sequel involving Cephas and Amenco as I downplayed their relationship in the story. I didn't want anything to distract from the main plot; I still may do this. Thnx again .  .  . I was delighted to hear from you.

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Very plausible interpretation and excellently written.

 Cephale’s character needed a little more detailing especially his relationship with Amenko

 

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Thanks for your comments. I thought a lot about that and finally decided I didn't want the relationship to imapct on the basic story. Thanks again.

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