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Busted chapter 30

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[There's a reason Joe left home at 18, changed his name, and never looked back. A reason he doesn't drink, too, they're just different reasons. This one's the reason he's so mad at Chris...]

 

Joe was fuming as he carried Toby upstairs. He'd actually worried about Chris earlier. He snorted. Sick. He knew exactly what sort of sick Chris was.

 

Toby moved in his sleep and held on a little tighter to Joe. Joe's fury vanished for a moment as he gave Toby a little squeeze and a kiss on the top of his head. That surprised him. He hadn't intended to do that. It was instinctive. It felt right.

 

That brought the fury back. He'd grown up with this sort of crap. Parents who were drunk all the time. His parents, his brothers, his sister, most of their friends

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canundra

canundra 10

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<_<

 

I was hoping for a confrontation there. Ehh. I guess I'll just wait for the next chapter.

 

I still love it though. :)

 

Keep 'em coming :D

TheZot

TheZot 791

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Nah, no confrontation yet. Chris still needs to really embarrass himself first. Plenty of time for that...

Camy

Camy 57

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Aww, sweet chapter :)

Lucy Kemnitzer

Lucy Kemnitzer 0

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Nah, no confrontation yet. Chris still needs to really embarrass himself first. Plenty of time for that...

 

I do like the leisurely parts of the story, because you're packing them with information.

TheZot

TheZot 791

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I do like the leisurely parts of the story, because you're packing them with information.

Yeah, I've been working on that. There's a lot of backstory, but I've decided that I really don't like huge chunks of expository dialog or third-person lecturing. Bleah. The Story Must Move. Still, without reason for the character's motivation or the world in which they move things get all abstract, and if we go that way we end up waiting for Godot, and he missed his connecting flight so it's gonna be a long wait.

 

So... bits and pieces. The whole story's chock full of bits and pieces. The trick is putting the right pieces in the right places. Haven't quite got that down with this "one-pass and it's out" format, but I think I'm getting the hang of it.

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