Bugeye Reviews: Grump II

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Title: Chapter 6: Dinner for Two

Reviewer: Nephylim

 

Oh yes. This is good stuff Sam. I keep forgetting to rate so I

shall go and do it now. This story is more like a prose

poem. The words tell more than the story. I love the way you tell us

what the characters are thinking as well as what they are saying and it is VERY

intriguing to find out why Jack feels like Peter

Date: 10/21/2009 02:21 AM

 

 

 

Title: Chapter 5: Restart Reviewer: Nephylim

 

Ooooh... how interesting. Isn't it strange how the dynamic changes so much

with the introduction of just one person... or is it? Fine work Sam. The

tension at the club was awesome.

Date: 10/20/2009 02:06 AM

 

 

 

Title: Chapter 4: Car Talk Reviewer: Nephylim

 

This has taken an unusual turn. What an idea? Half the football

team dating the other half? Coming to a high school near you...

So Sam is a trendsetter all of a sudden... the cool one, the popular one, the

one everyone is talking about. And he doesn't like it. Meh... he'll

get used to it. He just needs to relax and have some fun. I have to

admit I was wondering from the time Sam asked him, whether Jack was going to be

a replacement in The Circle for Peter. I am still wondering.

You have to care Sam... caring's what it's all about. You'd be

surprised how much light one small candle flame can

generate.Author's Response:

Nephylim I need a favor. Not for me but for Tom (lostone) he has a post on

Lounge under Cheaper to Buy. He is from Idaho. I promised him a reputation vote

for a story about Idaho. Since I am banned I cannot give him one. Would you give

him one? I have no right to ask but I hate to think I left him wondering? He

first posted on the shower/bath post. Please. I wont bother you again. Sorry to

ask you.

Date: 09/30/2009 08:23 AM

 

 

 

Title: Chapter 3: First Date Surprise

Reviewer: Nephylim

 

 

What fun. You are full of surprises as ever. I wonder if Jack

will join in the dance. Grump's mother sounds like me, only I don't have a

room for unfinished projects... with me it's the whole damn house. Of

course I do finish some of the things I start... depends how important they

are. Coincidentally I have two little cousins called Jack and Sam... Sam

is a feisty little thing. Everyone things that Jack is the 'good boy' and Sam

just trouble in a compacy bullet like package. I happen to think that Sam

is the one with all the potential. Maybe I just like trouble... they say

like calls to like.

I wonder what kind of trouble Sam in going to get into next.

Date: 09/23/2009 04:44 PM

 

 

 

Title: Picture: Grump and Sally Dance

Reviewer: Nephylim

 

 

I was about to ask I like the introduction of the circle. I

like circles, cycles, life, death, seasons, love, life. As above so below,

easy come easy go. Only it's never easy. To dance you have to feel

the music. Do you feel the music Sam? It's everywhere. It's in

your words and in your pictures so, by definition it has to be in you. The

music is strong in these pictures... I hope your music is joyous... maybe salsa,

maybe jazz... definately not pop. A little thrash now and again never hurt

and classical can take you on a journey too.... ah such a journey. words,

images, music.... The journey continues.

Date: 09/20/2009 03:31 PM

 

 

 

Title: Chapter 1: Prologue Reviewer: Nephylim

 

Ah but there is more than one way to skin a cat, more than one way to dance.

The whole of life is a dance and you can sit on the sidelines or leap for the

stars.... I am a spinner, a bouncer and a leaper (NOT leper)

Date: 08/23/2009 06:00 AM

 

 

 

Title: Chapter 1: Prologue Reviewer: Nephylim

 

Well that was unexpected. What a different Grump to the beginning of

the last one. Edit your stories my dear, they are too good to have those

annoying little slips to distract the reader.

A new day, a new dance. You dance so well and I do so love to

dance. Well done on a very interesting beginning.Author's

Response:

You are so right about all the booboos. I hope I exorcised all the little

spooks. I get so excited I don't read what I write, I just sort of speak in

tongues and roll on the floor and type with my toes. Don't let me get away with

it, preacher man. If there was a god of the unexpected, he would rule the

heavens. If you saw me dance you would... laugh... hard... it would be dangerous

to you and any one within fifty feet. Thanks Nephylim. Love Sam

Date: 08/22/2009 02:09 PM