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    Foolish

    BDANR commented on BDANR's story chapter in Foolish

    I'm so sorry I've taken so long to reply to this!! I've been a bit of a hermit and haven't been logging on to this site for sometime. Not naming the author is definitely intentional! This is going to sound strange, but I didn't do so because I wanted to emphasize the character's shifting identity through the story. Since he is conflicted in his willingness to continue this affair, I think it says a lot about him not yet understanding himself. Does that make sense? A name is a way to establish identity right, but if the character doesn't really know himself...
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    Kimo Calendar

    BDANR commented on Parker Owens's story chapter in Kimo Calendar

    You did it again, Mr. Parker! Very well done and executed magically
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    This was a fun read! As someone else mentioned, the rhyme scheme was enticing ^_^.
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    Mystery Man

    BDANR commented on BDANR's story chapter in Mystery Man

    Thanks for your comment! I'll hopefully provide those answers as the story progresses.
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    Foolish

    BDANR posted new chapter in Under the Guise

    “No shitting? Dang…” I told my dorm mates what happened as we hung out in our lobby on the first floor. It was one AM. A sextet of students were playing Jenga across from us, being quiet and contemplative. The more studious students were deep in their books, scattered around the room. The front desk, in the middle of the lobby by the elevators, was occupied by a student security officer who could be heard watching Youtube on his laptop. Loren, who lived on the same floor as me, was bitin
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    Mystery Man

    BDANR commented on BDANR's story chapter in Mystery Man

    @Parker Owens Thank you for your comment! I'll hopefully delve into this very question more as the story progresses.
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    Walking in the Rain

    BDANR commented on Mikiesboy's story chapter in Walking in the Rain

    Calming and though provoking. We do often forget the beauty that comes with the rain. Fall is coming soon 😁
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    Aww :). I'm already imagining the scene like it's a children's book. Fun read ^_^.
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    @AC Benus, the highlights from you Spring of 90 collection were inspiring. Made me remember what I enjoy about poetry and the rush I get from seeing what others (and you ) create. Thank you for the post!
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    Mystery Man

    BDANR posted new chapter in Under the Guise

    A light rain went pitter patter against the windows as the driver turned the bus into a cruise ship. “All aboard,” he would call out at every stop, making himself known in a sea of quiet and distraction as passengers blasted their headphones or focused their attention on phone screens. I sat next to a man wearing a three piece suit with his legs crossed, reading a newspaper and giggling softly at the driver’s antics. He would occasionally turn to me, maybe for a moment of shared laughter. But I
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    Under the Guise

    BDANR posted a story in Fiction

    A young college student gets himself tangled with a mysterious man who goes by the name of Lex. At first, he finds attraction to Lex's private nature, and the sex is a big incentive. But how far is he willing to go and what compromises is he willing to make for a man who won't even share his real name?
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    Thank you, AC! It's good to see you all again and check out your works :D! I'm already on the drawing board...err, Google Docs, cooking up some new ideas, so hopefully I'll have something to share soon .
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    I REALLY liked the last two stanzas of this piece. A halibun seems difficult in and of itself, but you did this piece in a way where you could create poetry of everyday life, like work, and speak of the disruption that construction (or reconstruction) tends to create. Nicely wrote ;).
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    Kodachrome

    BDANR commented on MacGreg's story chapter in Kodachrome

    The array of emotions I felt with each stanza, you do a great job of evoking the right emotions so that we readers can feel what you have felt. Thanks for sharing this intimate moment...
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    @Mikiesboy The Oscar WIlde piece you posted was quite long. What an undertaking for him...but I guess that's why he was one of the greats!
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    Chapter 13

    BDANR commented on asamvav111's story chapter in Chapter 13

    I appreciate the rhyme scheme and the way you structured this poem. It enhances your message and it sounds beautifully when spoken (I read your poem aloud :P). Fantastic, definitely one of my favs from you.
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    Thank you for your words, jp ! I'm glad to know my descriptions and characters have been engaging and interesting thus far ^_^!!
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    I made sure the old man led the way as he brought us to his cellar, smelling of metal and rust. Diamond and water stones laid on a cutting board that stood at the center of the floor next to a grinding machine. Flickers of light came from openings on the edges of the ceiling. Weaponry, mostly worn and damaged, were stuffed in the corner. A makeshift bed covered entirely by beast fur was stored in the back. “It isn’t much,” he said, “we have very few visitors.” I was too distracted by the
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    Called To The Gates

    BDANR commented on Mikiesboy's story chapter in Called To The Gates

    I've been meaning to read this story from you for sometime. I liked it's pace and how you left the reader trying to guess what happened next. The musical references gave me a bit of nostalgia as well ;). Thank you for this read :)!
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    Thank you, asamvav! I didn't think about what voice I was conveying, but "delicate satin" is quite the compliment and nice to hear :).
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    Thank you, mollyhousemouse!
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    Thank you, timmy!
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    Thank you! Recalling the dream, seeing my friend appear before me with his lifeless skin was a chilling scene. Even after over a decade, I can never forget it, the clearest image I have of it. The elegy worked perfectly with what I was going for. Much gratitude for having introduced me to the form :).
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    Thank you, Parker. Those are the precise feelings I hoped to evoke: the rage and hurt we all felt having lost a peer of ours. It was a difficult, confusing time for us, though I am glad to have conveyed this story in a way that you all could empathize. Appreciate you reading :).
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    I saw you in a dream, skin blue Making jokes to offset our pain Did you know that you had been slain By a man with conscious past due We were in fields of emerald green Looking back on days that had passed Times when we thought our youth would last Till death befell us, unforeseen Middle school kids grapple your loss Gone are our days of innocence Pondering our own existence Asking of God, what was the cause Filled
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