Cynus' Ashes of Fate Episode 2

Plot Summary: We find our protagonist Tristan trapped in the Wer camp from last episode, until a mysterious boy named Jacob rescues him. He meets up with a ragtag band people, which include humans and Were-creatures alike. They board an aircraft and head to some unidentified hospital facility, where Tristan sees some hidden memories

Review: Good stuff and bad stuff abound in Episode 2,

The Good is that we get to see that the Wer are not the only one with tech or weapons. We also meet some interesting members of the Icarus Confederacy, a supposedly long defeated foe of the Wer Alliance. This story element balances out some of the questions I had in Episode 1.

The Bad is that we are treated to a lot of characters, backstories, and histories that readers have to absorb in the 2nd chapter. Some of it works well, I like Jacob (who can either become a love interest or a friend to Tristan) and Peter (the Transsexual Weretiger, very clever use of LGBT allegory).

Other things like Kurt and Faust's past histories bogs down your story line a bit. Also, introducing Ethan and the potential implication of Psi abilities into your universe was a bit rushed. Psi powers are more complicated if you start thinking about them, it's why science fiction writers sometimes consider the area as hybrid genre of Horror/Sci-fi.

Don't feel bad Cynus, it was a good chapter, just too compacted with information. You've established a rudimentary setting and basic protagonist vs. antagonistic forces within your universe. Be proud of what you did, not what you overdid.

I give this:

:lugh: 1/2 out of 5