*sigh*

 

This whole thing was just wonderful. You did mention a second part, didn't you? First chapter showing up soon? Like tomorrow?

 

Sharon

 

PS - Just a thought, but where did the bullet that went out the window end up? I'd hate to hear that the little old lady living across the street was the recipient. Now if it's that nasty old geezer who yells at the kids for playing on his lawn, then that's okay.

No, it lodged in the frame of the window. It was the harmonics of the impact next to it that shattered the window, or so I shall choose to believe.

 

Nice ending, by the way. It makes me curious how much influence on that situation Alex had, but a fine ending jsut the same.

This whole thing was just wonderful. You did mention a second part, didn't you? First chapter showing up soon? Like tomorrow?

Yeek! No, first I catch up on everything I've been ignoring because this, including a long half-edited Ben & William fantasy short. Then I dig into this and do a good second draft, and then I think I'm going to try shopping it around and see what happens. (That should be so terribly good for my ego )

PS - Just a thought, but where did the bullet that went out the window end up? I'd hate to hear that the little old lady living across the street was the recipient. Now if it's that nasty old geezer who yells at the kids for playing on his lawn, then that's okay.

Nah, she's good. They were on the second floor and the gun was pointing more up than down -- it went a few blocks and one of Chris' distant neighbors is going to be real surprised by the leak in the roof over the kitchen the next time it rains.

Yay!

 

Great ending

Totally awesome. Drama, suspense, romance, and a heart-pounding climax - this story has it all.

 

Then I dig into this and do a good second draft, and then I think I'm going to try shopping it around and see what happens. (That should be so terribly good for my ego )

 

I really hope you do well with this - it's good work, and (ulterior motive) I'd happily pay good money to read more about these guys.

 

Best wishes,

 

Pete