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At the time I finished the chapter, I thought there was a moral dilemma presented by Ilya. After sleeping on it and some deliberation I decided there should have been no discussion, this could have been resolved by a look and a nod between Jeff and Paul. By that time I had already posted the chapter, so I decided to just let it stand. thanks for your reviews, which I guess are now called comments. Jim
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I really should have known that would be a deal breaker for Paul. Perhaps if we had listened in on their "behind the Tahoe discussion" that would have become blatantly obvious. Thanks for adding your comments, Jim
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Yeah, I think I was looking to take the easy out. There is a lot of conflict ahead for our heroes. You know even if Joe gets the town moving in the right direction, there will be very serious backlash. I don't see the boys putting away their concealed weapons any time soon. I don't see this whole investigation being very gay neutral, don't even dream about gay friendly. thanks for posting your comments. (I guess they are the new "reviews", Jim
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I just tried to respond to reviews. It got posted to the wrong review. I don't know how to select a particular review in order to respond. Please help.
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I am having problems responding to reviews. So bear with me. Did you notice I used your instructions on quotation marks. Yeah, I agree on all those points. initially I was wondering what would happen if they went over to the dark side... maybe it was just too late at night or early morning. It might be easier to let Ilya take care of things, but I don't see it happening. thanks for your reviews and help in making my story better. Jim
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Yeah, I think you are right. I got an email, before I posted this chapter, that "they will show a small town that being gay is normal". That told me I didn't really have as much of a dilemma as I had first thought. Still I wanted to see what others think. thanks for taking your time to post reviews on my story. Jim
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As the phone screen faded, Jeff turned to face the big Russian, “Ilya, what about Tom's place, has he showed up there yet?” “No sir. We found apparel, toiletries and personal effects, indicative of a single gay male. We found matching fingerprints on personal, uh, objects. No disarray or detritus suggesting he left in a hurry. We surmise he is still in the local area.” Jeff's face got a blank look as though he was deep in thought. Smiling, he slapped his palm against the tableto
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Epilogues and New Beginnings
sojourn commented on Mann Ramblings's story chapter in Epilogues and New Beginnings
Well, I should have reviewed more than the first and last chapters. But, it was too important to get to the rest of the story. It was a smooth story with a satisfying ending. It answered the most pressing questions and left us hopeful for the future of these three characters. Thanks for sharing, Jim -
WOW! I think I will let the characters answer those questions and hopefully more in the next few chapters. But I did here a rumor that there may be hackers in Russia. Maybe that's a way for a desperate young man to survive, even with a thick accent. Insert appropriately snug emoji here. Thanks for your reviews. They are always interesting. Jim
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I see you leave of reviews without a response. I just want to say, for a first time effort... Buddy, you hit this one out of the ballpark! Great Job! Jim
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I am glad you are enjoying the story. Children often embarrass their parents with their blatant honesty as well as their surprisingly keen insight. Believe me, I raised five of them. Thanks for taking your time to post a review. Jim
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LOL! I am flattered. I agree, Maria is wise beyond her years. Thanks for taking your time review my story. It made me smile. Reviews and emails keep me motivated. Jim
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During my Naval career I often thought about a quote credited to Admiral Arleigh Burke, "The difference between a good Naval Officer and a great Naval Officer is about six seconds." Tom needed to have heard that distinction before the shower scene. Thank you for taking your time out to post your reviews. I look forward to them. Jim
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I can't say I disagree. I have always seen guns as tools, even when I served in the military. The only defense I offer is that in my story the protagonists carry only as self defense. As far as a failing society goes... I wish it were not so self evident. Thanks for the review, I appreciate your your sharing your opinions and experiences. Jim
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Maybe that's why he is Russian back to the ranch. Hmmm. Thanks for the review.
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Seems each new chapter answers a question only to raise two more... to paraphrase another review. Who says crime doesn't pay? Thanks for taking time to review. Jim
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I have nothing against polygamy. In fact I think monogamous relationships often fail due to one partner acting upon a polygamous desire. But, I don't see it for Jeff and Paul. After all "a guy can look". Like I said, I look forward to your reviews. Thanks again, Jim
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Thanks for your reviews. They bring a smile to my face. Jim
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I figure it's like a strip tease, exposing a little at a time. If I started the story saying, "meet Jeffrey Grant Adams, he is incredibly wealthy" a reader has a right to expect certain amenities, influence and power. As he was introduced I think Jeffrey was shown to have fears and foibles and self doubt so that he might strike a cord with readers. That way readers perceive his wealth as a muscle he is learning to exercise and like his Uncle Joe influence he is just now beginning to wield. This way we learn as we grow... as the story grows. It's one a.m. Probably not the best time to reply to a review. Sorry if I got long winded. Thanks for your reviews, Jim
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Who am I to refuse free help. I am looking forward to your chapter four. I am a follower. Thanks again for your reviews. Jim
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Hey thanks, I could not have paid cash for a review I like more. Thanks for taking your time out to review. Jim
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Brings to mind "A New Life" a really great story the author was just unable to finish it. One of the things I check for and appreciate is the "complete" status. All being said thank you for taking the time to review. Jim
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Dinner was grilled steaks for the adults, while Maria was happy with chicken nuggets and mac and cheese. There was some discussion concerning asparagus. She insisted it looked too “yucky” for food. Paul compromised saying she could eat it with her fingers if she would try it. Maria studiously watched as the grownups ate the green stalks. She picked up a stalk and examined it suspiciously. Finally, she bit off what could, by stretching one's imagination, be considered 'a small bite'. Most everybo
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Sorry, I just found your review. And you know it's messy, how? About the ball play, considered volley ball... almost went for soccer... Thanks for taking time to review. Sorry i was so late in responding. I usually respond much better when stimulated.
