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2013 - Spring - A Night To Remember Entry

I Can’t Even Remember - 1. I Can’t Even Remember

I Can’t Even Remember

I am now back in Winchester
After what I shall call an “interesting” weekend
Singing, playing bass and tattooing is my life
I won't fall like the rest of them
They've come and gone with the wind
At this point your mental blackout begins and
The screen fades to black until the next day
I want a night to remember

Today is a day I would rather forget
I keep trying to turn the corner
But I just can't seem to do it
My lazy, awkward boyfriend
Suddenly remembers it's Valentine's Day
It was a day that promised fireworks and fizzbangs
But, in the end, the pain and embarrassment
Was something to learn from

I want a night I won't forget
Dramatic, suspenseful, moving, intense
In a play so unapologetically and
Unforgivingly dense, every word counts
I want a night to remember
And maybe ease my other pains
I can't even remember the last time
I saw all the stars in the sky

2013 Dolores Esteban
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2013 - Spring - A Night To Remember Entry
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carringtonrj

This works really well. It has elements of the fragmentary and dislocating - as in cut up poems. But it also hangs together really well and reads like a kind of index to someone's soul. I think it works beautifully. Great job.

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Dolores Esteban
On 03/15/2013 05:29 AM, carringtonrj said:
This works really well. It has elements of the fragmentary and dislocating - as in cut up poems. But it also hangs together really well and reads like a kind of index to someone's soul. I think it works beautifully. Great job.
Thank you, carringtonrj. Glad you liked the poem.
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Ieshwar

Through well-thought words and lines, this poem gives an insight about the poet's life- about what her dreams/yearnings, her problems... The "episodic" set of lines felt like vignettes of her experiences, her daily life. And they all come together, telling us about her life. Nicely done.

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Yettie One

Sometimes the normality of life can make things seem so mundane. How often have I muttered words similar to these to myself?

Kind of like looking in the mirror.

Well written Dolores, even if a somewhat frustrating feeling in the words. :hug:

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comicfan

I'd never heard of flarf poetry before. Being an English major that sent me out to find out what it was. Interesting approach to the subject Dolores. I understand it and think you did a great job with it. Nicely done. Amazing how some words and pieces of ideas can communicate so much.

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Dolores Esteban
On 03/15/2013 10:42 AM, Yettie One said:
Sometimes the normality of life can make things seem so mundane. How often have I muttered words similar to these to myself?

Kind of like looking in the mirror.

Well written Dolores, even if a somewhat frustrating feeling in the words. :hug:

Thanks for reading and commenting. Glad you liked the piece. The narrator is not happy, but luckily the author of the poem and the narrator are not the same person ;)
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Dolores Esteban
On 03/15/2013 09:07 AM, Ieshwar said:
Through well-thought words and lines, this poem gives an insight about the poet's life- about what her dreams/yearnings, her problems... The "episodic" set of lines felt like vignettes of her experiences, her daily life. And they all come together, telling us about her life. Nicely done.
Thanks for your kind review, Ieshwar. The poem luckily doesn't recount my daily life, although I can understand the narrator's frustration. God, people, do I come across so frustrated? Your reviews really make me ponder. Thanks again for reading and commenting. I appreciate it. :)
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Dolores Esteban
On 03/15/2013 05:25 PM, comicfan said:
I'd never heard of flarf poetry before. Being an English major that sent me out to find out what it was. Interesting approach to the subject Dolores. I understand it and think you did a great job with it. Nicely done. Amazing how some words and pieces of ideas can communicate so much.
Thank you, comicfan. I'm happy you liked the piece. Flarf poetry is interesting. I've experimented with Google search results. They are sometimes totally meaningless, but now and then they tell a whole story. I will submit another Flarf piece to the Poetry Anthology. Thanks again for reading and commenting. :)
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lilansui

Well, the poem spoke to me, I like the story and the message of longing behind the words. I love your interpretation of the theme. It's a beautiful, emotional pain. Great job. :)

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Dolores Esteban
On 03/16/2013 05:55 AM, lilansui said:
Well, the poem spoke to me, I like the story and the message of longing behind the words. I love your interpretation of the theme. It's a beautiful, emotional pain. Great job. :)
Thank you very much for reading and leaving a review. I'm happy you liked the poem. :)
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Fishwings

I wasn't expecting this actually but this poem really spoke to me. It's absolutely beautiful. I still don't exactly know what flarf poetry is but this is great. I love the lines:

 

"They've come and gone with the wind

At this point your mental blackout begins and

The screen fades to black until the next day

I want a night to remember."

That creates a lovely image -- whole piece was a play one images and emotions using quite minimal and non-purple prosey words. Cunning use of the theme's title throughout the rest of the poem. Amazing job D.Esteban!!

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Dolores Esteban
On 03/16/2013 05:53 PM, Luc Rosen said:
I wasn't expecting this actually but this poem really spoke to me. It's absolutely beautiful. I still don't exactly know what flarf poetry is but this is great. I love the lines:

 

"They've come and gone with the wind

At this point your mental blackout begins and

The screen fades to black until the next day

I want a night to remember."

That creates a lovely image -- whole piece was a play one images and emotions using quite minimal and non-purple prosey words. Cunning use of the theme's title throughout the rest of the poem. Amazing job D.Esteban!!

Thank you very much for reading and commenting. Flarf poetry is an interesting concept and fun to write. I'm happy you enjoyed the poem.
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Percy

Humph. For some reason my review last night didn't post. Anyway, I'm glad you posted this. I enjoyed it and I enjoyed reading up on flarf poetry which I was unfamiliar with until I saw this. Clever and fun!

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Bill W

Like many others, I had never heard of flarf poetry and had to research the term. One thing I didn't have to look up, however, was the feelings that your poem evoked. The sadness, loneliness and even a touch of desperation were fairly evident. A touching entry. Thanks for sharing.

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Dolores Esteban
On 03/17/2013 06:11 AM, Percy said:
Humph. For some reason my review last night didn't post. Anyway, I'm glad you posted this. I enjoyed it and I enjoyed reading up on flarf poetry which I was unfamiliar with until I saw this. Clever and fun!
Thank you, Percy. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. I should have posted a brief description of flarf poetry. Thanks for taking the time to read up on it. :)
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Dolores Esteban
On 03/17/2013 06:33 AM, Michael9344 said:
Really interesting poem. Really good one.:)
Thanks for reading and commenting, Michael. I'm glad you liked the poem. :)
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Dolores Esteban
On 03/17/2013 05:46 PM, Bill W said:
Like many others, I had never heard of flarf poetry and had to research the term. One thing I didn't have to look up, however, was the feelings that your poem evoked. The sadness, loneliness and even a touch of desperation were fairly evident. A touching entry. Thanks for sharing.
Thank you, Bill. I'm glad you liked the poem and could relate to it. Thanks also for taking the time and researching on flarf poetry. I really should have posted a brief introduction to it. :)
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K.C.

I admit, I try to be a cool dad and know all the new hip stuff...but I had to Google Flarf too, LOL :P

Poetry, hmmmmmm I have a love/hate relationship with poetry, since lots of it I have trouble relating to but I loved this. The simple verse was easy to relate to. A wonderful piece, well done! :thumbup:

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Dolores Esteban
On 03/18/2013 07:37 AM, K.C. said:
I admit, I try to be a cool dad and know all the new hip stuff...but I had to Google Flarf too, LOL :P

Poetry, hmmmmmm I have a love/hate relationship with poetry, since lots of it I have trouble relating to but I loved this. The simple verse was easy to relate to. A wonderful piece, well done! :thumbup:

Thanks for reading and leaving a comment, KC Grim. I'm glad you liked the poem. :)
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