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Breathless

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Genres: Action/Adventure, General Fiction, Thriller/Suspense
Sub-genres: Suspense, Adventure, Drama

Everyone's talking about the end of the world. Really? Oh come on, its something that's been talked about since the beginning of time. 2012 is the end of the world...
Really?

A tale of misadventure and the ultimate destruction of planet earth. Is this even possible?
Copyright © 2012 Yettie One; All Rights Reserved.

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  • 1. Breathless
    • 10,288 Words
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Suffocation-one of my worst fears. A whole planet at once? How horrible! Not to mention, which is worse, to know with no hope or not know and not get that chance at goodbye? I wouldn't want to be one of those astronauts either, because they'd face the same fate but a much longer time in the making. Lovely story, though the flow felt a little uneven with th major drama at the beginning. I liked it though, even with the hopeless ending.

Yettie One
On 12/23/2012 02:10 PM, Cia said:
Suffocation-one of my worst fears. A whole planet at once? How horrible! Not to mention, which is worse, to know with no hope or not know and not get that chance at goodbye? I wouldn't want to be one of those astronauts either, because they'd face the same fate but a much longer time in the making. Lovely story, though the flow felt a little uneven with th major drama at the beginning. I liked it though, even with the hopeless ending.
When I was a little kid I nearly drowned, so the horror of suffocation is daunting and I did play around with getting visual with it, but it just came across as tacky in the read back. You are the second person that has mentioned the disjointed feel of the pace at the start, so yeah that is what started the rework on the story. Hope that the final presentation is better. :) Thanks for reading Cia, and thanks for leaving feedback. x
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