Just Say It

This work suffers today because writing styles have changed since this was written. Written in first person, it is a lot of telling, rather than usual showing we look for today.

But it is well done, taking that into consideration. 

The characters of Christian and Alex are well developed and highlight their differences and I found the premise to be something a lot of us could identify with.  However, I did find some parts a little repetitive, but that aside, this is still an interesting short story that many of the readers will be able to relate to. 

I would have given this short story five stars if the author had condensed some of the information from Christian's POV and written dialogue from phone calls.  If she had done that instead of using just a few emails and Christian giving narrative about what was happening, along with the characters speaking to each other when they met, it would have made this tale more engaging.  

The story opens with a scene designed to hook the reader. It works. And then the author attempts to reel you in with a slow buildup lovers of angst and chick movies will grab onto and not want to relinquish. It'll work for many but it doesn't for me.

Except for transcripts of a handful of e-mails, the entire story's a long first person narrative by someone who thinks he has a secret he should share but is too insecure to do so. I missed the connection to character we usually get from well written dialogue.

The  author is good at their craft. The story's well written and there are few errors in it. Just not my cup of tea.