Fishwings

I must say, almost ninety percent of my writing is sparked by music. Something about the way I can connect my characters to the lyrics of the music, and the way the melody and beat moves me makes a scene just play itself out in my head. I rarely write in silence, but I can't write if the songs keep changing, so I put it on repeat to keep the atmosphere constant. If I don't have a really good song stuck in my head, my writing tends to be bad. Actually, I tend to not write at all : D. Also, I seem to be able to write really well when I'm sad or angry, so I'm guessing the reason why music inspires me so much is because it can more easily emotionally move me.

Huh. I never thought that the guards were alien-like themselves, but now that you've mentioned it I guess they kinda do. I try hard to develop my characters so I'm glad they are balancing the story. Glad you're enjoying it Stephan : )! There will be lots more to come yes...

I'm not sure about two lines in the first stanza that end off in "stomach"... "Like rocks falling from atop a grand canyon, My heart drops to the chambers of my stomach. Left without an understanding companion, Hearing your words is just too much to stomach." The repetition is awkward. I usually don't dig "prose" ish poems, but I like what you got here : D.

Here's the first couple of chapters of I'm Not From Earth! So it's been a long time since I've last written anything worth while, but after several [bajillion] cursed writer's blocks, I was finally able to put my ideas onto paper. Or er, word processor. Again, a big thanks to Colin for your super editing and MJ for being my muse. Comments, critique, discussions, questions and anything is very welcome : ) Hope you guys enjoy!

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"A pair of red eyes stared at me. The creature behind the eyes moved toward me very casually, as if it were sizing me up" I honestly thought Josh met a werewolf, LOL. Really love the story so far Meeko. The pace is excellent, everything is dramatic and not overdone -- even the gun thing -- and... I'm deciding whether to abduct Trent or Jayce. Don't keep us waiting : D!!

You got me captured at "It all started with a potato." It's been said above, but I have to say the beginning is very well done: captivating, light paced, etc. Good stuff. Good job yoh! The rest of the writing, too, is very well crafted. Here are some lines that I really enjoyed: "He was in full courtroom mode now; his broad shoulders an impressive shadow as he moved forward. I could literally feel the fight draining out of me at that moment, the ambient dropping noticeably in the room. But the cold shiver that ran through me had nothing to do with the temperature." "Staring into the mirror that evening, I could see the surface wounds from the battle. They were burnt into my psyche; they were etched upon my skin. But the scarring ran much, much deeper

HAPPY NEW YEAR!!!!!!!!

That was a really good read. I definitely didn't expect Nakajima to get that violent. I liked how the ending was a mirror situation of the beginning. It made me feel all warm and fuzzy inside : 3 Good job Jovian!

Ohhh I see. Yeah I can understand that -- sometimes that pisses me off too. A lot of authors do italics for self thoughts, but some of them don't as well. I use a combination of both.

Hey hh5, Just read your story "Who am I?". The writing has potential, but the bolded/italisized words in the story really bothered me, lol. I think you should just replace it with normal font, as the varying text really detracts from the writing itself. Send a PM to JSmith requesting "Author Status" yoh.

CONGRATS : D!!! You guys totally deserve it!!

As they say: No tears from the author, no tears from the readers! Or er, something along those lines, hah. The descriptions of emotions in your story were very impressive [i think that was already mentioned], and just, everything in general was impressive. I don't have much else to say, except that I like it lots! It seemed to me like you did this out of a sudden spurt of inspiration, thus explaining the intensity? Neways, don't stop writing!

Oh no it's unearthed! First of all, thank you very much for the kind comment! However, that story is kind of uh, dead, and I may continue it, but I probably won't due to the fact that that story was actually terribly planned. Sincere apologies to you =[ But I do have good news. I'm working on a story that I had been working on since the beginning of April -ish this year, so I'll be posting that around December/January. It heavily depends on when I actually get to finish it, because I don't want to post chapters up while it is incomplete. I'll keep you posted.

Just read your first chapter of The Paladin, and I quite like it! Overall, it is quite sophisticated and the characters Jon and Tyler are intriguing. Parts of the passage seemed a bit broken when you were speeding up the pace, but that may be just me. I like that. Good work, keep posting!

Just read Chapter 8 of your story. Nice twist at the end! Definitely one of the best reads around here! Great job, seriously. Your style of writing is very intriguing and natural. Love the conversations! And I LOVE pistachio flavoured ice, just btw. I definitely felt the tension between Shane and Jake. Keep up the good work! I can't wait to read more!

Love the story! I read all the chapters in one go. I have one critique though, and it was with the chemistry between Joe and Adam. I felt as though their romance was really rushed, more so in the beginning, and at times I didn't really "feel it". On the other hand, the conversation was fast and well done, and the history I thought was described well -- simply because it kept me interested. Keep up the good work!

Yes, to catch my friends off guard and freak them out.

Thanx Trevor, Conner, Ieshwar, and bondwriter for the replies <3 And sorry for the late response, lawl. Chapter eight is going to come in a bit, sorry -- havent had the time to write lately these days. And I also have to get around reading the recommended fiction here too, LOL. I'm such a lazy bum. Im glad Ieshwar that you like Devin : D he's not really hard to describe for me because I've had a friend who had similar personality traits as him. And thanks for the advice bondwriter~ I can definitely see this sense of disbelief and where that is coming from : 3 I'll keep it in mind when I start my next chapter. Lmao, thanks again for the support! Means a lot to a writer to get feedback.

Rofl yes, its tent sex time.

Rofl, uh, Chapter Seven is now posted : D Thanks Marty, Conner, Ieshwar, Bondwriter and all for the comments and support and stuff [and thankyou colin for editting <3]. Means a lot to me, even though I haven't had the time to be working on it. Summer classes suck and so I doubt I'll be writing any time soon. Enjoi : 3

Thanks guys for all the comments and support <3 Of relating to Shawn... I usually write about things that I don't know, but this short story is of the contrary. So I guess the only person who can relate to him would be me. I have no point :ranger: A morgue is a good idea. I'll keep that in mind while writing the next few chapters~ Maybe Ill include some car crashes and memory loss too : D

Me likey :ranger: Especially these two lines... Day after day, year after year, I dance as they pull the strings I am a replaceable cog in an efficient machine Overall, I like "I Am The Answer" better than the first. It has a powerful ring to it.

Great story so far! Humor is well woven into with the story... which is a nioce variation of the usual depressing versions : D Keep it up~

Agreed. To me, Dennis has more character and more of a past that grows on you while Aiden... well, eh.