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    Marty
  • Marty
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  • 04/01/2021
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Marty's Haiku - 15. Untitled (4)

The curve of his neck
His back to me as he eats...
Leaving me breathless.

© Martin Cooke
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Poetry posted in this category are works of fiction. Names, places, characters, events, and incidents are created by the authors' imaginations or are used fictitiously. Any resemblances to actual persons (living or dead), organizations, companies, events, or locales are entirely coincidental.
Note: While authors are asked to place warnings on their stories for some moderated content, everyone has different thresholds, and it is your responsibility as a reader to avoid stories or stop reading if something bothers you. 
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RafaelDe

You have all my senses on heightened alert!

The nape of his neck curving wide into strong shoulders

The clink of fork to plate tinkling in my ears

Musky smell of man...hardness of co...OH...Wait! I think that's Me 😳

Never mind...🤐

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Marty
9 hours ago, Headstall said:

Hell yeah... very nice, Marty!

Thanks for the words of encouragement, Gary. :) 

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3 hours ago, RafaelDe said:

You have all my senses on heightened alert!

The nape of his neck curving wide into strong shoulders

The clink of fork to plate tinkling in my ears

Musky smell of man...hardness of co...OH...Wait! I think that's Me 😳

Never mind...🤐

lol :rofl:

The second observation, on the fourth line of your comment, mirrored what I was initially thinking of, when I was wondering what to say in the third line of the haiku... :yes:

Thanks for the comment, @RafaelDe :) 

 

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On 4/3/2021 at 10:50 PM, Geron Kees said:

Ah. I can actually imagine this picture! :)

 

Thanks, Geron! :thumbup:

Hopefully the picture you imagine is similar to the one I was trying to paint when I penned the piece. :) 

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