Jason Rimbaud

I just started incorporating those elements in my two latest stories. All my earlier work was R rated for language but no sex. All the sex happened off page. I thought I was above that sort of writing.

Young Krista is like, lets fuck shit up. .

Why would you tell her? Let her go to the afterlife thinking she gave a character name Barbie. Bad Jeff!!! Not only did you kick him when he was down, you might have done bad things to his back there place on national TV. It's so much fun and most of it is his fault.

Younger me, older me, being thrown out of my house because of Leviticus, I wouldn't take anything from him. Even changed my name so I don't even have that anymore. True story, I was forty-two years old, went back to my small home town for one reason, to piss on his grave. Broad daylight, in front of the caretaker, when he asked what I was doing, I told him it was fine, tombstones don't talk back. Is it bad that I found that whole scene funny.

I guess I was never a classy author, I never showed my characters naked, not even wet butts.

I actually like Julie, she makes me laugh. It's Charlie who's a bit much...much.

I am being productive. I am allowing you a brief chance to relive an old story. It's a gift that keeps on giving. Sadly none of my friends decided to join me. There loss, this story is a hot mess in the best ways. I'm actually highly entertained. And yes it's rough, needs a bunch of work, but I can see the seeds of how you write today. It's not horrible.

Jesus, another pool part, too tight, too short shorts, and not one mention of a wet butt. When did you become with wet butts? Sarah, a girl Charlie's known forever just happened to be Derek's cousin. Maybe a little hint about Derek's past, maybe, but then Derek shows up anyway. By the way, the electricity wasn't paid for, just like I mentioned a few chapters back, his father is already screwing him out of the house. Charlie going all over looking for Derek was cute and Gina, the nurse at the hospital, breaking all sorts of rules and privacy regarding patient privacy was entertaining. But once again, Charlie and Derek are in bed together, what will happen next.

Older dog, younger dog, but daaaaaammmmmmnnnnnn. No wet butts yet but dog murdering,

I am not attached to dogs at all, so I don't find that heartbreaking or anything. But you are stripping him away of everything. I'm enjoying this little story, it's fun.

That's coming up soon! This is actually delicious.

YOu should remind him!!!!! And I find it awesome that you don't remember the story. Because you know me, I make shit up so you don't know if I"m being honest or lying. Oh this is more fun than I hoped it would be.

So all the friends knew and didn't care about Chucky being gay. Well, duh, Charlie is not good at hiding it. And what kind of po-dunk town do people get married at eighteen? And did Charlie have a plan looking for Derek? Was he just going to drive around and hopes he finds him? By the way, you killed his dog!

It's definitely angsty but I love the character of Julie.

Your obsession knows no bounds

Don't worry, I'm offering my running commentary with each chapter. So far it's been a fun, silly, read.

NOt sure about a beach yet. But they had two pool parties, not one mention of wet butts.

*whistles*

You obviously don't know the depths I'll go when I'm committed to a bit. I already said I wouldn't mention how "rough" the story is. We both know there are lots of them. But I'm ignoring them for the most part. I'm focusing on the characters and story. And I'm already to like chapter eight, and I shan't spoil anything here but damn...

You killed the dog! According to Jason Science, once a prick, always a prick. Offering to pay some bills, don't do it. That's how he'll get your house, right from under you. He won't pay the bills, then the bank will foreclose, he buy the house at a cheap rate, kick out Charlie and use it a closet for his barbie toy. So Derek blows poor Charlie after his mother and dog died. That's some sad sperms he had to ingest. Gross. So now he has nothing, no mother, no dog, no job, and Derek, who may or may not be able to give good blowjobs. And he didn't even do a reach-a-round, that's some cold blooded Sports Balls shit right there.

So Charlie said a few choice words to Barbie and his sperm donor. Personally I don't think he went far enough, but damn have you stripped him of his entire world. The next thing you'll do is kill his dog. The funeral was nice enough, a good way to remember his mom, though the dad's speech was pretty bad. Like if I was Charlie I'd punch him in the nose, he made it about himself where it should have been made about Carol. The whole scene where Derek kisses Charlie, creeper much? Seriously, the boy is in mourning and you're pressing in with your morning glory. Though the positions should be reversed. I am a firm believer that Derek is a bottom. Overall, very angsty in a fun way.

Of course Julie told Derek. And how clueless is Charlie, like really? Foreshadowing abounds, the whole monologue Carol did, she knew it was time. She had things to say and Charlie didn't understand. Very well written, the scene between Derek and Charlie after the news was real emotional. Though I shan't say that doctors don't give news of deaths on answering machines, never. And I knew you were going to try, the father came back. I told you a few chapters ago that he's a piece of shite. I won't allow you to try and make him a good character. It's time to take off the gloves.

Booya, Derek is a blond. Julie makes me laugh. I love her craziness. Still won't call her bitchy, but the way she acted in the diner reminds me of someone...I shan't say who. Another chance to describe wet butts. I'm beginning to think that particular obsession came later in life. Not much happening, Derek remains closed, especially when Julie is around, though who could possibly get a word in anyway. But let's not dwell, because Derek is single, ready to mingle, and hot for Charlie's sports balls skills.

That is not allowed in the Sacred Knights of Trolling Krista. I think anyone that sacrifices a chance to get a free ride to school sucks. And his dad, I know she will try but I will never be on that piece of shit side. Any father that abandons his only son is a prick.

First! Though I am disappointed. We have another pool, but no descriptions of wet butts. I am ashamed... Derek doesn't like to talk about himself and Charlie is too self centered to ask. Where are Derek's parents? "You know, you could sleep in my bed" Both of these boys are crushing hard... Theory Number One: Derek could only get accepted at Cambon/Camdon/ whatever the fuck the school is called, because he was caught doing the dirty with the Gym teacher. His parents found out, now he has to take whatever school that would take him. I say bottom. At least we get a bit of backstory on Derek, a bit more about Charlie's dreams. But nothing about the boy's butt. We are only on Chapter Four, so at least they are in the same bed already, that's a good sign.