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  1. Also, thanks @Talo Segura for the information and the link about writing mysteries!
  2. Thank you for those recommendations! I'm eager to check them out once I finish a book I borrowed from a friend :P. To answer your post @Robert Rex, I enjoy each scenario! However, I've found it thrilling watching a protagonist go after a perpetrator whom they already identified, and the creative road blocks the perp uses to prevent being detected and caught. I wish I could think of a better example for this, but the best I could come up with is a few of the mysteries I've watched of this anime Case Closed .
  3. This might be a derail, and my apologies if that's the case (I'll take a DM!), but do you mind if I hear from you all what mystery books you've considered well done and why? Could be on GA or published elsewhere. I've yet to read any mystery writing authors that I've enjoyed and would return to (with the exception of Crime and Punishment by Fyodor Dostoevsky!) I've also wanted to try my hand at writing a mystery novel sometime! I attempted one back in middle school without knowing what makes a good mystery and would love to hear your thoughts.
  4. BDANR

    September Sonnet

    Fitting words and strong imagery to remind us the importance of solidarity and cooperation in these strange times we live in. Thanks for writing :)!
  5. @NoSkis Thank you for your dedicated reading ! Hope it's been a good distraction from our current state of affairs. .Take care and keep well!
  6. @centexhairysub Thank you so much for reading ! I'm glad to see the 1st book reach it's conclusion. I've been considering how the 2nd book might look, and am already expecting it to be difficult, but fun project for the future. I appreciate you taking the time to read!
  7. @centexhairysub And you'll see what that ends up leading to!
  8. @centexhairysub Indeed!
  9. @centexhairysub This made me laugh out loud! You don't know how right you are xD.
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    Chapter 9: Revolt

    @centexhairysub: Funny enough, both of these questions should be answered in the next chapter!
  11. @centexhairysub Sorry for Amelia haha... I wanted to keep readers on their toes, making it hard to identify who is ally or enemy. I'm glad you liked her as a character!
  12. @centexhairysub There might be additional information for why they were attacked in the next chapter, when the creatures that attacked them are identified and given a name. Everyone they encounter can easily be neutral or an enemy, and their reason for being attacked can be as simple as a predator attacking its prey, or something more complex.
  13. @centexhairysub: I didn't end up going into detail about how they were discovered in this chapter. However, because they were outdoors to train and move around the city, we can assume the Royal Soldiers identified them somehow and went to investigate, leading to the final showdown.
  14. @centexhairysub Thank you! Fingers crossed that this story continues to hold your attentiveness :).
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    Chapter 4: Escape

    @centexhairysub I won't reveal the plot, but if you're thinking this way, you should have no problem following the story :). The chapters gets pretty dense with information later, so let me know if you get confused!
  16. @centexhairysub These questions should hopefully be answered as the story progresses! As a hint, it has to do with Barken's abilities.
  17. Thank you @centexhairysub! This is the first I've heard of my writing described as lyrical. It helps that I write a bit of poetry :).
  18. Thank you @centexhairysub! Hope you enjoy it :D.
  19. “Wait, what? You??” I came across rightfully skeptical as this neku before us, devoid of their armor or scepter, was claimed by Barken to be the Princess of Deko. Of course I’d be on the defensive, this random figure standing over us while we slept! How long was she there? She hadn’t encroached on us for a surprise attack, it seemed. “What possessed you to step foot in this wasteland? Are you lost?” “Lost?” she replied, her tone carrying an angry edge. “Why would I be lost? I came here to fi
  20. Kalo’s grim description of the terrain that made Soren Desert was spot on. We each had coughing fits, choking on the scarlet clay sands caught in the wind. Gauging how far we traveled was measured by our footsteps if they hadn’t already been blown away. Kyro faded in the distance, and we were alone to bear the valley’s relentlessness. It didn’t help that we were already exhausted from fighting and fleeing the city’s takeover. “It’s as before, Diego,” I said, “we’re instructed to go west, but
  21. @Parker Owens Thank you :D!! This is a very experimental story on my part. To see it come to life and find others enjoying it makes me happy! I also like to keep the reader at the edge of their seat with these fighting scenes ^_^.
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    Chapter 4: Escape

    @Parker Owens I think the two are lucky to have the background they have: Barken being a part of a team of clairsentients who take care of others in the most extreme crises, and Diego being "The Wolf of Orion" because his ability surpasses most in his class. They also have a clever elementalist to thank ;). I'll answer the question about what happens to Barken in the upcoming chapters!
  23. @Parker Owens For sure! I wanted to give a glimpse of how each character survives and makes do in a dystopian universe. Then again, a friend once told me reality is not too far from a dystopia... Wrap your head around that one!
  24. As Barken’s glow steadily dissipated, I could see the soldier’s eyes flutter some. He took in a breath that brought back the color in his flesh, and his limbs stretched underneath the thick armor that covered him. Speechlessness became me; Barken did it, he healed an actual neku. It was no longer a legend or intangible theory. The myth came to life, and others took notice. Our descendant sisters and brothers from Kyro crowded us, looking alarmed. Barken’s rise from the ground made a few shift fr
  25. @NoSkis: Thank you NoSkis and your dedicated reading :)! It's fun to create characters like Barken and Diego and writing how they would respond to these moral dilemmas they face.
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