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Only Prompts - 26. Prompt 848: "That was the last thing I ever expected to see."

**** Warning .. Religious symbols depicted in this story, may not be to some tastes.

"That was the last thing I ever expected to see."

“Was it?” Neil leaned back in the wooden pew. He glanced down at his hands and picked at a dry cuticle. “They’ve been together for years. ‘Bout time they got married.”

“You believe that? That people who’ve been together a long time should get married?” Alex looked up at the stained-glass window. His eyes moved to the next and then to the front of the church. The enormous crucifix held his gaze.

The wooden cross creaked loudly. Alex’s eyes shot to Neil who seemed not to have heard.

I suffered mightily.

Alex’s prominent Adam’s apple bobbed as he swallowed. Reaching up with long, slim fingers he dabbed at the sweat on his forehead that beaded as Jesus’ eyes moved to meet his own.

Blood ran freely from the Saviour’s five holy wounds.

I suffered mightily … for you, Alex Gleason. For you!

“Oh, shit!” Alex pulled himself up using the pew in front to steady himself. His eyes still fastened on the crucifix.

“Hey, Alex? You okay? What is wro—” Neil peered up and slowly rose.

Alex stumbled from the pew to the aisle. Confetti lay in pretty coloured dots on the tan carpet.

You cannot escape our sight, Alex Gleason. No matter where you run. I suffered for you.

“No! NO.” Alex’s brain screamed while from his mouth came a whisper. “You didn’t suffer for me. You’re not real, you’ve never been real.”

The young man stumbled down the aisle and out of the open doors of the church. Stopping short, he watched from behind the others as they waved off the bride and groom.

Chest heaving, Alex stood, fighting for control, and grateful for the sun and fresh air. From his left front pocket, he pulled a cotton handkerchief and wiped the sweat from his face.

“Whoa, A … what the fu…heck? Are you okay?” Neil whispered as he joined his partner on the cement stairs.

The crowd of family and friends walked down the church steps, laughing and chatting about the lovely and long-awaited wedding of their loved ones.

Alex turned to his boyfriend. “Did you hear anything in there? The wood creaking?”

“What wood? Like the pews you mean?” Confusion breezed across Neil’s handsome face. “It’s an old church and they are original I think, so they could have …”

“No. Forget it. I hate churches and all that goes with them.” Alex pulled himself together. Straightening his tie and shrugging his jacket back into place. “Next wedding in one, don’t ask me to go with you.”

The crowd was now mostly dispersed as people made their way to the parking lot. The pair started slowly down the stairs together. Neil reached for Alex’s hand.

“A … are you okay? What happened in there?” Neil felt the dampness on Alex’s palm. “You seemed … like scared or something.”

“Churches scare me. All that crap does. I hate it.” Alex gave Neil a tight-lipped smile and squeezed his hand. “Thanks.”

A quick grin of acceptance reached Neil’s lips and was gone. “What about receptions? You okay with those?”

“Is it in a church?” Alex released Neil’s hand as they arrived at their silver Volkswagen Golf.

Laughing, Neil unlocked the driver’s side door. “No, it’s at the Marriott.”

Alex slid into the passenger seat and pulled over his seat belt. “Thank Christ for that.”

 

the end

Prompt 848. Thanks to @mollyhousemouse and @Wayne Grayfor reading. Thanks for taking the time to read and comment.
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8 hours ago, Wayne Gray said:

I still love that last line. It makes me chuckle. Nice job with the prompt, tim. 🙂

:) thanks for reading this, more than once, Wayne.  And for all of your support.

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8 hours ago, dughlas said:

Hmmm, interesting concept.  Well done. 

Thanks, doug. i appreciate your comments. i hope you, mum and the pup are well. xo

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8 hours ago, George Richard said:

Great to see your writing!

Thank you, George. i appreciate your comments and support.  i hope you are keeping well and safe.

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8 hours ago, kbois said:

Wow. As a fallen from grace ex-12 year Catholic school girl I can really relate to Alex. Churches scare me too. Rituals that were, at one time, comforting  now makes me shake my head at the young girl I was, brainwashed from birth. 

It took me a long time to go from believer to non-believer and I  still feel a pang of guilt when I tell people I don't believe in one, omniscient, omnipresent being and they question me. I have my reasons. 

At the end of the day, however, I still find myself occasionally uttering the phrase "thank god". I guess old habits die hard. 

Nice little story tim. I really enjoyed it.

i am a much lapsed Catholic. Yet, the Church still has an influence, likely in more ways than i care to admit. Thanks for sharing, k, and for your support and comments.

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8 hours ago, Parker Owens said:

You conveyed a visceral response in this prompt. I could feel the disbelief and fear there. Excellent. 

Thank you, Parker. xo   i appreciate your support and kind comments.  i hope you are both well. xo

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8 hours ago, Reader1810 said:

Alex heard Jesus speaking to him in the church, so he beat a hasty retreat.

As for me, I was ambling along just following Alex to see where he would end up, but wouldn’t you know it, screeching tires distracted me. 

Yep, that’s right, that last line was like screeching tires, so I had to stop and “look”, of course. 

Quite ironic where Alex ended up, eh? 

As always, well done, tim, well done. :) 

yes, quite ironic even to the author. :whistle: Thanks for your comments, Reader xo

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7 hours ago, mollyhousemouse said:

i was raised in the church
raised our kids in the church for several years
it's a place i no longer feel comfortable in
Alex's discomfort, trepidation, i felt that

nicely done tim
 

Thank you, molly.  For your never wavering support and friendship, and for reading this piece for me.  I appreciate you sharing. i think many of us have strong feelings about the Church.  Thanks again for everything xo

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7 hours ago, MichaelS36 said:

Great job, tim. I'm happy to see you writing.

Thank You, Michael. i still feel odd, but we'll see how it goes. xo

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1 hour ago, chris191070 said:

Great use of the prompt. It's great to see you writing tim x

Thanks very much, chris. I appreciate you reading this little piece and your comments. xo

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47 minutes ago, Mikiesboy said:

Thanks, doug. i appreciate your comments. i hope you, mum and the pup are well. xo

We are little brother, thanks. Good to see you writing.

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Well done. We could feel Alex's trepidation during his crisis of faith. As a much lapsed catholic myself, I totally see where his reactions stem from.

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4 hours ago, dughlas said:

We are little brother, thanks. Good to see you writing.

Glad to hear that, and thanks.. xo

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2 hours ago, Freerider said:

This was short and sweet.

Organised mono-theism has a lot of negative influences.

Yes, they do, at least for some of us.  It's good to see you. i hope you are doing well. Take care.

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2 hours ago, Kitt said:

Well done. We could feel Alex's trepidation during his crisis of faith. As a much lapsed catholic myself, I totally see where his reactions stem from.

Thanks Kitt.  It's an odd piece. I pasted the prompt and just wrote, no plans. It just came out as it did. Thanks for reading and for your comments.

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Nice use of the prompt. And the last line had me doing a double-take and then chuckling to myself! It is always a pleasure to read what you write!  Thanks Tim.

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