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  1. totallyy

    Epilogue

    In the distance, sirens wailed. A man lay strapped into his seat, barely conscious. His eyes glazed over as his chest rose and fell jerkily. Around him, the heat licked at his skin, like vultures waiting to consume his body. Glass lay on the road, reflecting shards of moonlight. A mighty tree lay on its sides, its trunk splintered. Blood soaked through his red hair and dripped onto his shoulders. Then, his grey eyes closed.
  2. totallyy

    I Am Fine

    Coffee, I salivated as the dense rich aroma teased me from my half-consciousness. I surveyed the patrons of the small coffee shop: a mixed crowd of relaxed elderly, impatient suits and bored students. The line stumbled forward, a train of caffeine junkies waiting for their morning fix. “A double shot of espresso, to go please,” I ordered, my voice rough with sleep. The machines tinkered in the background as I tapped my feet against the parquet floor. As the girl behind the counter handed over
  3. totallyy

    Prologue

    I was fine. I had been fine for a while. I woke up. I ate. I showered. I got dressed. I went to class. I slept. I was fine, until I was not.
  4. Brandon thinks he's fine. He thinks he can alienate his emotions and box them up. But can he really? And when someone comes along and reminds him, opening up his little box of horrors, what happens?
  5. totallyy

    Chapter 1

    i think waiting for separation might be even more painful than separation. it looms over you like a giant eclipse.thank you so much for the praise. i'm really glad you enjoyed it! Thank you for the review!
  6. totallyy

    Chapter 1

    thanks joann for the review. it was so sad. that's exactly how though. that's how i'd feel all the time. i tried to imagine how i'd deal with it and this story is probably accurate for me.
  7. totallyy

    Chapter 1

    Thank you myi for the review! I felt emotional writing it.
  8. totallyy

    Chapter 1

    thank you for the review! but it's a top secret mission. it's so sad though. my heart breaks for them both.
  9. Half a year; six months; one hundred and eighty-one days; four thousand three hundred and forty-four hours; two hundred and sixty thousand, six hundred and forty minutes; fifteen million, six hundred and thirty-eight thousand and four hundred seconds… That is all I have left, I mused as I fingered the edge of the letter repetitively, picking at the creased dog-eared paper. “I’m home!” a voice announced, accompanied by shuffling feet and the slamming shut of the front door. I shoved the sourc
  10. A mission was ordered and he has six months left before he leaves for space. His work might save Earth and his people but then, there's Ryan.
  11. totallyy

    Chapter 1

    Thanks so much for the great review comic!!! and for featuring my story too! I'm glad that the nuances of the story came across to you guys!
  12. I got featured again?! Thanks so much! I'm so glad you guys enjoyed my prompt response!
  13. totallyy

    Chapter 1

    oh my. i think all my readers do think that i'm a shrivelled up cynic on the inside right about now. i do believe in happiness, if anyone was wondering thank you so much for the great review. i do try to end with a kick. thank you thank you
  14. totallyy

    Chapter 1

    I need to work out a more substantial storyline if I do continue this particular story so it might be a while for any progression.... As for Jeremy, I don't think it was due to his arrogance or him being a mean person. When I conceptualised his character. I thought of him more as an eager aspiring actor, pressured by the "cookie cutter" requirements of the industry. When his ambition required him to make sacrifices, his dedication drove him to do hurtful things. Sure, it doesn't excuse him from the consequences of his actions but it doesn't make him a bad person. Just human. As much as I'm glad that my characters made you feel for them, I'm sorry that you've had to experience such pain first hand. But such is life. As for the rest of the questions, they will be answered in subsequent chapters if and when I continue. But that's where the beauty of a short lies isn't it? In the infinite possibilities limited only by our imagination. I am so glad for you review though! Thank you so much!
  15. totallyy

    Chapter 1

    Again Brink, thanks so much for the detailed review Firstly, I'm going to forgive you for making a mistake with Jeremy's name HAHAHAHAH... I'm joking. It's alright. I'm not too good with names either. Secondly, I'm glad you enjoyed so many of the details I plugged into the story. There is nothing more fulfilling to know that the words I wrote help bring the story to life for you. I'm glad that neither Jeremy nor the protagonist came off as off-putting. I definitely wanted them to be human. I didn't want them to become a caricature of their mistakes, you know. Besides, we all make mistakes, some just change everything. Lastly, regarding the parts you weren't so fond of. I'm glad that there were parts that were so vivid that led you compare the less than stellar portions. Although I did write the story rather hastily, it's no excuse for boring writing! I'll try my best to work out the mundane details in my next try! But I'm so glad you commented on the things that didn't work for you! They give me a direction to focus in. Again, THANK YOU for such a detailed and brilliant review! I'm so grateful for it.
  16. totallyy

    Chapter 1

    Some characters just beg to be revisited. I think these are a couple of those. I wish I had more substance to keep at developing plots for lengthier stories. I'm glad you enjoyed it though and thank you for the review!
  17. totallyy

    Chapter 1

    hahaha if I ever sit down and write 50/60 thousand words in one shot, it'll probably take months... Emotions are always so confusing, I mean how many times in our lives do we actually feel a single emotion purely? Thank you for the review!
  18. totallyy

    Chapter 1

    Like I told you NS, I'm real honoured you left a review And thank you so much for the great review!!!!
  19. totallyy

    Chapter 1

    Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.
  20. http://www.gayauthors.org/story/totallyy/dontcrossthethreshold I tried my hand at this while jetlagged and sleepy so... yeah. Enjoy!
  21. Seasoned TV regular, Jeremy Cason, comes out on national television in his Good Morning America appearance. Age 27, Cason was quoted to 'have had enough of hiding his aspects of his personal life due to pressure from his manager.’ This comes in following a huge wave of celebrities… You did it, Jeremy, I mused. A smile tugged the corner of my lips upwards as I leaned back into the soft cushions that lined my living room couch. I watched the side-swept dark hair curl against Jeremy’s forehead, h
  22. Jeremy visits his past after exposing himself in the limelight. He tries to salvage something he walked away from but can he save it?
  23. thank you for your review! i'm glad you liked it.
  24. Happy happy birthday to you!!!!
  25. totallyy

    Chapter 1

    Thank you for the review!!!! No tears necessary. I'm really glad you felt you could connect with it. And not bad writing is good enough for me! Thank you!
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