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    Aditus
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Prickly Prompts - 6. #774 Me and I

It has been a long week and . You spot this nice restaurant as you go home and decide to give it a shot. As you walk in the door the loud noise in the place becomes suddenly silent. You pause as you fear the place might be in the midst of a robbery. You notice everyone shooting glances at you and then toward the back of the place. Wondering what could be going on you follow their glances and find … yourself? Only your doppelganger seems completely different somehow. What happens when you meet?

I watch the huge, golden ‘thirty’ balloon bob up and down under the ceiling, following the hostess to my table. What a coincidence! Here I am treating myself to a nice lonesome meal, and there is another birthday party going on, much better attended than mine will ever be, mind you. As we get closer, I can see everyone staring at me. My hand shoots to my throat, adjusting the knot of my suddenly too-tight tie. Beads of sweat are running down my back. A guy wearing a green shirt steps aside just when we pass the table, and my gaze falls on familiar curly brown hair. I know the reason for the small scar bisecting the left eyebrow. Bicycle accident, and— Mum’s pearls. A tentative smile greets me. And all of a sudden I have my arms full of me, and I can see myself mirrored in my eyes as the scent of Jil Sander’s ‘Sun’ envelops me, and she whispers, “I’m so glad you came out today.”

Thank you @comicfan for providing this prompt, it took me a while to find the right spin.
:thankyou: @Valkyrie for the edits and comments. :hug:
Any comment or reaction are appreciated. Thank you for reading!
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Valkyrie
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I love this twist on the typical doppelganger.  Who says our doppelganger is of the same gender?  Interesting little snippet :) 

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dughlas

I had to pause at "she whispers" thinking I misunderstood the protaganist's gender. I like that they are the same and yet not. That is a nice twist. Now as to why he is planning to celebrate alone ...

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I guess I’m not awake enough to have understood what was going on! How ironic after all those Comments I’ve made wondering (intentionally provocatively) if a character is Trans. I’m glad others understood and explained it to me before I said something dumber than usual.
;–)

I remember Heinlein had a protagonist who had two clones created who were younger, twin female versions of him – and all three had flaming red hair!
;–)

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comicfan

You always have some interesting twists in your stories.  Nice little piece. When can we get more? Lol

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Aditus
5 hours ago, dughlas said:

I like that they are the same and yet not.

Ooh! You said this perfectly. :hug:

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Aditus
3 hours ago, comicfan said:

You always have some interesting twists in your stories.  Nice little piece. When can we get more? Lol

Thank you! When can we get more? Just keep the prompts coming

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Aditus
6 hours ago, Valkyrie said:

I love this twist on the typical doppelganger.  Who says our doppelganger is of the same gender?  Interesting little snippet :) 

Thank you, Val!

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Aditus
3 hours ago, droughtquake said:

before I said something dumber than usual

You just say what you think and I do the same. :hug:

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Aditus
3 hours ago, droughtquake said:

Oh, and I should have noticed the title of the story!
;–)

:gikkle:

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comicfan
3 minutes ago, aditus said:

Thank you! When can we get more? Just keep the prompts coming

That's my job. Two a week. I just never know when one will click wirh an author. Glad you've found a few that inspired you. 

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Headstall

I was like... Wait?... What?... Oh! Twin sister! Nice, Adi. I wondered at the possibility she was his 'trans' twin, but either way, brilliant. :)  Cheers... Gary....

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Headstall
On 8/21/2019 at 10:15 AM, droughtquake said:

I guess I’m not awake enough to have understood what was going on! How ironic after all those Comments I’ve made wondering (intentionally provocatively) if a character is Trans. I’m glad others understood and explained it to me before I said something dumber than usual.
;–)

I remember Heinlein had a protagonist who had two clones created who were younger, twin female versions of him – and all three had flaming red hair!
;–)

Oh, Trans occurred to me right away too, drought, so we can be dumb and dumber together. :P 

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Aditus
7 hours ago, Headstall said:

we can be dumb and dumber together.

Hey! No one is dumb here. You see what you see and I'm happy you read  my little story. Thank you for reading and commenting, Gary. :hug:

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