MacGreg
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Another great chapter here, Wayne. I enjoy your writing style. It feels very natural, not contrived. Corbin speaks and understands Italian... I'm guessing not something he actually learned in school. The mystery continues, and I'm looking forward to the reveal.
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A slow, careful unfolding of the mystery continues. I like the nefarious feel of the story contrasted against Corbin's insecurities and physical attraction to Paul. I, too, am curious about who Liam is/was and what precipitated Corbin's relocation to the countryside.
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Yep, I just went through this. Luckily, I discovered fraudulent activity right away. Only one transaction occurred.
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Congratulations to the band!
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Good night.
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Like tim said, each word we write is a risk. Miscommunication happens. Sometimes, you just have to take the chance.
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Agreed! It's a wonderful chapter. But, then, the whole series is.
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Hello Mike. I'm good, thank you. How are you?
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Food, food, and more food.
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Like hot dogs...?
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Hell, I could do that myself, boy.
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Seems like there could be one meal for the kids and another meal for the adults.
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Why always toddler-friendly? Isn't there only one toddler in your house?
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Curry.
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I've got some chicken in the freezer. Broccoli. Rice. Yep, onion, too.
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Depends on what you need.
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I have a kitchen. Pots and pans, too.
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I'm all for fresh, home cooking - when someone prepares it.
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*pats your head* Good boy.
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@Mikiesboy is the spokesman for the Instant Pot.
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Ah, Instant Pot! Welcome to the DiC, you'll fit right in here.
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Don't worry, boy. I had breakfast.
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Lots of food talk in here today. Inspires me to eat something.
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Excellent chapter. you say so much without over-telling. A long description about everyone's feelings post-funeral is unnecessary, because we, as readers, can fill in the blanks with our own perceptions and understandings about how the characters are dealing with the situation. The same is true for Max - you provide just enough insight to pull out our heartstrings and make us long for peace for that boy. We can interpret his needs with empathy. And, you give us hope that he will receive some of that peace with care from Louis and Don. There's a lot of love in this chapter, and you present it brilliantly.
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Best of luck to Number Two and the competition.
