Will Hawkins

Here I am, stuck out in the middle of the Mata Atlantica in Brazil -- no doughnuts within miles.

First time I have seen a grammatical error that I felt needed correction: there is no such word as 'anyways'. Just use 'anyway' instead.

It is probable that the scars on Lex's back are from a homeopathic father, but that is just an assumption on my part. I am sure something will come out as the story moves along. Lex is a very trusting soul, especially because Ian has no aura. He is much braver than I have been about my tats. I have several, none too large and certainly none covering my entire back!

Okay, thank you google. Nemo is a red\white fish and Dory is a little larger and blue. Sounds like the nicknames are appropriate, especially if Nemo is a red-head and Dory has blue eyes.

The black AMX card can be either personal or corporate, but so far we have been told nothing that would warrant either one and the initiation fee is rather significant. Let's see where you lead us, Kbois

Fantastic opening chapter -- don't be concerned about the pace of the opening -- it is certainly adequate.

This is the second time I have started this series. I don't remember either what distracted me completing the reading the first time or any of the story. I do note that the several comments I see are of recent vintage, so I may, from time to time make a comment as the author is probably still checking the comments pages. I have found elsewhere that by the time a series is published the author is so sick of reading and re-reading her work to make grammatical and punctuation corrections that she no longer reads the comments, however, this posting is new enough so that the author is probably still interested. I will not comment on pacing however as that is the prerogative of the author (in concert with the Editor if there is one, though I do not see either an Editor or a Beta Reader listed for this story), but I will comment infrequently I hope, on grammatical errors. Grammarly is an excellent program for correcting spelling, but it doesn't detect homophones, and frequently the author's eye skips right over those even on second and third readings. That is where a 'fresh eye' is valuable.

I will not be commenting often on these books\chapters\stories as they were first published about five years ago and I realize that by the time a book\series gets published the author is probably sick and tired of it. There are a few grammatical errors still in the chapters, They are low key however and do not interfere with a late-coming reader's enjoyment with the story. Com, you have created characters and relationships that truly 'come to life' and I will continue reading in subsequent books with great interest and enjoyment. Congratulations.

Tayren is avoiding the daylight and has some ability to read minds or at least feel the emotions that drive the people he seeks out. The relationship between the two characters can develop into an intense tale. I will read subsequent chapters avidly. Congratulations on a meaningful beginning, Com, you are creating a relationship that has a deep impact.

at the top line of a story listing is a heading called 'views' what are views?

What special attributes do the two we have met so far that both are invited to sit at the Captain's table?

In my comment space in the previous chapter, I told all of our readers about hosting students from the college at which I taught. Just as a final note to bring that portion of my life history up to date, one of those students was a Brazillian boy, he is now married with three little ones and is living in a city only about 300 clicks from me. I still get messages from him and about three other of my boys several times a year from all over the US. These boys, well men now, mark an interval in my life that was very rewarding. They still call me 'Mister Will'.

I taught Engineering Technology classes at a local Community (now Baccalaureate level) College. During those years I boarded up to five students, always male and over eighteen. There was never any government investigation either of me or of my home because of the maturity of my boarders. Since those years I have been contacted by a number of those students with letters of appreciation and thanks for making their school years so comfortable. Frankly, the boarding process was good for me as well, My spouse of twenty years had passed suddenly from an extreme attack of asthma and I would have been very lonely if it were not for the presence of 'my boys'. They were clean and -- in the main, quiet. The only burden they were was in cooking larger meals, breakfasts, suppers and late night snacks, and additional laundry. The boys assured me it was a mutually satisfactory arrangement, but if I had to go through the approval process of CPS, it would never have happened because I was an 'out' gay man in an era where that would be adjudged a crime, though there was never any intimate relations with my boys, my history would have prevented them from being there.

I read all the comments and when I get to the end of them I realize that someone has said\asked everything I was thinking about the chapter. It would be unusual if somewhere in the over fifty comments for each chapter, that were not the case. I know enough about GA's rules not to beg for another chapter before your schedule allows it and the Editor and Beta readers have done their thing. Having the spelling and grammar checked improves the reading so much, I just quietly wait until the procedures have been gone through -- that does not mean I am not eager to continue reading, however. I was a little confused at the start of this book as to where the horses came from but that was quickly resolved with the mention of the time-lapse between the first series and this one. I used to ride a little, frequently bareback and can see how a calm horse could improve the strength of a partially paralyzed person. And yes, with patience and training a horse will adapt to the needs of the rider.

Congratulations, you know you are a successful writer when there are so many commenting on the beginning chapters of a sequel -- you've got people interested and excited about following your characters. I know that I am looking forward to reading about their lives.

Does the leopard change her spots? I don't think so. Okay, Miriam is having a baby just at the time our boys are discussing getting involved with a baby in their lives. That give Miriam a solution for her problems, but it tangles her into their lives for sure. If she is so violently homophobic why would she want her baby to be raised by gays? And who is the father of her baby -- doesn't he have any say about the child? The training for the marathon sounds like a super idea but what are Louis's bosses going to say about it?

The return of sexual ability is a real milestone in their relationship and now a discussion about a child. That is even more important because it marks more than merely a return to connubial relations, but a progressive step in their relationship. Excellent writing, Tim and a beautiful story.

How does Don pronounce his nickname for Louis? If I had to guess I would say 'loose', but when one is unsure, it is better to consult the author.

I have made my comments on the other posting, but subsequently, I checked my facts, Conversion Therapy (CT), as it is now named, is illegal in fifteen states in the US, several territories, and individual cities. And under consideration in fifteen additional venues. Unfortunately, these legal bans apply only to minors and I do not know what the legal status of CT is in any part of Canada.

I am ashamed -- I have been pecking away at writing a story for GA for several weeks now and after reading the first paragraph to your story I went back to read what I had written. I nearly fell asleep, your work sings -- possibly because you are also a poet, my work is detailed and analytical and even puts me to sleep, Is that because my writing experience is with Engineering Reports? I am going to go back and revise my first page to get some poetry into it. Your writing has pulled me in and captured me, congratulations.

It seems we have two story threads running at the same time. Let's see, a name for the baby -- bright red, could be 'Fire', but I am sure you will come up with something more creative. Personal prejudice: I prefer interacting with wyverns rather than with dragons, as they have the normal number of limbs, but then, I am not the author. Let's keep reading and see how soon you, as the author, clear up my confusion by interweaving the two threads of the tale!

I am a fan of Game of Thrones and enjoy reading about dragons, especially babies. I will be looking for more info about the hatchling, size, color, personality, etc. and the mysterious dark voice so I am moving on to the next chapter.

Well, nobody got decked -- so I am wrong. That is not the first time nor probably will it be the last.

I have a strong feeling that it is NOT going to be Clem who gives Nate his comeuppance, but Ashlee who will step in there and maybe even land a roundhouse punch or three. Good story Sasha, certainly holding my interest to the very end.

a deep steading breath -- a deep steadying breath The original of the quotation and the complete line: If a man does not keep pace with his companions, perhaps it is because he hears a different drummer. Let him step to the music which he hears, however measured or far away. Henry David Thoreau