Poor Rory? Seems to me he is his own biggest problem - I've slowly developed a liking ( of sorts) to almost every other character in this story - except him
This author has a tendency to fill his stories with very unlikable characters - in my opinion - and frankly I can't really figure out why. But he is losing me quickly - I'm at the stage where I start scrolling through paragraph after paragraph , scanning for something positive to land on - and the landing happens less and less frequently. I'm asking myself, "why would I want to read about these people and their ridiculous drama?" And again, I cant reason why...
I've decided I'm only reading your stories that are labeled "complete" - and yeah, this one satisfied that criteria Sooo ... Good job fella and thanks for the reads!
OK so even though I knew it was coming, I can't believe that this is where you "paused" the action - really, sir, you're killing me here - please, have a heart and toss a few breadcrumbs this way will ya?
There is a certain irony to the reality that others have such ultimate control over you - much like the way that gay youth grow up in a world that forces its control over their own lives - interesting if maddening that such injustice is continually perpetrated on those striving to end the injustice. Try not to let it dim your shine - in fact, let it fan your flame!
It's true that most of us struggled with self confidence as teens - just ... maybe some protagonists need to be the kind that don't remind you of you. Maybe the appeal of a hero is that elusive magic that you always wished to feel in yourself.
It would be interesting to read a companion story to this, told from Jacob's point of view - because there is a natural symbiosis between the exhibitionist and the voyeur.
I think I already know what's going to happen - but bring it on, because it's going to redeem TJ in the eyes of the other guys - and I like TJ for some reason - he's had to deal with a lot more than has actually been revealed.
One of my favs - read it start to finish - I yelled a lot and scared the dog a few times, but in the end it was just ..."sunshine and candy" is the phrase I think I've heard you use... Thank you sir for all you give
"If you were to live forever, let me live forever less one day, so that I may never have to know the pain of living without you." That's fucking brilliant.