You have for sure given me some things to think about in regards to how I present my charecters, especially Marc.
Marc is for sure coming on strong; my thoughts behind this came from "typical high school puppy love". Teenagers become infatuated very easily, this situation was supposed to come off as Marc having this huge crush on a guy he barley knows and assuming that means it's meant to be. Hes the most popular guy in school and he always gets his way. He doesn't understand why Toni isn't falling into his arms. The more Toni resists the more mysterious and attractive he becomes to Marc. Marc's biggest flaw is needing everybody to like him. He thrives off external validation. Teenagers, in my experience, are pushy and awkward and often assume they should get what they want just because they want it.
Toni's circle does come off a bit harsh, but they were friends with Marc first. And they are all aware of Marc's crush on Toni. Toni never says "i don't want to hang out" at this point. They are friendly when they meet and Toni goes to this party with him and they have a moment. No one understands that Toni doesn't know Marc has a crush and they forget that just because they think Marc is awesome it doesn't mean everybody will.
Things do come easily to Marc and this is the first time he actually has to put some thought into trying to attract someone.
These thought and insights should have been evidant in the story but apparently I didn't make it clear enough. I'll see how I can work it in a bit more but hopefully this will help you enjoy the story a bit more and help it make some sense. Thanks for sharing your confusions it definatly gave me some things to work on! I know it's pretty cliche, for my first full lenght posted story I kept it pretty simple lol