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Concentrated mistakes - 3. Chapter 3

Ok. Here we go. Lets see if I can hold your interest just a little bit longer.

"Ho... How.. How did you..........?" Nathaniel used his hands to finish the question.

"How did I know your name? Well, you can thank your mom for that. She either thinks i am deaf or do not speak the English language". He finished with a wide smile which did strange things to Nathaniel's insides. "I know a lot more, but i can't give away all of my secrets on the first meeting, now can I?" He licked his lips and glanced at Nathaniel's for a second, he then turn his attention back to controlling the car as they moved slowly out of the park towards the outskirts of town.

As Nathaniel tried to get his emotions under control again, he looked at the man through his peripheral vision. He was of Hispanic decent and was gorgeous. He had the type of good looks that Nathaniel would look at all day, on a Bill Board or Poster but would never want as a boyfriend. He would just be too much damn trouble. Boyfriend, Nathaniel smirked to himself, what the hell would we talk about? I bet he is as dumb as a brick! Most Taxi drivers are, in his opinion. Nathaniel sighed as he realized that they were going much slower than he expected but said nothing as he thought the driver was just being cautious as the rains continued outside the car.

"How old are you?" The driver asked, surprising Nathaniel with the personal question. Anger replaced the lust Nathaniel was feeling within a split second.

"Are you sure you can handle a conversation and drive at the same time, Cabby?" Nathaniel asked in a mean and condescending manner. He looked strait at the driver as he used the name he had given him. He took a deep breath and then continued, "I don't see what my age has to do with you! Don't think i haven't notice your less than subtle "come ons" since I came into your car, but know this, even if I swung that way i would be way out of your league!" He finished his speech just as he realized that the driver had pulled the car over to the side of the road and was looking at him with amusement in his eyes.

"Well, well, well", the driver began, "the apple does not fall far from the tree, I see".

"What?" Nathaniel replied as he saw anger flashed in the other man's eyes.

"If you consider yourself to be superior in intelligence and you did not get that, then I am sorry for the survival of the human race". He rolled his eyes and then looked at Nathaniel. "You are such a fucking snob! You wanna know how I know so much about you and a lot of other shit that I would rather not know? Because your mom is also a fucking snob! Always looking down her nose at people, especially people who are not Caucasian. Because I look different she immediately thought that I can't understand what she is saying. She is not only a snob but she is a bigoted, narrow minded, self righteous bitch, and surprise, surprise, you are her bitch in training." His voice had dropped to a lower octave and it sent Nathaniel anger to another level. It did not help, also that the man looked as if he was laughing at Nathaniel.

"How dare you!" Nathaniel shouted, not caring if he sounded like a twelve year old girl. "My mom is ten times the person that you will ever aspire to be, you miserable son of a..........!!"

"Shut up!" The other man interrupted Nathaniel as he slammed his lips down to cover Nathaniel's.

Nathaniel froze for a split second and then he tried to push him off. It was like pushing against a wall. He soften his lips a little and Nathaniel felt his traitorous body starting to lose its fight and starting to respond.

Damn! Damn! Damn! Nathaniel thought over and over again in his head as he opened his mouth to welcome the other man's tongue. Nathaniel felt fire works going off inside his head as he made a noise in the back of his throat which speaks volume as to how far gone he was in the kiss. His hands went up to the man's shiny black hair as he tried to get even closer to him. He has never felt this out of control in all his life.

After a few moments, Nathaniel felt the other man releasing his tongue and winding down the kiss. He stayed where he was as he felt the man placed small kisses on his lips and cheeks. Each kiss sent an electrical shock through his system.

"Now that I have your attention, listen up", he finished with a kiss on Nathaniel's forehead, "I like you, despite your obvious faults, but we can work at it", he laughed softly as he nuzzled his ear. Nathaniel gasp as he felt as if he would cum with the force of what the touch to his ear does to him. "I can bet my uneducated life on the fact that you are into me too, despite how much it terrifies you. He kissed his neck and Nathaniel gave him better access. "When will you be legal?" He asked.

Nathaniel shook the fog from his brain and wondered what he was saying to him. "Huh?" He responded in an inarticulate way.

"When is your eighteenth birthday?" He breathed.

"Dec.....Decem..." deep breath, "December 21st", he finally got out.

" Good. Was that so hard?" When he said "Hard" he looked down to Nathaniel's lap, where he noticed that his bag had fallen to the floor leaving the bigger man to see just how horny he was.

Nathaniel cleared his throat and was about to adjust himself in the seat so he would put a little distance between himself and the man. Nathaniel was shocked when the man reached into his top pocket and took out his phone. He sat with his mouth open like a goldfish as the man punched his number into the phone, rang his own and then saved the number.

He handed it back to Nathaniel, looked him strait in the eye and said, "the name is Dane, as i have said before, and if you ever call me "Cabby" again, you will regret it".

Nathaniel huffed at the man's presumptuousness but direct his attention out his window. The rain was not falling as hard as before. He heard the car start up again and continued down the road.

They traveled the few minutes in silence as Nathaniel looked anywhere else but at the man who had made him loose control like no other. When they slowed to a stop at Nathaniel's gate, Dane turned to him and asked, "are you done sulking?" He reached over again and kissed Nathaniel softly on the lips. "Don't feel too bad Nate, that kiss rocked my world too". Dane smiled at him, pulled an umbrella from beside his seat and open the door. Before Nathaniel could collect his bag, Dane was opening his door with the umbrella ready to shelter him.

Nathaniel got out and felt Dane slipped his hands around his waist in an effort to bring him closer. Oh God! Nathaniel yelped, in his head. Dane walked him up to his door and waited as he fished out the key, opened the door and stepped inside the safety of the house. "Tha.... Thanks, Thank you", he stammered.

"See you tomorrow, my handsome little snob", Dane said with a smile.

Nathaniel blushed as he hurriedly closed the door. He heard Dane ran to his car, started it and pulled away from his gate. Nathaniel leaned back against the door, then slowly slid to the floor. "What the fuck! What the fuck!! What the fuck!!!" He kept saying over and over again.

Need to know what you thought:whistle: .

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Always happy to lend a review. First of all you definitely have good story telling instincts, and you pave the story pretty well. You've also made the whole situation rather intriguing, and I for one am interested to see where it goes from here.

 

I will say that all three chapters you've written so far could just as easily be combined into one long chapter and in fact would have better payoff I think. You didn't really get through the whole setup of the story until chapter 3 anyway.

 

I also think a little more description of Dane is in order. I'm assuming more information about him will be forthcoming. He seems a little strange right now. I almost get a stalker vibe from him though I don't think you intended that. Also a little more information regarding his age would be helpful.

 

All in all, you've done well so far, better than a lot of first time efforts I've seen, and I'll definitely be looking for more.

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On 12/16/2015 08:57 AM, spikey582 said:

Always happy to lend a review. First of all you definitely have good story telling instincts, and you pave the story pretty well. You've also made the whole situation rather intriguing, and I for one am interested to see where it goes from here.

 

I will say that all three chapters you've written so far could just as easily be combined into one long chapter and in fact would have better payoff I think. You didn't really get through the whole setup of the story until chapter 3 anyway.

 

I also think a little more description of Dane is in order. I'm assuming more information about him will be forthcoming. He seems a little strange right now. I almost get a stalker vibe from him though I don't think you intended that. Also a little more information regarding his age would be helpful.

 

All in all, you've done well so far, better than a lot of first time efforts I've seen, and I'll definitely be looking for more.

Thank you for the advice Spikey. I need it. Damn! Writing a story is not as easy as I thought before I started. I realize that Dane has reached into "stalker zone". Going to try to redeem him though. lol.

Thanks again.

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Great story, definately worth pursuing. I agree with the cooment that longer chapters tend to help build a more memorable story. But nevetheless, congrats on getting it on line, something I have never been brave enough to do!

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On 01/16/2016 10:44 PM, Canuk said:

Great story, definately worth pursuing. I agree with the cooment that longer chapters tend to help build a more memorable story. But nevetheless, congrats on getting it on line, something I have never been brave enough to do!

Thank you Canuk for the kind words. I have always wanted to do this. Just do it, is my advice to you. It also helps me to relax, I've realized so it is a win, win hobby.

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