Lovestruckk

Hey Everyone I'm brand new to GA - as of yesterday - and so far have really loved the stories/poems/etc that I've gotten through; there are so many talented people in this commnunity! And you're all so friendly too I like to read, a lot, and enjoy writing fiction and poetry myself occasionally... Although that stuff always tends to come out quite personal, so for now at least I figure I won't be putting it up here. Looking forward to reading more of these brilliant stories! love, Lovestruckk.

Very interesting story: I enjoyed it's originality and the writing style. Also thought the use of the word 'lovemaking' was intriguing in context! Brilliant last line, really strong ending - well done

Brilliant idea, well-written, and you really go in for the details; pill bottles, money never spent - in my opinion a great poem Loved the contrast of "old ladies and old queens" and when they say the bastards haven't brought them down yet Really strong, at times sad, and overall joyful - think black was missing though

This story made me smile, and giggle out loud - in a good way! I liked the character, enjoyed the plot and thought the structure was cleverly arranged - I believed in Dillon, and liked the extra details about Theresa and the Dad; plus the coach

Beautiful, beautiful piece. I absolutely loved the ending. The whole piece really resonated with me... Forget the leaders, we'll all forge our own paths ;D

The story was beautiful, and the detail made it as real to the reader as it was to the author. I particularly admire the ending line, as well as the description of the bird, where it lies in the drawer and it's fragility compared to life. Well-written, and touching to the point that it felt like I was intruding where I shouldn't as I read it.

Like it a lot! I interpreted the story as kind of an allegory of life, modern life in particular - and even more particularly, modern romantic life. You come across people, sleep with them, or have a fling - nothing that lasts. It's all transitory. The memory from childhood, and the subsequent line saying that this was not the sort of meal the protagonist wanted now kind of spoke to me about how our needs/desires change as we grow older - we stop being kids, rebel against what our parents offered, advised and instructed us to do etc and take our own paths; for instance choosing to go against what they taught us and have sex with people we are (at least emotionally, if not literally) strangers to. I took the nude man "feeding him" as being a literal reference to oral sex, but metaphorically I saw it linked to how many of us seem to wander from person to person, trying to fill a hole (not the physical kind...) or hunger inside of us... And his continuing onwards after this interaction for me demonstrates how sexual endeavors will not satisfy us, or our "hunger" without the emotional connection. I took the protagonists desire for companionship to be that: wanting a relationship, someone to be with, in the hopes of ending the journey and the search we all go on. For me the ending was positive - though I recognise it is ambiguous - and I would like to imagine that the protagonist found what they needed in the house they saw ahead... That it seemed to 'appear' before him put me in mind of a miracle, or a granted wish. Sorry for the essay!! REALLY liked your story by the way! Cool idea, well executed - you got a lot into a short(er) piece of writing - and I like the imagery(:

Hey "xTony", So I registered with GA today, a few minutes ago actually, after reading your story. I've been reading the novellas, stories and poetry posted on this site for a while now and have enjoyed many of them - but after reading your story "In Our Bedroom After The War" I wanted to be able to leave a message letting you know what I thought. The first thing that struck me as I was reading, was that I really believed the characters - As in, they seemed to me to be believable both as teenagers and best friends, and the dynamic of their friendship also felt genuine. Also you have a nice writing style - relatively few mistake, not difficult to wade through. I enjoyed the piece a lot, and if you write a follow-up at any point be sure to let me know (I'd love to hear more from Zane and Andrew)! So yeah I just wanted to let you know I think you are a talented writer and that I'm looking forward to reading more of your work, if you decide to post anymore here(: