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My Shorts, and Flash Fictions - 3. Radiated Love

Submission for the Newsletter Game: Pick 2. My Words were "Dust" and "Gamma-Ray." I had to alter the starting sentence a bit, but I made it work.

Simon opened the front door and found a radioactive Dust storm headed his way. Simon stared, shocked, but then Simon remembered he had a Gamma-Ray shield and…. He prepared himself to venture out into the wind. It has been over five years since the gamma-ray burst struck the Earth at an odd angle; killing all life on a quarter of the planet when it did so. Now the survivors of the extinction level event were doing their best to do just that, to survive.

Simon was leaving the safety of the fallout shelter, not because he wanted to, but because he had to. The food supplies were dwindling down to low reserves, and radiation treatment kits were running low. Having drawn the short straw, and now had to venture out to the nearest Survivor Aid Station, in hopes of getting more supplies.

Using the gamma-ray shield, Simon faced the incoming dust storm. He pulled his partner closed to him, behind the protection, and ran for the radiation shielded transport vehicle. They were almost there when the dust storm hit them. “Don’t breathe it in!”

Holding their breaths, the two enter the airlock and hit the decontamination process. Letting the chemical neutralizers wash the gamma-ray radiated dust from their bodies and the gamma-ray shield. “Are you good Fred?” Simon asks of his partner.

“Yeah, I am. Just wish I knew why we got chosen, again,” Fred stated matter-of-factly. “I think the lottery is rigged.”

“Yeah, I agree, but we are the Shelter’s only gay couple,” Simons leans in to steal a kiss. “Our DNA is on ice, but we are not breeding, so expendable.”

“That statement is so wrong, on so many levels,” Fred retorted. “You driving, or are you handling the guns this time.”

“I’ll drive there and back. You’re the better shot Hun, and frankly, you can let out some of that anger on highjackers.”

Fred only grunts a response as the couple takes their positions in the vehicle. Soon the five-ton assault and cargo transport roars to life and heads down the road.

 

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Had fun with this little scene. This was the second one written, as the first one was just bad. Hope you like it.
Copyright © 2017 BHopper2; All Rights Reserved.
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Mikiesboy

Well i see things dont change in the future or on other planets. Sad, but you did a good job here.  tim 

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Valkyrie
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This was an interesting scene that conveyed a lot of information.  

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Freerider

This turned out different from what I expected after the first sentences.

A sad, yet loving, story in so few lines. Well done!

 

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Brayon
6 hours ago, Dolores Esteban said:

Great use of the two words and an interesting story.

Thank you. The first incarnation of the story was more Marvel Superhero, but it didn't flow for me. This one, hit me right after I saw a rerun on Science Channel about a Gamma-Ray Burst.

6 hours ago, Lyssa said:

I hope, the two of them will make it back safe to the shelter! Well done. I enjoyed reading.

In my mind, they did get back safe to the shelter. Though what happened on the trip is a story unto itself. Thank you. :)

5 hours ago, Mikiesboy said:

Well i see things dont change in the future or on other planets. Sad, but you did a good job here.  tim 

Thank you, Tim. I went a bit dark on the treatment of the Gay couple, and it was hard to write and think about. My Beta reader said, "it captures what a lot of survivalists would think." Still, thinking because you're not breeding, you're useless is completely alien to me.

3 hours ago, Valkyrie said:

This was an interesting scene that conveyed a lot of information.  

Thanks, Valkyrie. That's what I was hoping for. Trying to inform, in such a small amount.

2 hours ago, Freerider said:

This turned out different from what I expected after the first sentences.

A sad, yet loving, story in so few lines. Well done!

 

Thank you! I seem to have a theme of Gay Couples in my writings, trying to show love in different situations. I think I need to branch out some.

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Ron

I liked it, imaginative and gritty (no pun intended [well, maybe a little pun was intended]). 

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Brayon
1 hour ago, Ron said:

I liked it, imaginative and gritty (no pun intended [well, maybe a little pun was intended]). 

Thank you! At one point, I though I might have to break out the Black-n-Decker, to clean off some of the dustiness.

1 hour ago, aditus said:

An unexpected turn of events. Harsh, but good.

Thank you. Once I got the overall theme, (thank you, Morgan Freeman,) I felt it had to be harsh, once I wrote in the Extinction Level Event. I'm just glad it turned out good, for being short.

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Defiance19

 Great job.. I liked how you used your words..   I agree with Fred. The reasoning for being chosen, wrong on so many levels.

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Cia
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Funny, I have a post-apoc story where Earth gets hit with a beam of gamma radiation from a near-Earth supernova. :P I love this genre. You did a good job creating a feeling of heat and desolation with the oncoming storm creating danger.

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Brayon
2 hours ago, Defiance19 said:

 Great job.. I liked how you used your words..   I agree with Fred. The reasoning for being chosen, wrong on so many levels.

Thank you! I agree it is wrong on so many levels. I wrote it, and it still makes me mad. LOL

1 hour ago, Drew Espinosa said:

BH, you left me hungering for more! :D 

Thanks, Drew. I'm sorely tempted to turn this into a full story. Given its nature, the 2017 Fall Anthology Theme The Fall Out would be a perfect fit.

35 minutes ago, Cia said:

Funny, I have a post-apoc story where Earth gets hit with a beam of gamma radiation from a near-Earth supernova. :P I love this genre. You did a good job creating a feeling of heat and desolation with the oncoming storm creating danger.

 

Thank you, Cia. I've been a SciFi junkie since birth. Mom said I used to play with Rockets and Spacemen long before I could remember it.

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mollyhousemouse

That was well done!

My first year at college was near some sand dunes.  Your story brought to mind the layer of grit that covered everything after the wind came through.  ....shudder....

 

Thanks for sharing!

 

 

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ghanbrews

Nice setting you created! And I'm sure I would be thinking the same as Simon if I was in their situation. Every time I see or read post apocalyptic fiction I get stuck with this thought of how LGBT people would be treated. 

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Brayon
16 minutes ago, mollyhousemouse said:

That was well done!

My first year at college was near some sand dunes.  Your story brought to mind the layer of grit that covered everything after the wind came through.  ....shudder....

 

Thanks for sharing!

 

 

 

You're welcome, and thank you for reading! I know all about that grit, lol. As an FL Native who grew up on the coast, we had salt and sand from the beach blowing on the cars all the time. Was a pain at times.

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Brayon
2 minutes ago, ghanbrews said:

Nice setting you created! And I'm sure I would be thinking the same as Simon if I was in their situation. Every time I see or read post apocalyptic fiction I get stuck with this thought of how LGBT people would be treated. 

 

Thank you! Same here on wondering what life would be like in a PA setting for Homosexuals. I felt in this case, that the Leaders of this shelter felt that Breeding a new Population was more important than anything else. And if you're not doing that, well you're no use to the collective. I've read a story once, where all men regardless of sexual orientation were required to sire so many children. If you refused, then you were killed.

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comicfan

oooh. Nice twist to this. Really enjoyed but wonder where the story goes from here. Sad to hear this wasn't their first time out and it is probably because they are gay. Hope to see more.

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Brayon
2 hours ago, comicfan said:

oooh. Nice twist to this. Really enjoyed but wonder where the story goes from here. Sad to hear this wasn't their first time out and it is probably because they are gay. Hope to see more.

 

Thanks! I am tempted to further the story along and may do so once one of the three open projects I have been completed.

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Brayon
On 6/4/2017 at 5:23 PM, Drew Espinosa said:

BH, you left me hungering for more! :D 

 

On 6/18/2017 at 10:28 PM, comicfan said:

oooh. Nice twist to this. Really enjoyed but wonder where the story goes from here. Sad to hear this wasn't their first time out and it is probably because they are gay. Hope to see more.

 

Ahem...

 

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Kitt

Ok, now i understand why i could swear i read this but had not left a comment or like!

 

Perhaps you should think about going back and cleaning up your other prompts with your improved writing skills?

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Brayon
2 hours ago, Kitt said:

Ok, now i understand why i could swear i read this but had not left a comment or like!

 

Perhaps you should think about going back and cleaning up your other prompts with your improved writing skills?

Thanks, Kitt. When I was looking for an idea for Fight Back, this one immediately came to mind. So, it got expanded. 🙂 

I'm slowly going back and redoing my older stories. Not sure about the prompts, but I may end up doing it.

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