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Writing prompts - 3. Nightmare - Poetry Prompt 10 – Italian Sonnet

Nightmare

 

The city calls forth a mirage of smoke.

Streets are traps of labyrinthine darkness.

The wind blows, as if whispering madness

or stirring the folds of a nighttime cloak.

It’s useless to try and escape the yoke

Binding me now to this awful blackness.

I’m lost while the Earth spins on its axis

Trapped till the time of the night clock’s last stroke.

Suddenly, timid, a glimmer of light

Beckoning fleetingly, a silent plea

Offers to free me from this endless night.

I just have to touch it and I’ll be free.

Moving to reach it takes desperate might

A breath of fresh air, hard won, rewards me.

This one time, I'd managed to get tangled up in my sheets as I slept and I was actually choking on a mouthful of pillow until I managed to wake up, gasping. This poem's about that :P
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Headstall

I love this, Albert... 'labyrinthine darkness' ... awesome... in fact, the first four lines grabbed hold of me... I felt your 'Nightmare'... well done... Cheers... Gary...

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AC Benus

I think it's a good portrait of a horrible experience, and one almost all of us can relate to. Like the nightmare itself, this poem draws us in.

 

Thanks for taking the poetry prompt challenge. As an Italian Sonnet, I like how you stayed consistent with a 10-syllable line throughout, and the rhyme scheme is very natural sounding, even with the strict demands of this form.

 

Thanks for posting this powerful piece.

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albertnothlit
On 11/10/2015 05:10 AM, AC Benus said:

I think it's a good portrait of a horrible experience, and one almost all of us can relate to. Like the nightmare itself, this poem draws us in.

 

Thanks for taking the poetry prompt challenge. As an Italian Sonnet, I like how you stayed consistent with a 10-syllable line throughout, and the rhyme scheme is very natural sounding, even with the strict demands of this form.

 

Thanks for posting this powerful piece.

*whew!* I was afraid it would suck. thanks for the review!

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albertnothlit
On 11/10/2015 04:50 AM, Headstall said:

I love this, Albert... 'labyrinthine darkness' ... awesome... in fact, the first four lines grabbed hold of me... I felt your 'Nightmare'... well done... Cheers... Gary...

Thanks, Gary! My pillow has tried to kill me a couple times now, generating nightmares in the process.

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Mikiesboy

Dude, listen to me, pillows are not food!

Seriously, this is soo good. I absolutley love it. It was so dark and so descriptive, it was powerful and scary.
Great job,
tim

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albertnothlit
On 11/10/2015 08:24 AM, Mikiesboy said:

Dude, listen to me, pillows are not food!

 

Seriously, this is soo good. I absolutley love it. It was so dark and so descriptive, it was powerful and scary.

Great job,

tim

I have the secret suspicion my pillow hates me.

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