Love Looked at Me and Laughed and other poems - 3. a whirl

Beautiful AC. I'm sure your intention behind these poems is different, but what I gather from them, is a couple going through troubling times. While they still love each other but there are some frequent arguments going on.

3 minutes ago, BHopper2 said:

Beautiful AC. I'm sure your intention behind these poems is different, but what I gather from them, is a couple going through troubling times. While they still love each other but there are some frequent arguments going on.

You are right, A. Troubling times but not because of arguments so much as Brian's silence. Thanks for reading.

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your poetry always moves me, but trying to put that into words is another thing entirely.  i regularly have to read them a few times before the way i'm affected coalesces into words.

Poem 5 sounds both like a goodbye and a vow.  i know, that doesn't really make sense, but there it is

Poem 6 is full of frustration, how to get someone to listen, who may not want to be engaged at all

as always, thank you for sharing these, for trusting them with us

xo

So very beautiful, and how wonderful you shared Brian’s response. So many lines  you conceived, but I love those beginning  with Dare I summon your image...

“May I find the happiness of a 

Million years condensed to the thought

Of you”

That line holds so much weight..says so much . More so, after reading Poem 6, and Brian’s response... 

Evoking as always.. 

On 9/23/2018 at 6:28 PM, mollyhousemouse said:

i love it when i have a notification that you have posted something new

your poetry always moves me, but trying to put that into words is another thing entirely.  i regularly have to read them a few times before the way i'm affected coalesces into words.

Poem 5 sounds both like a goodbye and a vow.  i know, that doesn't really make sense, but there it is

Poem 6 is full of frustration, how to get someone to listen, who may not want to be engaged at all

 

as always, thank you for sharing these, for trusting them with us

xo

@mollyhousemouseThank you for reading and sharing your insight. It's always welcomed. These Brian poems are indeed a blend of celebration and frustration. That's the kind of relationship it was, I guess.

I'll post the next installment today. Thanks again!   

On 9/23/2018 at 6:58 PM, Parker Owens said:

So very beautiful, and how wonderful you shared Brian’s response. So many lines  you conceived, but I love those beginning  with Dare I summon your image...

@Parker OwensThank you, Parker. I guess I am still too close to them to know if they are beautiful or not; your feedback helps me hope others will think of them as beautiful too.

Thanks once again.

On 9/30/2018 at 3:26 PM, Defiance19 said:

“May I find the happiness of a 

Million years condensed to the thought

Of you”

That line holds so much weight..says so much . More so, after reading Poem 6, and Brian’s response... 

 

Evoking as always.. 

 

 

@Defiance19Thank you, Def. The part you quote is inspired by the prayer on King Tutankhamen's 'wishing cup.' This alabaster object was the last thing sealed in the tomb, and Howard Carter actually had to step over it to get inside in 1922. 

The prayer for the king goes: 

"May your spirit live --

may you spend millions of years,

you, beloved of Thebes,

sitting with your face to the north wind,

your eyes beholding happiness."

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