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Pour Me Another - 6. Cupid's Arrow

It was busier than normal for a Monday in Chapel Chase. Ten minutes after the five o’clock whistle blew, several uptight looking gentlemen, dressed in the latest designer men’s fashion, strolled into the restaurant to continue discussing their business deals over an early dinner. They filled the far corner of the dining room while Michael Waters broke away from the group and headed towards the bar.

Asher tried not to smile as Michael approached. Instead, he ducked his head and started preparing Michael’s usual drink. “Rum and Coke,” Asher said while setting it on the counter in front of the bar stool Michael climbed onto.

Michael blew out a sigh as he nodded his head. “Dude, you’re a life saver.” He happily turned up the bottom and emptied the glass.

“So,” Michael gave Asher a sideways glance. The intense scrutiny made Asher’s hands tremble and a crimson flush peppered his cheeks. Seconds ticked by. It wasn’t until Asher looked up at Michael, finally making eye contact, then he continued. “Where did you learn all of that stuff yesterday? Were you in the military, like a medic or something?”

Asher shook his head and chuckled. “Nope, I’m not a medic. I learned it in school--”

“Shit, they teach that kind of stuff in bartending school?” If it wasn’t for the playful tone in Michael’s voice, Asher would have been offended by the remark. He kept his eyes fixed on Michael wanting to see his reaction when he told him, “Wrong again! I learned that stuff at Hamilton University, where I was working on my degree in physical therapy.”

Michael looked confused. “If you’re a physical therapist, then why the hell are you working here?”

Ziggy’s head shot up from the other end of the bar at Michael’s thoughtless jab, “Hey, watch it, Waters!”

“Sorry dude,” Michael flashed one of his million dollar smiles. The man knew that he could be a total jerk, but he also knew how to turn on the charm and smooth things over. In the dog eat dog world of business, Michael had mastered the rules of survival.

“That, good sir, is a very long story,” Asher said as he took one of the waitress’s orders for a round of drinks, “A story better left for another day.” He quickly filled the whiskey tumblers and had the girl returning to the table with half a dozen geezer drinks.

Asher glanced over at Michael and grinned. “You know what, Mr. Waters? I’m going show you something else I learned in school.”

“Oh dear lord,” Ziggy’s eyes rounded with fear at the possibility of what Asher had up his sleeve.

Grabbing several bottles off the shelf behind the bar, Asher started mixing up a strange cocktail.

“What’s he doing?” Michael asked Ziggy when he grabbed the empty glass off the counter top. They both watched Asher’s hands fly over the bottles, pouring countless liquids into the stainless steel drink shaker.

Asher heard them talking about him, but he didn’t stop what he was doing. “I’m making you something to drink that’s a lot more interesting that those plain old Rum and Cokes that you’re always slamming back. I’m tired of making boring drinks.” He replaced the lid and started shaking the concoction.

“I’m worried,” Michael mumbled.

“You should be,” Ziggy teased him for good measure.

“Both of you shut up.” Asher stuck his tongue out at the two of them before turning his attention back to the drink. He placed a glass on the counter in front of Michael and poured the mixture inside. Michael and Ziggy both stared at the pink concoction.

Asher crossed his arms. “Just try it.”

Michael eyed the glass. “You expect me to put something in my mouth without knowing what’s in it?”

“That’s exactly what Ash wants you to do!” Ziggy burst out laughing while Asher shot an angry look at his co-worker.

“It’s called a Cupid’s Arrow.” Asher rolled his eyes at both of them. When he reached out to take the drink back, Michael reached for it at the same time. Their fingers overlapped on the glass. Neither of them pulled their hand away immediately.

“Do you trust me?” Asher softly asked Michael.

Michael nibbled on his lower lip before nodding his head.

“Then try it.” Asher grinned when Michael lifted the glass to his nose and smelled the contents. He took a small sip at first before smiling and taking a larger gulp. “See, it’s not bad, is it?”

Asher bumped his hip against Ziggy, forcing the man to move out of his way as he pulled down more bottles from the shelf to make a new concoction.

The night passed quickly as Asher balanced his time between making drinks for the dwindling customers and whipping up exotic new drinks for Michael to taste. Some of the mixes needed substitutes when he didn’t have all of the ingredients, but Asher quickly found out that Michael was fonder of the sweeter drinks over the sour ones.

“Hey, Ashy, what’s this called again?” Michael asked, holding up the remaining purple liquid in his glass.

“That’s a Purple Dragon.” Asher smiled. Michael’s eyes were slightly glassy. His speech was still good, but tomorrow was a work day, and Asher knew it was time to cut him off.

“Pour me another.”

Asher shook his head, tossing a lock of hair across his forehead with the action. “Sorry buddy, not tonight. I think you’ve had enough.” He waited for Michael’s outburst that never came.

Michael got off his stool, but didn’t make a move towards the door. “This was fun.”

“Do you need me to call you a cab?” Ziggy asked from the far end of the bar.

“No, I think I’ll take the subway. That always gives me time to think things over. See ya later.” Michael smiled as he headed out of the bar.

Asher could smell Ziggy’s cologne before he felt the heat coming off his body as he stepped closer to where Asher was wiping down the bar. “What are you doing?”

Faking an innocent stare, Asher glanced up, “Cleaning so we can go home.”

“Not that,” Ziggy hitched his thumb and pointed over his shoulder towards the door. “What’s going on between you and Michael-Fucking-Waters?” Ziggy demanded. His tone was hard yet protective.

“Look, Zig, we’re just friends--”

“Friends, hmmm?”

“In case you haven’t noticed, Michael Waters is as straight as they come. I’d have a better chance of seducing you into my bed than him.”

Ziggy’s eyes glancing up and down Asher’s tight frame, before he cocked an eyebrow and grinned, “In your dreams boyfriend.” He said, popping a hand on his hip.

Asher threw his head back and laughed. “Dude, you have no idea how many times I’ve thought about your juicy, round bubble butt while lying in bed jacking off--”

“Jesus Christ, Asher!”

Shooting Ziggy a mischievous grin, Asher shrugged his shoulders and giggled, “You started it!”

~~~~~

Michael avoided Chapel Chase the next two days. Asher found himself wondering about the man. Was it more than a hangover keeping him away? Twice, Asher had to bite his tongue to refrain from asking one of the guys from Johnson & Ashcroft if Michael was okay, but how would that look? Instead, Asher kept himself busy and when the evening crowd grew slower, he gave the waitstaff a hand to help keep his mind occupied.

Thursday evening, Michael strolled into the bar. His dark brown hair looked glossy and freshly washed and his business suit didn’t have the normal wrinkles after sitting in an office for hours on end. Ziggy watched the man glance around looking for Asher. Victoria was standing behind the counter at the end of the bar where Asher normally worked.

“He’s not here.” Ziggy told Michael before he settled onto a stool at the bar.

Disappointment clouded Michael’s eyes. Ziggy watched the man absently push a napkin around the wooden bar top.

“Asher called in sick to work tonight--”

“He’s sick?” Michael’s voice was suddenly filled with concern.

Shaking his head, Ziggy chuckled, “Not quite, the little shit called in sick so he could stay home to watch a baseball game on television.”

“Baseball?” Michael questioned him.

“Yeah, Ash is a huge Springfield Sabers fan.”

Victoria joined in the conversation. “It’s not just baseball. Asher is a total sports fanatic.”

Unable to resist, Ziggy added, “Yeah, if there are balls involved, Asher’s into it,” which earned him a punch to his arm from the petite waitress. Michael glanced between the two of them, before thanking them and heading back into the warm summer night.

~~~~~

The Sabers were two strikes into the third inning when a loud knock shook the front door. Asher immediately wondered who that could be. Not wanting to miss any of the action, he rolled his eyes and hit the button to pause the game before dashing to the door.

Worried that it would be Mrs. Nguyen from down the hall needing his assistance with another ‘emergency,’ Asher took a deep breath before swinging open the door. Ready to tell the old lady her cat climbing the drapes and getting stuck on the china hutch didn’t qualify as life or death, his protest was suddenly stuck in his mouth…Michael!

Michael Waters was standing in the hallway outside Asher’s door. He looked gorgeous in his faded blue jeans and t-shirt, which was the perfect attire for lounging on the couch watching a baseball game. Asher was so caught up inspecting Michael’s sexy body that he didn’t notice the large pizza box he was balancing with one hand while holding a six-pack of beer in the other.

“Can I come in?” Michael asked.

Stumbling out of the way, Asher’s face flushed red with embarrassment. What was it about the man that had him acting like a fool whenever he was around? Yes, the guy was incredibly handsome, but Asher saw good looking guys every day. Michael was straight; there was no way that this could develop into anything more than just friendship, so why did he get butterflies in his stomach whenever he thought about this man?

“Oh shit, man, sorry about that.” Asher clambered to wave Michael inside. “Hell yes, come in.”

Michael set the pizza down on the coffee table while Asher took the beer from his hand. Leaving two bottles out for them to drink with their food, Asher placed the rest in the refrigerator and grabbed some plates before heading back to the living room. He stopped for a moment when he noticed that Michael had already settled onto the couch and was drooling over steamy pepperoni and melted cheese.

“I also added mushrooms and black olives to half since I didn’t know if you liked them or not.” The man called over his shoulder.

Asher grinned while watching Michael pick at hot toppings. His cute face looked sweet and childlike. “So, to what do I owe this pleasure?” Asher asked handing him a napkin. He considered taking a seat on the couch beside him, but opted for the big blue lounge chair instead. Asher wanted to be close to Michael, yet that felt like a dangerous move.

Plopping a gooey slice onto each of their plates, Michael got comfortable on the tattered sofa. He shrugged his broad shoulders and blew on his pizza. “I thought you could use some company tonight, am I right?”

Contemplating his answer, Asher watched the guy take a bite. He was thrilled to be spending time with Michael, however brief their time together may turn out to be. Michael was a heartbreaker to the opposite sex, what damage could he do to a guy like Asher, who didn’t have a snowball’s chance in hell at escaping this infatuation with anything less than his disillusioned heart shattered into a million pieces. “Sure, I could use some company. I’m glad you came by.”

“So, what about this game,” Michael asked between bites. “Why is it so important?”

Asher had forgotten about the baseball game paused on his television. “It’s the Springfield Sabers.”

Michael took a sip of beer to wash his pizza down. “They’re doing good this year.” He threw out a few stats to Asher’s surprise.

“I told you I’m a baseball fan--”

“Fans don’t call in sick to work just to stay home and watch a game.” Michael’s gaze made Asher’s face flush red again.

Picking up the remote control, Asher clicked the play button bringing the action immediately back to life.

“Paul Ryman, number fifteen is making his way from the dugout to warm up for the bat,” the sportscaster announced.

Asher paused the screen. His face was hard as he stared at the television set, “He’s what’s so important about this game.” His voice was barely a whisper as the truth tumbled from his lips.

Michael’s eyes grew wide with recognition. “You know that guy?”

Biting his bottom lip, Asher nodded his head.

“Dude, that’s so cool! Did you go to school together or something?” Michael asked then took another long draw from his beer. “Springfield is only a two hour flight from here, why didn’t you just go to the game instead of sitting home and watching it on T.V.?”

Asher shrugged. “A couple of our friends actually went to the game. Paul said he could get us all tickets. They invited me to tag along with them, but I’ve been saving all of my money for something else…a trip.” Asher’s eyes darted over to the surfboard in the corner of his apartment.

“You’d pass up Saber tickets for a beach vacation?” Michael snorted.

Asher’s face grew pale. “Paul Ryman was engaged to my sister.”

Michael glanced back and forth from the frozen television set to the polished long board in the corner. “It’s more than just a vacation, isn’t it?” Michael whispered. The game was suddenly forgotten.

The smile that appeared on Asher’s lips didn’t reach his eyes. “That was my sister’s surfboard. Allison had always dreamed of taking a trip to surf the waves on Turtle Island…” His words just trailed off as his eyes couldn’t break away from the overpowering presence of his sister’s most prized possession.

Michael got up and walked over to the board. He ran his fingers along the woodgrain and down the thick edges. “It’s beautiful.”

A shiver shot down Asher’s spine. For a second he swore that he could feel Michael’s touch on his skin when he gently caressed Allison’s surfboard. Even after three years, the pain of his sister’s death still stung like a fresh wound. It was a struggle to speak about her.

“When Allison got sick, the doctor’s didn’t diagnose her with Leukemia until it was too late.” The muscles flexed in Asher’s jaw, his handsome face set in a furious scowl.

“I’m so sorry, Ash.” Michael softly expressed his sympathy.

Asher’s hands trembled as he turned up the bottle and downed the rest of his beer. “Thanks,” he muttered under his breath as went to the kitchen to get them both another drink.

While Asher took his time in the kitchen, Michael checked out the photos displayed on the bookcase. One frame was a close up of two smiling faces. Asher was pressed cheek to cheek with a gorgeous woman with a remarkable resemblance to Asher.

Michael gently sighed staring at the picture of Allison. Beside the picture with his sister, there was also a family photo and a childhood picture of three young boys posing with baseball bats wearing identical team jerseys.

“C’mon, dude, what are we waiting for? There’s a ballgame to watch!” The sudden change in Asher’s demeanor was evident. He wasn’t ready to explore the painful memories of losing his only sibling. Handing Michael a cold bottle of beer and pressing play on the remote had them immersed in a nail-biting ballgame that went into it's second extra-inning.

Sooooo wink.png You like? I think we are starting to see more of Michael's personality, but he does have some demons that he is still dealing with.  We also got to see more of Asher's background, too.
Thanks so much for reading and encouraging me! You guys are awesome!
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Does Michael drink so much b/c he's dealing with his own feelings about himself? He must feel pretty comfortable with Asher to just show up on his doorstep. I didn't even realize Michael remembered where Asher lived. lol

 

Michael does have a soft side that stays hidden behind all his booze. It's nice to see that side every once in a while.

 

I did like the fact that he was disappointed he didn't see Asher at the bar. That was cute. And since of course I've been there, done that, it was easy to relate to. ;)

 

So sad to hear about Allison. Three years is certainly not a long time to end your grief. It will be painful for Michael for years to come. And especially since it was tragic and Allison died way too young.

 

I'm interested in the Paul connection. He was engaged to Allison. Did he leave her when he found out she was sick? Asher was looking at him on the television like he was the enemy or something. Instead of looking at him with sympathy or just acknowledgement, he was looking at him like he was the enemy.

 

Great chapter KC! :2thumbs:

On 05/08/2013 01:26 AM, Cannd said:
Loving the story still. I am wondering, does Ash take off for all the Saber's games? Does he still have contact with this Ryman? Or after 3 years, is it still too painful? You brought up the pic on the mantle and Ash says 'our friends went to the game,' so I am assuming that Paul was a childhood friend of Asher's? :boy::boy::boy: So I'm even more confused as to why he'd not go see him. But, Michael was smart not pushing him.

I think it is time for Asher to use that ability to understand people and their actions and realize that a guy who just hangs at the bar you work in doesn't want to see you badly enough to come to your home when you're not there if it's just a platonic relationship. :glomp: I really hope that Ash can let himself wonder if Michael really is straight. I am confused myself, only b/c he doesn't seem to have picked up on signals Ash let slip through. If they are friends, can't he be honest about himself with Michael?

I'd really like to know more about Michael and his personal life. We really know nothing about him other than his being a shark in the board room. Also, is he still skirting the 'drinking too much' line? If so, is it to see Asher or b/c something is wrong. He has seemed to not get to that blackout drunk state since he was helped by Asher, but still seems to drink quite a bit. What was that due to? Was it work stress? Personal life stress? Is it because of Asher that he doesn't want to continue down that road?

More, more, more!!! I'd like the next chapter to be a bit longer if possible! :boy:

Wow, that is a lot of Q's :P A lot of the points you hit on will be coming in the next chapter. We will get to know both of them so much more before it's over.

 

Paul is still a close friend of Asher's but yes it is hard to see him living his life with his sister gone (they would have had their lives together :( ) We will also meet the rest of the 'friends' in next chapter too.

 

;) I'll see what I can do about making the next one a little longer. Thanks for reading and having such an insight to the story. KC

On 05/08/2013 06:06 AM, Slytherin said:
Michael was disappointed when Ash wasn't at work - that was cute :) Liked this chapter, very nice to now a little more about Ash.. Nice, slow pace - not even the smallest kiss yet - very different approach/story compared to "chasing the shadows" :gikkle::blushing:

 

:2thumbs::):2thumbs:

:*) I think I was wrestling some sexual demons while writing "Chasing the Shadows"...jeeesh there is lot of sex in that one, LOL :P Yeah, my editor has forced me to slow the pace and he's right, it's making the story so much better. I promise before the end there will be sex but not as much as Chasing/Shadows. Thanks for reading Sly, :D Kc
On 05/08/2013 06:16 AM, carringtonrj said:
Nice background details coming in. I like how you answered my question in the last review straight off. Even though I only just posted the review to the last chapter, just after you posted this chapter. :) Michael is very interested in Asher, huh? And the death of a sibling would certainly account for some of Asher's issues. Thanks for sharing this.
Thanks Richard, I try to get the reviews as soon as I can. I want the readers to know how much it means to me that they take time to tell me what they think. Sometimes my work schedule puts me behind :(

 

The death of Allison has affected Asher a lot, we will see a lot of that before this story is over. I can't imagine losing one of my siblings, occasionally I might like to kill them (JK) but I would be devastated if something happened to any of them. Thanks for reading, KC :)

On 05/08/2013 07:01 AM, Naptowngirl said:
Asher keeps thinking he has no change with the super uber "straight guy" Hummmm I wonder if Asher's "gaydar" needs a little tweeking...ya think? ;)

Great chapter and I must say I'm digging Michael. everyone has a softer side of them that only the priveledged are allowed to see, Asher might be Michael's one.

So we find out that Asher is more then just a pretty face, he had depth and character!

Curious as to why Michael avoided the bar for those two days....

There has been times that my gaydar has been on the fritz...that can cause trouble! :P In the end I think Asher will surprise everyone. Thanks for taking time to read and review, it really means a lot! :) KC
On 05/08/2013 03:55 PM, KaimukiMan said:
Michael has an agenda. His co-workers didn't call him the shark for no reason. Sitting on the sidelines here it's easy to see. If I were Asher I'd be drooling and sweating too, I just expect other people to be smarter at this stuff than I am. What can I say beyond the cliche of "the plot thickens."
There is so much to come. With this estimated at 25-30 chapters we have just scratched the surface! :P Thick away! LOL
On 05/08/2013 11:35 PM, joann414 said:
If Michael isn't gay, he wants to be! lol. Asher is more complex than he was at first glance He has emotional issues to be resolved and surprisingly shared some of this with Mike. The mutual interest is definitely there, but how far will Michael push because Asher is thinking Michael is straight. Lots to ponder here. Loving your story KC! :2thumbs:
Yes, Lady, there is lots to ponder. :P Michael has so many possiblities: straight-gay-bi...or just bi-curious! There is interest but will they act on it? I'm glad you're loving it. Thanks for all of your encouragment! You're awesome!! :D Kc
On 05/09/2013 12:03 AM, sacredlove said:
I'm loving this softer side of Michael. I didn't expected him to show up at Asher's doorstep with that gooey pizza and beer. It was cool and cute. And there's definitely a bond is brewing up between the guys. I liked Ziggy. He is protective of Asher and really funny.

Great job here, KC :2thumbs:

Looking forward for the next chapter to know more about Asher and Michael. :)

The relationship between Zigy and Asher is great (almost brotherly :) ) Michael has a long way to go and he's not there yet. His softer side is just the tip of what's to come. Thanks for reading! :)
On 05/09/2013 07:04 AM, Ieshwar said:
Hmm, so why did Michael come at Asher's place? Something's cooking up... There's so much unsaid things in this story and the way you slowly unravel each thread. Nice! But the wait... Argh! One more week to go (Less! It's already Thursday. :D )
So sorry about the wait. I know, I become a bitch when I have to wait for more when I get wrapped up in a story I like ;) BUT I will be uploading more realllllly soooon! :)
On 05/09/2013 08:48 AM, Stephen said:
While first impressions are important, they can be wrong. I didn't like Michael

at first, but I'm beginning to now that he seems to be more than a just a drunken

blowhard. Now I see him as a sort of rough cut diamond.

 

And he does seem interested in Asher...

Well Michael can be a jackass, but there is more to him than meets the eye. Slivers of his personality are slowly emerging. Is he interested in Asher...Hmmmm? We'll see :lol:
On 05/10/2013 01:15 AM, Lisa said:
Does Michael drink so much b/c he's dealing with his own feelings about himself? He must feel pretty comfortable with Asher to just show up on his doorstep. I didn't even realize Michael remembered where Asher lived. lol

 

Michael does have a soft side that stays hidden behind all his booze. It's nice to see that side every once in a while.

 

I did like the fact that he was disappointed he didn't see Asher at the bar. That was cute. And since of course I've been there, done that, it was easy to relate to. ;)

 

So sad to hear about Allison. Three years is certainly not a long time to end your grief. It will be painful for Michael for years to come. And especially since it was tragic and Allison died way too young.

 

I'm interested in the Paul connection. He was engaged to Allison. Did he leave her when he found out she was sick? Asher was looking at him on the television like he was the enemy or something. Instead of looking at him with sympathy or just acknowledgement, he was looking at him like he was the enemy.

 

Great chapter KC! :2thumbs:

Haha, well Michael did have to find his way home from Asher's soooo...I think he remembered the address ;)

 

Asher is still grieving for his sister. I can't imagine losing one of my siblings. It would crush me. :(

 

Yes, Paul was engaged to Allison but she passed away before they got married. No, he didn't leave her, he loved her very much. It's hard on Asher to see Paul, he should be his brother-in-law but now is off living his own life. I will get into that relationship but it's further down the line. Thanks for reading. KC :)

On 05/21/2013 11:52 PM, Gulab Jamun said:
Feel sorry for Asher. I am sure u will tell us more about his relationship with his sister and with Paul. When did Allison die?

I really like Ziggy..hes funny!

GJ

:( Allison died 3 years ago. I can't imagine losing one of my siblings. He is still grieving. Paul will still pop in and out since he's still friends with Asher but he is off doing his own thing (baseball)

 

I love Ziggy, he is one of my favorite characters.

On 06/23/2013 12:59 PM, comicfan said:
Well I keep falling for Ash. Hate to say it, but still not sure about Mike.
Asher is an awesome, upstanding guy but Michael is a hard guy to get to know. He's flawed and complex and has so much hidden below the surface. Thanks for checking out the story. I hope you come back when new chapters are posted. I should be on schedule for every Monday afternoon. Thanks for reading, KC :)

So it took a little longer than I expected to start reading again. I wanted there to be a few more chapters so I got to read a little more at once, but ... life got in between.

 

When I started reading I figured this would be an all one POV story - Asher's. But that's not quite the case is it? On occasion it drifts toward omniscient, as when Michael came in to the bar in this chapter looking for Asher - is it deliberate? I don't mind changing POV:s as long as it is done well, I don't even mind omniscient ... I juts came to think about it when reading this chapter.

 

So Michael must be up to something, or why else would he come visit Asher like this? It will be interesting to get to know him a lot better. I'm sure he's nothing what he looks like at the moment. Or maybe he just doesn't have any friends?

 

The part about Asher's sister struck more than a little too close to home for me (though I'm not dead yet), and one of the reasons it's taken me some time to pick up the reading again, and I seriously hope there will be no flashbacks to her illness or death or I don't know whether I'll cope.

 

I have quite a few more chapters to catch up with, and I will. Maybe not right away, but I will.

On 06/25/2013 07:07 PM, sorgbarn said:
So it took a little longer than I expected to start reading again. I wanted there to be a few more chapters so I got to read a little more at once, but ... life got in between.

 

When I started reading I figured this would be an all one POV story - Asher's. But that's not quite the case is it? On occasion it drifts toward omniscient, as when Michael came in to the bar in this chapter looking for Asher - is it deliberate? I don't mind changing POV:s as long as it is done well, I don't even mind omniscient ... I juts came to think about it when reading this chapter.

 

So Michael must be up to something, or why else would he come visit Asher like this? It will be interesting to get to know him a lot better. I'm sure he's nothing what he looks like at the moment. Or maybe he just doesn't have any friends?

 

The part about Asher's sister struck more than a little too close to home for me (though I'm not dead yet), and one of the reasons it's taken me some time to pick up the reading again, and I seriously hope there will be no flashbacks to her illness or death or I don't know whether I'll cope.

 

I have quite a few more chapters to catch up with, and I will. Maybe not right away, but I will.

Thanks for checking out the story Sorgbar! I totally understand, I'm the same way. I'm waiting for several stories to finish up so I can read them in one shot. I'm such a bitch when I have to wait on new chapter postings, It makes me crazy, LOL :lol:

 

I knew for this story that 1st person POV was a no-go. I've tried to keep it Asher's POV but omniscient still drifts in (it's one of my worst habbits.) I limited Michael's POV but I really tried for a smooth transition. I hope it was successful ;)

 

Asher will not be having sick/deathbed flashbacks of Allison, I promise! I could not imagine losing one of my siblings and now that our mom and grandparents are gone we are even closer...so no, I'm not going there!

 

Thanks for checking it out. New chapter every Monday if you want to drop back by ;) Kc

Dude, now I wish I had more time to read instead if quick bits here and there. I think Michael has a crush on Asher. He shower and changed before going to the bar and changed again before pizza and beer for the game--Total Crush! :wub: Michael kind of grows on you more each chapter. I really need to find more time to read-- can't we have like a 32 hour day?? LOL! You're such a good writer.

On 10/17/2013 06:53 AM, Racer said:
Dude, now I wish I had more time to read instead if quick bits here and there. I think Michael has a crush on Asher. He shower and changed before going to the bar and changed again before pizza and beer for the game--Total Crush! :wub: Michael kind of grows on you more each chapter. I really need to find more time to read-- can't we have like a 32 hour day?? LOL! You're such a good writer.
Awwwww, thanks! I'm glad you like these guys as much as I do, but I have to ax your 32 hours in a day :P LOL

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