Al Norris
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This was almost one of the scenarios I imagined... Except the whole "Like father, like son" bit. I didn't imagine the almost mirror images!
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Dallas... Speed limit 65, so let's do 80 and not leave more than 3 feet between us, or someone else will move in. Then there is the off and on ramps, you know, the acceleration and deceleration ramps? Between 100 to 150 feet. And you had better floor it to get on or brake like hell to get off! And that's just the freeways!
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I have never been to Boston but... I used to think that the traffic was bad in L.A. Then I found out about the idiots in San Francisco. They are just plain nuts... until... Dallas! OMG! And you say that Boston and its drivers are worse? Glad I've never been there.
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A great rule of thumb: Think of the "A" as being American and the "E" as being England. Either way, the word means exactly the same regardless of who is writing or speaking. If using the word that is the name of a product, then always use the spelling that the product has. Earl Grey Tea or Grey Poupon, are examples.
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Life would never be dull if we all had a Cassie. Draw... Stalemate... I called it! Living vicariously? Lol!!! Meeting Daddy? I have no clue how that is going to turn out.
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I would think we don't want a victor. Think of the consequences! Sometimes a friendly stalemate is best.
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You guys are just weird! A triple layer Chocolate cake. A triple berry (raspberry, blackberry, boysenberry) compote as the two binding layers. Chocolate fudge frosting cementing the entire thing. Then ring the cake with Krapfen (an austrian pastry, rumored to be the origins of the doughnut) filled with fresh strawberries. Yes, yes... I know the wedding has already been written. So what! 😋
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Oh, you pulled it off all right! I loved the description of the tattoo. The picture that formed in my mind was gorgeous. The kicker though, was both of them seeing their auras! Simply perfect.
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That was an extremely nice buildup for the reveal. Between the sexual tension in the story and the ______ tension in the comments, I'm chuckling all over!
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It's not often I agree with Will. This is one of those times. I can't imagine how difficult it had to have been to write that scene, yet have it come off as natural as it did. Amazing!
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Starbucks has always been over-rated, in my opinion. Anyone who likes their beans roasted till they are near burnt, has never had real coffee. Yes, and at some point, perhaps we will know that past is. As always, we should be careful of what we ask for.
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Your description of the clients that Jarren and Mazen are working for, was right on the money. I've worked retail from 1986 until 2015. You meet some real winners, as I'm sure you know. Your character is much braver than I. I cannot imagine sitting in a tat chair for 1 minute, let alone 2 hours. I have plenty of friends with tats, none for me, thank you very much!
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So far, the whole question vs. answer thing has been noticed by more than me! Ah well... Then I was going to comment on Boston, but you shut me down! After reading the two shifter stories, I would say you have complicated down pat! ... Yes, yes. This was your first story. So What!
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So, the scarring occurred when Lex was 14 and that was 12 years ago. It was a metal tipped whip and cigarettes. He was in the hospital for some of it - we don't know if the whipping and burning happened all at once, or was he admitted for the last bit of it. Not sure if I see a pattern here, but for every question answered, two more pop up! So many questions. So few answer at this point!
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Just started this story, @kbois, because I saw so many references to it in Spirit Wolves. I do like the start, so I will keep reading. I'm using Grammarly for basic grammar and a few word substitutions. But I also rely on a beta reader and an editor. Between them, they pick-up continuity breaks I sometimes make. My beta reader also is full of suggestions to complete my sometimes incomplete ramblings.
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This is one of those stories where I have enjoyed the second read better than the first. Thanks @kbois for the time and effort it took to bring this to us.
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Lol!!! I'll be 72 tomorrow. I've earned it!
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Well, it was a somewhat fitting end. End of the villains, than is! Although... Like many here, I could think of more satisfying ways to make them pay. It wouldn't even have taken much longer!
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Like I said, if all I knew about the story was up to this point... My reasoning stands. And... I can wait. I have my own last chapter to write in a story I'm writing.
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I agree wholeheartedly. The character of Caleb was not developed enough to warrant the reasons for his actions. However, if all I knew was what has been written at this point, then his death is merited. He betrayed his pack (in particular and in a general manner). He betrayed his son (again, in several ways). He betrayed his primary Beta and the Beta's mate. He betrayed the High Alpha and his Kappa. Caleb's decisions were entirely wrong on all accounts. This, even when accounting the coercion by blackmail. The only mercy that should be shown, is that of a swift death. A guillotine comes to mind...
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The battle scene in both the last chapter and especially this one, rank right up there as one of the best I've ever read. I've forgotten Caleb's reasons, so onward I go!
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Yeah, that was way too fast. So fast that I think Sandy and Wayne may be in trouble, come the morning.
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That was my first reaction. But this is a hole card, isn't it? Too reveal it too early would allow the perps to prepare and hide even deeper.
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You do know that was my fingers letting go? What you didn't hear was that distant Kersplat!!
