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Ahhh... I wanted to create the imagery of someone falling into icy water. As the initial shock wears off, you feel comfortable, there's no more shaking. It's quiet and you're not aware of anything anymore. You're just allowing the currents to push and pull you. It might not have come off very well. But thank you for your review! I agree about the heaviness that comes with the lengthiness of such kind of writing
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For me, personally, when I wrote the line, I imagined him rolling his eyes but unable to suppress a grin. because it doesn't really matter does it at this point? we all know he's totally interested. ^^ Thanks for reading!
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There is definitely a possibility of a continuation. But it might be a project for another day. I'll have to work on my fantasy writing though. I'm not sure I can paint a convincing picture.
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Today was the day. I was to be wed to his royal highness, Prince Alexander of Zion. I was to be crowned Royal Consort to the Prince. I was to gain a family: a father, a mother, and a husband. But today was the day that I would forever remember as the beginning of the rest of my life with the man who changed it forever, Alex. The day was beautiful. Sunlight illuminated the kingdom, glistening off the ivory towers of the castle. A gentle breeze swept through the kingdom, carrying a faint hint of
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A story about a boy and his prince.
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Thank you! I often wonder if the plotlessness is boring though. And I'm convinced that this style of writing would not translate well to a novel-length story. It would get in the way of the plot progression. But I do like the simplicity in moments. There are no assumptions, just a clean slate for the characters to play it out. Thanks for reading!
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Thank you for the high praise! I'm glad I managed to convey the emotions of my character!
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Thanks for the vote of confidence! I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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Steam rose from the mug of brown liquid, warming my face. Black hair swept across the forehead, icy blue eyes flicked up from the book propped up in a hand. Your lips quirked into a smile, but your eyes widened in surprise: a betrayal. A finger creased the corner of the page, an indent that could never be undone. The book put away, steam still rising from the mug in my hand, a moment passed. You unfurled your legs and leaned forward, combing through your hair absentmindedly with your fingers. I
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The story was rough for me to get through. I was so frustrated in the beginning. I was so mad at all the markers Rory was ignoring and I literally could not read on anymore until after a night's sleep. Then it happened and I was on the edge of my seat waiting for Rory and Luke to realise their affections and when didn't happen, I was disappointed. But I did like Seth and their relationship. I just always expected Rory and Luke to end up together. But I guess that's the mark of a true writer, to convince the readers to form emotional attachments to the characters. Thanks for the great story.
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The wind whispered against the windowsill as the sheer curtains bobbed and curtseyed. The moon gazed lovingly at the two sleeping forms, melded in an embrace, separate and together. She bathed them in her gentle light, illuminating their shape with her reflected glow. As she did with the tides, she watched them push and pull breaths, deep and regular. Lines creased his forehead. His jaw tensed. His supple body morphed, curves hardened, as his muscles lined themselves with adrenaline. A slight t
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All while she watches, quietly, in the night, a survivor lives with the consequences of surviving. Drowning in guilt and shame, can he let another in?
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Thank you for such praise. I still have a long way to go though.
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Thank you for such praise. I still have a long way to go though.
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Thanks so much for the praise. I guess these chapters were basically what you said. I wanted some interconnectivity because I'm a real sappy romantic at heart. But I don't think I'm ready to cope with the commitment of having a full length novel/short. Short essays like this are probably the most I can commit to right now. Glad you're enjoying them!
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The clunk of plastic and metal hummed across the wooden lab bench. The beakers and conical flasks trembled, threatening to topple their contents. Eyes zeroed in on the source of the unnerving sound as I picked up my phone and muted it. Hi I barely caught a glance of the message before the screen blacked over. I stowed the treacherous device into my pocket before going back to the task at hand. I decided that there would only be one experiment allowed to occupy my thoughts in that moment. The
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well.... crackle was the best description to me when I think of paper getting scrunched up. thank you for your feedback though.
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A crackle. The cone of light focused on my two-bit study table, illuminating the knick-knacks splayed across its surface. My laptop sat unfolded, glaring at me with its blue light. I trained my eyes back onto the words that seemed to litter the page of the book that was currently propped open with one hand, its contents seemingly less interesting with each passing moment. I sat my now bland piece of literature down and let myself drown in my turbulent thoughts. A crackle. My room came tumbli
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A flash of gold and I found myself staring into a pair of cerulean pools. Deflection. Exhalation. A pause. I lifted my eyes. Your cheeks were tinted rose from the cutting wind outside, your head seemingly breaking the surface of the pool of knits resting on your slight frame. A slight clearing of throat, and heat rushed to my cheeks. I looked away, catching the slight crinkle of your eyes. Amusement, I thought, I could, not be sure. A side-step and two strides found me in the familiar comfor
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A world through my eyes. Love letters to nobody in particular.
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The TV Show is brilliant. I haven't caught up to season 2 but I think it's a really cool take on fairy tales.
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Well as a newbie(kind of, been lurking around for a couple years now), and I loved his work. I'm just not courageous enough to engage in discussion I guess. I'm more of a awe and admiration person.
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Hi guys. I've been enjoying these stories for a couple years now and I've been writing for a while, mainly just ramblings from my incoherent brain. I'm not looking forward to going pro or anything. Writing's just an outlet for me to express myself and it's a calming process for me. Allows me to sort through what I'm really going through. I'm hoping that some of my stuff actually gets read and resonates with someone out there. But isn't that what every writer hopes for? I'm 20 and starting college in a couple weeks but I'm glad to be here. Looking forward to comments and criticism!
