A story in scenes of dialog, part 1
This one's been kicking around for ages. Yes, before you mention it, I write far too much dialog -- with Yankee (and some of the other stories I've got in progress) you see the third draft. The first draft's generally 80% dialog, the second has all the intervening bits added, and the third's the cleaned up version after getting a twice-over from an editor.
This story, for reasons I never did figure out but accept anyway, takes place entirely inside an apartment. That's not to say that the characters never leave, nor that they don't interact outside the apartment, just that the reader never sees those bits.
I expect that's a technique that's rarely, if ever, used for good reason, but what the heck. Never claimed this was high art. (Nor sober art, for that matter)
A story in scenes of dialog
"Who are you?" Mike stood dripping in the doorway of his kitchen, dressed only in a beat-up old Battlestar Galactica towel.
"I'm an elf, kid. Haven't you ever seen one before?"
"What? I don't believe in elves!"
"Wouldn't worry about it. We don't believe in you, either. Got any beer?" He started rummaging around in the refrigerator. Clinks, thuds and the odd muffled scream came drifting out. "You really ought to clean this out more often," he said, eying something green, limp, and fuzzy on the middle shelf.
"Wait a minute. Elves don't drink beer!"
"We would if you kept this fridge better stocked. Nice towel, by the way. Quite the fashion statement."
"What?"
"Just don't believe I'm drinking a beer. It should be easy." The elf popped the top off a bottle of Sam Adams and knocked back half of it in a single gulp.
Mike could see that he was quickly getting in over his head, so he decided to try a different tack. "What exactly are you doing in my apartment?"
"Drinking beer, of course. Why, what does it look like?"
"I was thinking in broader terms
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