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Creation Myth

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asamvav111

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(For a certain someone)

 

Who created you
Whether by touch or a gentle smile
Like snow flakes drifting in the wind
Melting with the smallest touch of a
Warm hand

 

Who created you
Whether by plan or perchance
A divine intervention that shined the
Light in the darkness of the void adorning
The unseen universe

 

Who created you
Whether in dream or reality find
Flawed images of perfection assuming
The ultimate victory of love over
Experience lost to the mind

 

Who created you
Who created you

 


13/03/2017
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This is quite beautiful, utterly enchanting. It has a dreamlike quality that will echo in my mind for a long time.The first stanza's images are arresting - cold and warm juxtaposed so effortlessly - while the second stanza's allusions to the cosmos and the divine make me hear music. The third stanza showers a radiant smile over your beloved.

 

 

Your special someone is a particularly fortunate person to have you write like this.

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Beautiful imagery. I love the first verse describing the snowflakes drifting in the wind, melting in a warm hand. Comparing human emotions to elements found in nature is a favorite of mine.

 

I agree with Parker: the person you wrote it for is very lucky.

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Lucky the guy that found you and made you write this. Such a love filled poem. Captivating the mood of someone reading this. Thanks to your Prince charming. ;)

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I'm struck by the images of flawed perfection - does this relate directly to the warm hand melting the snowflake. If so, then the hand is human, and thereby flawed, destroying the perfectly constructed structure given to us by nature.

 

Lots to think about here. Thanks for posting   

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I'm struck by the images of flawed perfection - does this relate directly to the warm hand melting the snowflake. If so, then the hand is human, and thereby flawed, destroying the perfectly constructed structure given to us by nature.

 

Lots to think about here. Thanks for posting   

Senpai noticed. O>O yay

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