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    Drowning in Pink

    asamvav111 commented on Toast's blog entry in Toast

    Amazing!
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    Hymn of Lament

    asamvav111 commented on asamvav111's story chapter in Hymn of Lament

    The poet you seek is John Keats. This poem is an inverse of his Ode to Nightingale and mimics the progression of The Fall of Hyperion. There are also references to his philosophy of Mansion of Many Apartments. All together it is an homage to Keats & his creations.
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    Thank you for reading. Yes, they are all separate episodes of various degrees of abuse. Little infernos I call them. They are not rants per se. But, something more organic, something that has almost become a part of who they are, these abuses have. There are some gross infractions but some are rather subtle. Misogyny and Xenophobia is one of the later for example. I wanted to explore the psychological canvass behind these. These glimpses of Jigoku are creations of our very own. A series of infinity loops.
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    Les Petits Enfers It was attraction They told me, when he yelled at me. He hurt me often, as he saw fit. "It was fine", they told me. "Just letting off a little steam." He had some problems at work. He never told me exactly what. When I caught him cheating with another girl, younger, much lovelier than me, they told me to keep mum. "Men are not meant to be monogamous. Besides what will you do if he marries her." I know Al Kuran Majid gives me rights in this m
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    I left parts of myself everywhere The way absent-minded people leave Well done. Bravo.
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    Like two perky swans, in the lake One Like is not enough.
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    absolutely fabulous. big thumbs up.
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    The haiku is fine. AC Benus is better suited for an analysis. But, the first free verse is quite sublime; a broad built like a redbrick shithouse, would be an analogy worthy of its robust mouthfeel. It eclipsed even "More Words". Made me very glad to read them all.
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    One At A Time

    asamvav111 commented on asamvav111's story chapter in One At A Time

    I chose Currier New to elucidate the emotional frigidity. The current system may be great for prose writers, but completely useless for the architecture of poetry.
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    Hymn of Lament

    asamvav111 commented on asamvav111's story chapter in Hymn of Lament

    Thank you Lyssa. I certainly believe in that.
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    The Painting

    asamvav111 commented on asamvav111's story chapter in The Painting

    Thanks Emi. The painting is Santhal Dance by Jamini Roy. I have a copy hanging on my bedroom wall. The image evoked a series of memories; latest of them being the Nagar Sankirtana of the Gaudiya Vaishnavite sect who believe such processions destroy the sins of the onlookers even.
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    One At A Time

    asamvav111 commented on asamvav111's story chapter in One At A Time

    Thank you guys. But the problem is, this poem was not supposed to be posted till Wednesday evening in India. And the font is wrong too. New software glitches I guess.
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    One At A Time Slowly the petals Descend upon the water Of lake and clear streams The Sakura tree looses All its majestic blossoms My vain spring is over Best days of my youth wasted Pining after one Who wouldn't return my desires My affections burnt to Ash Sure as the petals Descend upon the surface Of lake and clear streams They neither colour the flow Nor perfume the cold water 24/04/2017
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    Your first free verse takes the crown. The haiku was a close second.
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    Food Bytes

    asamvav111 commented on Mikiesboy's blog entry in Mikiesboy's Blog

    You can earn millions writing food blogs.
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    The Painting Unadorned tribal frame hanging on the yellow pasty walls Oscillating to the miniature gusts of impatient April wind Creating dark shadows Slowly undulating features of the street bands of yore Singing, dancing, marching on all in the name of love Now silenced Frozen in a frame of twenty by ten Bearing the grudge of the masses The sin eaters dance 15/04/17
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    Grey Light

    asamvav111 commented on Lux Apollo's story chapter in Grey Light

    "Listless Ablutions Grey" Well done.
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    April 19 : Manners

    asamvav111 commented on Emi GS's story chapter in April 19 : Manners

    "Daisy, dozy, drowsy day Lossy, lazy, lousy way Cranky, clumsy, crazy play Natty, nutty, naughty sway " Excellent.
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    "A see through mirror Where I stand against As the world " "Mirror! Mirror!" is definitely the cutest of them all. Thanks for sharing.
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    Hymn of Lament

    asamvav111 commented on asamvav111's story chapter in Hymn of Lament

    Thank you both for reading. I watched to the video. It sounded a bit like Vedic chanting to me. My poem did not come to me that way actually. But that is the mystery of poetry, that appears in many ways in many rays. The visuals of the video was really cool. I was an Egypt nerd growing up, influenced by Dr. Zahi Hawass. So I did recognize a lot of the images. River God by Wilbur Smith was also a great influence. I read that so many times. The later books of the series became muck when Taita received superpowers. But, River God is golden. This poem was not about Egypt, even though it has quite a few Egyptian symbols and metaphors, but more about romantic poets of England, one poet in particular, can you guess the name?
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    Hymn of Lament Philomel Choosing the signs of the zodiac Obtuse emotions play harps Heavenly music ensue Wellspring of cosmic glee Celebratory key stone In absence make the line of beauty Progress through one house to another And night progresses as we sail through the houses of the night Availing the innocence of tripartite God The lamb is sacrificed We arrive at the house of fear Of darkness Of true forms and false intents The deity disappears Leaving
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    Thank you for reading.
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    So very true. The LGBT perspective gave me a new point of view. I was thinking about sad-married-straight-modern age-couples who drift further apart every day. Thank you for reading.
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    Onedeto Gozaimasu.
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    I will definitely try once at least.
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