Homosapiens

So now we understand Ollie's on again off again behavior. Ian is so funny, hilarious. Congratulations on the move to NYC!

The tidbits from the Employee Handbook are true and instructive. I'm not sure if the author made them up or if they are in a real handbook somewhere. If the former, the author deserves credit all the more. Jonah is quite a quirky one, to say the least; I'm kind of done predicting him. Jonah and Noah, huh? Two saviors of the world. I like the cadence of the writing.

Okay, so I don't know about Jonah now. I think he may be up to something awful. His faux reluctance to take Brian's money, after he'd been the one to ask for it in the first place...this is all beginning to seem to me like Jonah is taking Brian for a long ride. I hope I'm wrong because Brian seems sincere. I like this story.

This was laugh out loud in many parts! I just wonder why the author left out the real steamy bits; I want those. I hope Jonah is not up to anything terrible because I'm thinking he genuinely fancies Brian.

I was wondering when Jonah was going to bring up Brian's declaration of love, which seemed premature at the time from both of them, no matter what. Nice story and I do look forward to more.

Very nice work. I love how you used cliffhangers and surprise twists to capture and keep interest and to move the plot along. I also like your style of not starting the next chapter exactly where the last one ended, yet still letting us know what happened in the interim. I am glad that it was Seth and Rory to the end. Like everyone else, I thought it would have been Luke and Rory, but halfway through you made Seth so perfect that no way could Luke cut in there anymore. And did you make Seth the perfect boyfriend! Even his not wanting to say goodbye to Rory made sense, and in the end he recanted anyway. How any person, let alone a 16 year-old boy, would be okay with their boyfriend living with someone the boyfriend has confessed to being attracted to...! Yes, Rory really lucked out with Seth. I, too, noticed they did not say "I love you" to each other. I thought that was what Rory was going to add to the note he left for Seth on the Friday night, but it wasn't. I also thought that Rory was going to bottom for Seth, but that did not happen either. I was hoping that Luke would end up with Aaron, and that may yet happen since, if I understand some of the other comments correctly, you have started Luke's story. Again, bravo!

Why, oh why did Seth have to open his mouth and tell Rory that Luke likes him?? No good deed ever goes unpunished. And he and Rory seemed like such a nice couple at that. Certainly Seth appeared to be the perfect boyfriend. Oh well, let's see how this goes... Very nice writing and the plot is different from the norm.

Beautiful, just beautiful. I agree it is the best-written chapter so far. I am happy Rory showed the wedding drawing to his father. That was something I was so hoping he would do from the moment the drawing was mentioned, not because it should have changed anything for Eddie - it shouldn't have - but because he should know. It was skillful thinking on the author's part when Eddie mentioned that Gina used to give him countless similar drawings, so this one was not new to either her or to him. I love that Seth was a part of this chapter too. I don't know where this is going with Seth and Rory, but if they do not make it I hope it is for a skillfully-woven reason, and not one that seems contrived or unrealistic. The weird feeling Rory gets with Seth's Mom is interesting and I hope we get to the bottom of it before the story ends.

The story is interesting. I particularly like the time and space jumps. (You mentioned Las Vegas back there by mistake, I think.) Intriguing plot. Can't wait to read more.

More please...

Thank you so much.

May I just say this? This is one of the best stories I have read, anywhere. And I have not yet read beyond this chapter. Not that the author cares what I do, but I wanted him to know that's why I have not commented on the succeeding chapters - I just haven't read them yet. I have concluded that this book is so fascinating that I am better off waiting until it is completely posted so I can finish it at my pleasure than go through the agony of waiting 6 months at a time for an update. I suspect the wait each time would break me. I thought the author should know this book is superlative, and there may be more like me out there waiting for the remainder before we read on. I am trying, but not sure I can hold out. We'll see.

I just came across this story today and inhaled all five chapters in one sitting. I was so worked up by the end of this one. What a place for me to have to stop reading and wait for your next update! I don't know where this is going but I love it so far. Why is Ollie blowing hot and cold? What's up with Trevor and Oscar? Where did Ian get the sudden confidence from at the end of this chapter? "I wanted him more than I wanted life itself." I love these superlative declarations of love and need. There are a lot of them in this chapter and they are stimulating. BTW: I started to learn chess a long time ago then life happened and I haven't even seen a board in years. I'm pretty sure that my skill level now is lower than Ian's before he stated playing. Reading your book has the wonderful fringe benefit of reminding me of the game, and that I should get back to playing it. Please post again soon.

Still loving Jordan. He's so much fun. But, oh what a tangled web we weave... Noah's Dad has a point, you know. Does Noah really want to teach? Doesn't seem as if he's given his eventual profession any real thought, and by now he probably should have.

What was Jordan's strange behavior at seeing Kate about, I wonder? Did I mention I love Jordan?

Noahfina! Hilarious! I love Jordan. His POV is so hot. He's so gone for Noah. I see possible problems with his reluctance to bottom, though.

Hot. I like details in sex scenes so the more graphic the merrier. My heart stopped when Jenn told Noah if he breaks up with Jordan, she would stay. As she pointed out, it was a stupid gesture for him to have made in the first place, since the followthrough would have killed him, and he would have quickly grown resentful of Jenn. Or, he would have just continued his deception by continuing to see Jordan. Okay, let us see where else this goes. Wonderful story so far.

"There are times in life when you’re so scared to take a step forward, that you convince yourself to stay frozen in time. And when you finally find the courage to move ahead, you realize just how much you’ve been missing." True words. I like the movements back and forth in time. Jordan is presumably hiding in Noah's room at the beginning of this chapter and Jordan's anxiety is explained. Jenn has become a regular drill sergeant, hasn't she?

These guys have me laughing out loud. Their conversation is hilarious. Oh, Noah should definitely stay!

Everything about the chapter was wonderful. I can see the hard work you put into it. The dialogue, both internal and aloud, was sharp and engrossing. And what a way to woo one's love! Jordan was quite a force to be reckoned with in his quest to win Noah. I don't think Noah caved too quickly. Everything was believable. It was indeed time to get to them actually being together (i.e. sex hopefully) and whatever challenges may lie immediately ahead. Bravo!

The plot just got really deep, really quickly. I did not see Snowflake going home with Brian in another 2 weeks. I did not see Sabrina taking the break-up with Snowflake quite so hard. Thanks for giving us that background on Brian's desire to practise medicine. The scene of the view of Lake Tahoe was magnificent.

We got the deets (details) and the heat I so wanted. Thanks! Loving it.

Okay, that description of Snowflake waking up was hot. But I hope we are in for more heat when you get to the sex part between them!

The talk and feelings of romance is great. What I don't understand is why the description of the sexual activities between the two main characters is glossed over. I expected at least the granular descriptions that we got with Brian and Jimmy. But, with Brian and Snowflake they kissed (no details on the kiss); Brian gave Snowflake a blowjob (no details on the blowjob). Even the humping between Snowflake and Sabrina got more details. I am not sure if you were deliberately giving the detailed sex depictions a break, after two consecutive chapters with Jimmy, but I sure hope we are soon going to get some details with Brian and Snowflake. Still interesting story, nevertheless.

Meanwhile, Snowflake is supposed to be exclusive to Sabrina, or is it solely the other way around? The plot thickens. Yeah, flaming hot!