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Ok. This is one of those instances where I'm going "How old are they?"

I recently noticed this story again. I started reading it from the beginning because it was so long that I forgot some of the details. I noticed that some information was added that made it much better. I have never been beta reader or editor but I am more than willing to help.

Great chapter! Many others have stated very eloquently what I think about how the situation was handled. As with Bailey's past experiences, it doesn't always work out the way it did this time. And the kiss , of course in typical teen fashion a parent interrupts. I hope to see the trust Bailey and Declan have built strengthens as the new trials come.

I think the King needs Noel more than he thinks for his mental stability. And I think Noel is goimg to be play a bigger part in the council due to the threat to them. I think Elfstone is on to something about the other telapaths. Look forward to the next chapter.

It keeps getting better.

The visit and kiss were a suprise. But at the same time it was timed just right. Its nice to have a story that feels like the attraction isn't rushed.

So many questions that Wes isn't asking. How did Edward know his real name??

It keeps getting better. I like that there is a getting to know you stage. So many stories move this part along too fast or just jump into that serious relationship that it can make the story not as believable. Great job!

The work helped Wes not think about what he lost and left behind. But he isn't dealing with it. Simetimes helping others helps you. I'm interested in how this goes.

My first impression was that the chapter felt a little rushed. Wes is a kid who spent his teen years helping his family and making few if any real friends. The sudden loss of a supportive adult on his life must have been devastating. The chapter had me there. Concern would happen after a week of Wes' behavior. Counseling would be an expected suggestion. Where I feel rushed is his mom's reaction. It felt a little over reactive. I understand that Toby doesn't understand and is upset but going in and yelling at Wes was never going to help. Wes running away wasn't good but he isn't in the right frame of mind to think through every thing he is doing. I feel bad for Toby, poor kid just wants to be with his brother. I know most of this gets us to the new beginning part but rushing the story will lose some people. I look forward to the next chapter.

Everyone has made some good points. I think one that everyone is talking around is trust. For children the trust that a parent will always be there for them very important. When you lose someone you lose trust, it is why anger is part of the grieving process. In Bailey's Mom's grieving process she broke Bailey's trust. That will need to be built back before Bailey will accept any thing from her on faith. I'm waiting for the anger that Bailey will eventually have toward his father to explode. When that happens I fear that bad things could happen. So many ways this can go. I look forward to how it will go.

I have always believed that if people pay attention more to what is around them and less about them selves they learn more about themselves. I understand everyone's desire for Bailey to open up more and be helped. But I understand better that it is a slow process to trust when you feel like there is no one you can trust. Because of that I think the pacing is pitch perfect.

The very sad truth is that familial emotional abusers is they really don't see/understand that what they are saying is wrong or how hurtful and damaging it is. Some never will and the abused will then have to grieve for the loss of the dream of what they see as that normal happy/loving part of life. I hope Bailey's mom can see what she is doing and actually work to change the message. I tend to give Declan and Justin a bit more slack then most. Knowing they are in their teens they are still learning the best way they can help and they can still have moments of selfishness. As for the lawyer, I will give him a some more time before I make up my mind. I look forward to the next part. It will be interesting to see how you blend the points of view. As reader it is nice to see the whole story as the characters are working it out to the end. Good work.

I can relate to Bailey's side of the story quite a bit. Many people don't realize how much of an outsider the new kid in school feels. Everyone else is set with their place in the school hierarchy and their friends. The new kid isn't. There isn't always a Justin that wants to be a friend. Another thing is if you have been bullied to some degree every where you go and nothing has ever happened to the bully it is hard to believe anything would happen this time. I think Bailey's natural way is to be quiet and reserved and with his experiences it is hard to trust. I'm looking forward to see how people get through Bailey's walls. It means others must not quite when it seems like they will never get anywhere. I for see things getting worse for Bailey before they get better. It takes a lot before the abused person sees what is obvious to others.

I have to say that I agree with the others. It feels like there is more but it also was the end of the beginning. How all parties go on from now is the next part of the story. I enjoyed this very much.

Experiences that can't be told. History learned that can't be known. Time gaps that can't be explained. Summing up what Rob said, what happens when they return and how everyone on Earth deals with what the group can talk about will be interesting. I am be pulled even deeper into the story. I feel the beginning of the middle of the story coming. Looking forward to more.

I like that it makes me think. At first I thought that the two groups were in different times (present/past). Now that that is cleared more intrigue and perspectives have been introduced. Nice build up. Curiouser and curiouser.

The historical plot thickens. I'm looking forward to seeing how they fit together. Very good.

Now we are getting an understanding of the mind set of people after the Shove loses contact with Earth. The mix of academic thought/study and public spin gives a great range. All talk about a perceived advanced race not of this Earth. The question is we're they greatly advanced or did they have advancements that we had never seen and had no way of defending ourselves against. This is a concept we see through history. It also makes for great stories. Good work.

A good setup for what seems to be an interesting mystery.