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An Apologetic Attempt At Adequate - 2. Chapter 2: Which

Which

A back to back
sleepless night.
A love quarrel
about love, without love.
Which.

So we turn our backs.
Pretend not to feel
the heat.
Would you get up
and leave.
Which.

I'm really mad
cause you smiled
the whole time.
Silly, you said.
I'm being silly.
Which.

You wouldn't be
cornered by a word.
Words are traps
set to enslave.
Which.

Then what is
f**king?
But a trap.
But I like that part
and I like the fighting.
I like everything
we do.
Which.

Copyright © Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original art, characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.<br /><br />These poems were originally written in early 2010.<br /><br />Transfer to new system on: 12/18/2010<br /><br />© Copyright 2010 by Bugeye. All Rights Reserved.<br /><br /><br /><br />
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I like the way you express your concepts, and the form of your poetry is interesting and refreshing. My one critique is that, while the use of repetition is an important and often under appreciated literary technique, and one I often enjoy, here I find it isn't discernibly tied to the feel or themes of the poem.

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I like how you end each stanza with Which with a period, not a question mark.

 

In that way it sounds more demanding than inquiry. Suits the poem more.

 

I also found there are places that can also be read as 'witch' <-- yeah, that's just me. :P

 

 

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