The Poetry of M - 8. The Mist On The Stream

Wow, this poem is pretty amazing. In terms of the prompt, and what I was looking for, Bravo! You kept the metre really tight, and all the lines are formed to break in a natural place, and consequently it reads really, really smoothly.

You've shown here how powerful a 10-syllable line can be to tell narrative poetry, and what a great story you tell too. It's a pretty amazing coincidence, but in the chapter of my new book called "Well in the Woods," I have one character tell another all about sacred pools, and natural springs inhabited by elementals, and that's the source of the well's power. I'm also reminded of a section by Milton where he talks about two male angels flying up and having 'sex' to regenerate their forces. (If you would like to know that exact reference, let me know and I will dig it out for you.)

I love the image here of a child being born from sensual contact with a spirit, and I also like not knowing if the original person speaking survived the lovemaking, but somehow became the child. It would be like a rebirth situation.

Great poem, great response to my little challenge. Thanks!!!

On 04/14/2015 06:10 AM, AC Benus said:

Wow, this poem is pretty amazing. In terms of the prompt, and what I was looking for, Bravo! You kept the metre really tight, and all the lines are formed to break in a natural place, and consequently it reads really, really smoothly.

 

You've shown here how powerful a 10-syllable line can be to tell narrative poetry, and what a great story you tell too. It's a pretty amazing coincidence, but in the chapter of my new book called "Well in the Woods," I have one character tell another all about sacred pools, and natural springs inhabited by elementals, and that's the source of the well's power. I'm also reminded of a section by Milton where he talks about two male angels flying up and having 'sex' to regenerate their forces. (If you would like to know that exact reference, let me know and I will dig it out for you.)

 

I love the image here of a child being born from sensual contact with a spirit, and I also like not knowing if the original person speaking survived the lovemaking, but somehow became the child. It would be like a rebirth situation.

 

Great poem, great response to my little challenge. Thanks!!!

This is a lyrical reflection of the Three Elements that tie together. Its a distillation of a theme one might pick up in my story The Thinning Veil which I just released yesterday. This will be the third poem here related to the story.

I enjoyed writing in Quatrains...Me and Nostradamus! We be mates!