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👆🏻Yes! Hopefully that will be her downfall.
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I didn’t expect Rita to have such a lack of respect for Rick to be as open and blunt about how she would be using Rick in her scheme! It was frustrating to have Rick emotionally check out of the conversation and miss key details, even though it is a coping mechanism for his anxiety. I believe if Rita were a man, society might call him a shrewd and cunning businessman. The brashness Rita displays could be considered mere schmoozing and going after what he wants. That doesn't mean peers would like him, but there might be a level of respect Rita isn’t receiving; this obviously chafes her. Rita is tenacious. She moved her business to Eagle Lake and has no intentions of striking out again. Rick is key to her plans. It is concerning she brought up Eagle Lake not being an easy town to keep secrets in or driving hours away to get certain things you need. She appears to understand Rick’s family dynamics as related to his business. What else does she know about Rick? Also interesting was the bump in with Mr. Piano Man ❤️ Can’t wait for more encounters! I really love the titles of your chapters and how they subtly explain each as well as give future clues. Google search 😉
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My grandmother used to say, “If wishing could make it so we would have our heart’s desire. We must work hard and pray God grants us what is best.” In this case I truly hope the moon does so for Sawyer and Jimmy. Sawyer not only needs to wake up, but also survive the transformation to wolf instead of rabid.
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I really liked Rick’s ‘discussion’ with Marshall, too! So often workers in sex industries become the primary source of kindness, human interaction and advice for those they work with. Unfortunately, society can be pretty harsh and unfair to those individuals. Marshall entered Rick’s life at a critical point and although it wasn’t best for the long term, their relationship really helped Rick. It was neat that when Rick was driving back and in such a negative head space, looping demeaning thoughts, ‘Marshall’ stepped forward with positive, affirming ideas. My hope is someday soon Rick will recognize those thoughts were actually his own.
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I commented in Chapter 4 that I dislike Rita, and this chapter only served to strengthen that feeling. She has this conniving pushiness that seems part real (what kind of person argues over a 1/2 percent sales tax ?!) and part pretense. She’s obviously scheming something and did see Rick’s truck. Bring on the dinner, we are ready for her...
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Jeepers that was a traumatizing read! Did the rogue treat Sawyer as he had other victims? He didn’t first have sex with Sawyer. The rogue came at him in wolf form and immediately either went for the kill or attempt to turn Sawyer. Jimmy whimpering at the end was foreboding.
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Although this chapter left me with an aching sadness for Rick, (...very well written, by the way), I also noticed signs of change that give me hope. Rick headed to Milwaukee mid work week without his usual preplanning ahead. Then, he didn’t give up when he almost hit a deer, his motel from years back was closed, the escorts and ‘dating’ sites were a bust, and MKE’s wasn’t located where he thought it would be. He pushed through the bar’s noise, less than welcoming bartender and overall vibe. Yes, his lack of confidence and insecurities ultimately won, but he tried. I also love that the memories of Marshall still give him comfort.
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Jimmy has to maintain a grip on his wolf and continue to follow his instincts, stay on the rogue’s trail and stay in control. @kjoel1961 is right! Tension is rising!!!
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👆🏼Yes! That’s how I perceive Rick, too. And I am rooting for him, as well. Let’s hope the piano instructor can offer a better future.
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I really dislike Rita! She’s not just a brash woman trying to get Rick into a relationship and steaming ahead in spite of his disinterest. Her obvious disregard for boundaries is unsettling.
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Well done! I’m a domestic violence counselor; this chapter was emotionally exhausting. Your writing details exactly what the cycle involves, what it is to be a victim, what it takes to plan an escape, and how victims oftentimes must put their faith in someone who doesn’t like or respect them in order to get away. I want to believe this is the first large crack in the leadership and hold Fergus has over his pack, but something tells me we are in for a much bumpier ride.
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This was such a satisfying read! Both books are well written and obviously well thought out. You did your characters justice and your readers are left with smiles. Now what’s this I hear about a shifter story?! Yes, please 😉
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This chapter broke my heart. You captured what it is to be a victim of sexual assault, and more chillingly, how predators behave. I’m a domestic violence counselor; this terrible cycle, whether it is intimidation, sexual assault, physical, or emotional abuse, follows victims. It can take years and oftentimes decades to find closure. I am hopeful for a happy ending for Rick. People get better; they rebuild, have peace and a feeling of control over their lives.
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This seems like a really good stopping point. Colton is happy with the direction of his life and the business seems to be off to a good start. Looking forward to the next segment. Like, right away... 😉
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This chapter really spotlighted the changes Colton is making in his life. While Apollo continues to have brief affairs and truly seems happy and at peace with it, Colton focused more on the gym and literally building a new life. And then... Sean enters!
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Oh my gosh the tension in that chapter had me so uptight I had to take a few deep breaths and stretch afterwards. Jimmy’s responses to both Sawyer and most especially to Maddie were spot on and needed. He was able to react with grace and showed Maddie respect and dignity, which she didn’t necessarily deserve. Both of which will help her reimagine her relationship with her son. She is a force, but has met the immovable object. Well done!
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👆🏻And that’s exactly how I took this well written chapter. I notice that because of how others react, and how quickly word spreads around the community, there are those who overly worry about what others would think. It never felt to me that Colton’s mom was rejecting him, just that she was worried about others opinions and who was talking about the family. Loving this story so far!
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Both the chapter and this particular comment resonated with me. I live in a small, midwestern farming community and it is so true that the people can be embracing or scandalized. What has always amazed me is the seemingly arbitrary nature. Over the years I’ve heard of affairs, coming out stories, illegal activities... you name it. For some life just goes on and for others, no matter what community penance is done, the person is never really accepted again. Anger stews well hidden behind small town pleasantries. Colt using cuss words and a tee shirt to finally get his anger out made perfect sense to me.
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I really like this chapter, and have enjoyed the last several chapters. When a relationship works it tends to do so without a lot of drama, whether internal or external. You’ve been able to show TC, David, and Sin steadily progressing as a united, functioning, loving, committed relationship. Whether family and friends all understand, they have been respectful. I think it’s because appropriate boundaries are in place. It feels like our guys are in this together and can handle whatever life has in store for them.
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Separating amicably and releasing the hurt so a pathway to a new, respectful relationship is very hard to accomplish. This chapter really illustrates possible pitfalls. I really liked that it was done with a sense of humor. I was initially lulled into believing Jada was farther along with her emotional resolution of the marriage. Slamming Sawyer to the ground and then calling his mom?!! Um, no. Sawyer is a better person than I am, because after getting up, I couldn’t have stayed to hash things out. He was able to do so with wit and grace.
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The use of arrows as an emotional analogy is poignant, effective, and, for this chapter, ultimately hopeful. There is so much promise for Jimmy and Sawyer.
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You could feel the distrust and discord the pack has for Fergus throughout this chapter. His egotism (he really believes that he saved the pack by challenging and killing their beloved Alpha?!) and self-centeredness prevent Fergus from truly getting a pulse on the dynamics of his pack. The ending scene of the pack gasping and flinching away from Fergus shifted to his wolf, rather than joining for a full moon run, made me cringe in sympathy for all.
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I had a complete and total sh—t week and absolutely everything about this chapter relaxed me! Thanks for that 😊!! Loved the last line of the opening paragraph; ‘Sinclair felt as if something clicked into place.’ That is the ultimate gut check of your feelings line. Wouldn’t it be a better world if we all could access that part of ourselves? I think the training and roles are well explained in relation to the story and where the characters are right now. I especially love the subtle ways TC and David are redefining themselves together. I am looking forward to more in-depth dynamics. My only what the heck moment was over the mushrooms on the pizza. Why would TC knowingly put them on the whole pizza? He took Sinclair’s likes into account... why not David’s? And yes, I hate mushrooms on pizza and having to pick them off 🤷♀️ Slimy things hide under the cheese!
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👆🏻Interesting idea! I hadn’t thought about that and it makes a lot of sense. It would explain why he is keeping Jimmy away, too. If Jimmy gets around the pack he could scent the rouge. I don’t think Fergus wants to give up that much control. I think he wants Jimmy to get rid of the problem and then Fergus will keep it from the pack, just like he is trying to do with this latest attack.
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While I am not surprised the rogue wolf belongs to Fergus, I still had a knot in my stomach throughout this chapter. It painfully and tragically explains why Jimmy is hunting. I have a better understanding of rogue verses rabid, too. Still curious as to why Jimmy had to leave his home and seek a new pack. I am grateful for Sawyer; he is a calming, grounding presence for Jimmy. Still cannot stand Fergus; alphas should take care of their pack, not just look out for themselves.
