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  • Celethiel
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  • 05/01/2014
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The Bloody Fetter - 3. I Wish I Had Tried

I Wish I Had Tried
By Celethiel

What have I done?!
I did not want this
Sin weighs a ton
Deep as an abyss

I tried to keep him
Even with a kiss
It all looks so grim
I cannot do this

But here I sit
And he may not last
I should have quit
I know that he asked

Just what will they think?
Dad will be pissed
And my heart does sink
At who I kissed

Adrift at sea
Like a broken bone
That will be me
I will be alone

It all hurts inside
I want to cry
I wish I had tried
I want to die

God let him live
All I said is true
Let him forgive
I did want him too

Copyright © 2014 Celethiel; All Rights Reserved.
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Poetry posted in this category are works of fiction. Names, places, characters, events, and incidents are created by the authors' imaginations or are used fictitiously. Any resemblances to actual persons (living or dead), organizations, companies, events, or locales are entirely coincidental.
Note: While authors are asked to place warnings on their stories for some moderated content, everyone has different thresholds, and it is your responsibility as a reader to avoid stories or stop reading if something bothers you. 
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joann414

Made my heart cry Cele. Beautiful and provokingly sad. Such deep writing yet such a believable scenario. Wonderful job! :worship:

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Bill W

Each of the three poems were sad. The emtions were very evident and made a power impact. Congrats on three jobs well done.

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nostic

Trying and failing hurts, but not trying is worse, it hurts more and the regrets destroy the soul. Just despair please. You have talentz. :P

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Celethiel
On 05/02/2014 06:03 AM, joann414 said:
Made my heart cry Cele. Beautiful and provokingly sad. Such deep writing yet such a believable scenario. Wonderful job! :worship:
which is why i chose to do it :D thanx for reading and the review.
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Celethiel
On 05/02/2014 06:38 AM, carringtonrj said:
a sad story. some strong images. thanks for sharing.
thanx for reading. ^_^
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Celethiel
On 05/02/2014 12:02 PM, Bill W said:
Each of the three poems were sad. The emtions were very evident and made a power impact. Congrats on three jobs well done.
thanx ^_^
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Celethiel
On 05/02/2014 02:52 PM, nostic said:
Trying and failing hurts, but not trying is worse, it hurts more and the regrets destroy the soul. Just despair please. You have talentz. :P
*dispairs!* :P
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comicfan

Ouch. You really like to bruise the reader with this. Such pain and so close to the surface here, Cele. Perfectly clear and yet knowing that the words spoken too late are just guilt to eat away him.

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Celethiel
On 05/04/2014 01:37 PM, comicfan said:
Ouch. You really like to bruise the reader with this. Such pain and so close to the surface here, Cele. Perfectly clear and yet knowing that the words spoken too late are just guilt to eat away him.
yes it is... guilt to eat away at him... guilt and fear.
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TheFoxxehAssassin

You have an excellent control over your verse and rhyme scheme; you're able to retain the structure and format while making it flow naturally.

The story itself was just heartbreaking. Definitely brought a tear to my eye.

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Celethiel
On 06/11/2014 03:44 PM, TheFoxxehAssassin said:
You have an excellent control over your verse and rhyme scheme; you're able to retain the structure and format while making it flow naturally.

The story itself was just heartbreaking. Definitely brought a tear to my eye.

Thank you. ^_^
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