Walking Through Darkness - 6. Chapter 6

Short but effective. I feel your pain. You express it well, given the limits that words put on feelings.
Still, I know I sound like a broken record, the form or lack of it, makes the poem less effective.
tim

I agree with Tim; it's a very effective poem, and honestly, I think it can stand alone, just like that. I don't think you need to finish it. I last word in caps, 'MYSELF', says it all, and is the perfect way to end the poem.

On 11/27/2015 at 2:52 PM, Mikiesboy said:

Short but effective. I feel your pain. You express it well, given the limits that words put on feelings.
Still, I know I sound like a broken record, the form or lack of it, makes the poem less effective.
tim

Thank you Tim for the feed back....I'm really trying to work on my writing but sometimes things come out so mixed up....hopefully when I get back in the mood to write I can change the ones I have already posted 

On 11/27/2015 at 7:25 PM, Lisa said:

I agree with Tim; it's a very effective poem, and honestly, I think it can stand alone, just like that. I don't think you need to finish it. I last word in caps, 'MYSELF', says it all, and is the perfect way to end the poem.

Thank you Lisa I'm hoping to get back into writing again soon.

personally i think it stopped talking to you because it was done. intense. well done.

2 minutes ago, mogwhy said:

personally i think it stopped talking to you because it was done. intense. well done.

Thank you for taking the time to read it and for the comment, it does "feel" complete but it MIGHT talk to me again I'll just have to sit back and wait.