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strife
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Correct. And agreed about Denzel, sigh.....
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LEIGE Lusty engagement is great entertainment ENGAG
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onrushes
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Do you want to know a secret?
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Alcoholic pilot manages landing, 6 dead
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reaccede
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Dickshooter (ID/USA)
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Strawberry (3 different ones in CA/USA)
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pycnidium
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George of the Jungle?
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SIGHT Silly ingrate go home twerp TWERP
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VELVT Vaulting elves lunging volcanic tricks LUNGE
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Why, why, why, Delilah?
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Two Eggs (FL/USA)
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onuses
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Nutter Fort (WV/USA)
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ondogram
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IEVES Inherent evil vigorously entraps souls EVILS
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Eyebrow (Saskatchewan)
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Moclips (WA/USA)
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Something's strange with this chapter. It starts out with "Jahke yawned like a lion..." and ends with "...held tight to the boy as he drifted asleep." Then the the next paragraph is"Jahke yawned like a lion..." and ends with "...held tight to the boy as he drifted asleep" again. This is an error, right? Not some odd time warp situation?
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I'm going to miss these characters. A wonderful story and I enjoyed the Cole and Jared interaction as well as the supporting characters. Got a kick out of the two youngest siblings, Chase and Cory. I thought that the addition of an adopted son was perfect in the Epilogue. I'm also one of the ones who thought that Wilton and Shelby might get together. Great read and thank you for sharing your work with us. [side note: I read one of you replies stating that you were going to publish this. I noticed quite a few technical errors (i.e. incorrect pronouns, missing words, etc) so I hope you can get someone to help proof and edit before you publish.]
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Umpire (AR/USA)
