[Skylights] Efiction Reviews for A Day in a Life of Misery

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Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: mogwai

 

I certainly did not care for the ending and the apparent QUICK wrap up...

Count me in as one who would like the tale to proceed on. Maybe

getting into the probable fallout of his mom's death...maybe try to

revive Jack as a friend/relationship or whatever. Dad's re-appearence

and custody issues, etc.

Date: 06/14/2010 09:01 AM [Respond]

 

 

 

 

Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Clovis

 

This is utterly brilliant!!! so many quotable snippets, so sparse

and tight the prose. You capture exactly in every cadence the mood of

the lad, his pain, his frustration with himself -- the whole Greek

tragedy of the situation. it is real!!! well done. I want to write just

like this not a word too many, always the exact phrase. If you just sat

down and put this on paper in one go you're a genius! You've even laced

the tale with humour and that takes talent! "He’s the only person who

can stand to be around me for longer than ten minutes without suffering

a nervous break-down or entertaining thoughts of homicide and suicide.

In that order."Author's Response: . Thank you very much! That made me feel a whole lot better about the story...and boosted my ego, whooooh.

I liked that quote too

Date: 04/05/2010 03:13 AM

 

 

 

 

Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Nephylim

 

Don't count on it. It's an awesome story. It's just my kind of

intense. The way things unfold are consistent and dramatic. I can

believe in your charcter which you neither name nor describe, That is

an awesome feat. I love this story Please write more.Author's Response: You'll

like the story I'm writing right now though. Due to be out...in a long

time LOL. But sorry, unless people gang up on me, there will be no

continuation!

Date: 04/04/2010 05:52 AM

 

 

 

 

Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Tim Price

 

Don't you dare continue it. The story would lose its impact if you did.Author's Response: Thanks,

I wasn't planning on it. After all what's the point of continuing

something abstract like this. "HE" doesn't even have a name. He is

really "YOU." And you decide the ending. As much as people would like it

to be continued, I don't feel I will, though I might make edits, since

I barely read this over. I know what I'd do after THE END, do you?

Date: 04/03/2010 07:39 PM

 

 

 

 

Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: taina1959

 

As the saying goes... "You never know what you've got til it's

gone". Sometimes we push people away when we need them the most.

Depression is such a bitch! I hope Jack is going to come back to him

once he knows what happened with his mom. Great little tale dear...Author's Response: Your

reviews are always a pleasure to read . Sometimes we push even

though we know better, and all we can see is ME ME ME. I'm hurting! I'm

allowed to be a bitch because they all hurt ME! And how you hurt others

isn't as important. Until you see the consequences. It's up to you

then, how you'd like to go. If you noticed, I didn't name 'him' the

entire time. And as for Jack. In my mind, how I interpret it (though

anyone is allowed to see it differently) waited long enough for him.

It's too late. As he says, they're all gone and he's left holding the

shattered pieces.

Date: 04/03/2010 06:39 PM

 

 

 

 

Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Stambuki

 

It was good, I just wish there was more...you should definitely consider continuing on with the story :)Author's Response: Thank you for the suggestion. I do know what would happen next, though. It's what YOU would do.

Date: 04/02/2010 04:14 PM

 

 

 

 

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