Andrew Q Gordon

Being the lazy sod that I am, can you give us a link to your interview page when you make the announcement?

Took a short break from working - hmm might be good to get more work done before a break but oh well. Here is 32. I have a feeling I am going to get pillared soon if I don't resolve one way or the other Peter's condition, but it won't be in this chapter. Be patient, I mean, things are happening in the world while Peter is in a coma. I promise by Chapter 35 I will give you all a better up date on what happens to Peter. Just not promising what that will be. Here is the link: Head In The Game Enjoy.

"Hey Tellerman," Coach screamed from the sideline closest to Jason. "Get your head in the game, or I'm taking you out." "Yes, sir," he shouted back. When asked before the game, he assured everyone he was okay to play. Now he wasn't living up to his words. "C'mon, Jase, we need you man." Davis gave him a pat on the back as he ran by. "We need this game, dude." Eric told him as they both ran back toward their own goal. Standing by mid field, Jason realized he was letting his team

Oh I bet I know what the secret is: Then again, maybe I don't know so I better go read.

Okay, that Brian is in love with Adam is not news, that Brian didn't know what was up between is unimaginable, especially after what happened but that Adam would kiss him, is stunning. He tells Brian he thinks of him like a brother but then kisses him?? How many different ways is there to say GROSS Beyond that, I have this feeling something bad will come of the kiss. I have my suspicions that Brian is the one the Seer was talking about. Sad, I really like Brian, he is a decent guy - despite how much he wants Adam, he is still good to Jacob, much better than you would expect. Nice chapter, keep it up. Andy

Did Brain but Bruce up to challenging Adam and acting the way he did? I mean, at first it seemed as if everyone was annoyed - esp Bruce, telling Adam to come back in a year - yet they had food waiting for a celebration, meaning they already accepted him. Oh and what, is the the gay squadron?? Adam, Jacob, Brain Rick? did I miss anyone???

When I asked how much worse could it get, you didn't need to make it so soon. He could have at least enjoyed the moment a bit longer before you thrust them into hell. You are wicked, and you accuse ME of being mean. Perhaps this is karma paying River back for abandoning his professional responsibilities. Or then again, who says Karma is real anyway.

Lord how embarrassing to blow up your room while getting blown This was a cute chapter, the two have finally come to terms with their affection for each other, with a bit of help from Ho-o but still. After all the chapter of Adam feeling the way he did, it was high time he put them into action.

HC, Chapter 27 has a tiny problem, when the three are in CIBO's you keep referring to Lukas as both Lukas and Javier - it is right after Lukas comes back from looking for his Dad. Andy

Thanks Monty - next chapter sooner than later - promise.

Mike, Agreed, I want to be clear this was not a fraternity bashing portrayal - I was a founding father of my fraternities chapter where I went to college. I remember quite clearly the National's admonishments - every year - to go beyond the rules of the school with our conduct, how what we did reflected not just on us but the other members of our chapter and all the chapters and how being in the fraternity was not only an privilege but it came with responsibilities. So, this was never meant as an indictment of the fraternity system. Sorry if you or anyone else took that from my back and forth with Benji. Andy

I would imagine 6 fraternity members nearly [maybe actually] beating a student to death in a gay bashing incident and then 3 others trying to beat up a potential witness might qualify as a major incident. One other thing to consider - Raymond Henry, Jason's Grandfather - is an Alumni - Graydon's most prominent alum. I cut out a scene, but the Raymond and Flora Henry Field house is named after Jason's grandparents because it was their money that built it, and the University is also in Raymond's will. BUT as I said, I would think this qualified as a major even, no?? Also, I am NOT going to pursue that story line, though now that Benji has raised it, I might toss it in as part of the short story I plan for the trial of Jordan Colmar. Thanks Matt - now I know who to ask if I have a question on this topic. Andy

For someone not comfortable making decisions, Silver certainly had no trouble trying to lure River into his den. What's interesting is that despite all they did to condition him, he still kept his ability to read people. River thought he was sly, that Silver wouldn't notice or understand what he felt - WRONG. Silver survived by reading people, by knowing what they wanted before they said or even wanted it. I feel bad for them both - for as much as River wants this, professional conduct aside, he knows Silver really needs a person to trust and a part of him suspects - rightly so I would imagine that Silver has not processed this enough, despite Silver's words to the contrary. Even if they can be together, it can't be now. How much worse can it be for River?? And knowing you Nephy - the answer is MUCH! I trudge deeper into your web with ever passing chapter. But those will have to wait for tomorrow. Andy

Singing for Julia must have been incredibly hard for Silver. Last time he 'sang' for someone was with David. Julia might not know the full extend of his gift, but River must. For Julia, it doesn't matter, she couldn't have loved it more. Such complex vibrant characters, the severe Dr. Marshall, the bastard, drunkard Kevin who might not really be suitable for this work, the quick tongued, but good meaning Royna, the beautiful broken Silver, and the equally beautiful, almost equally broken River.

Wow, how incredibly sad that was to read - Silver's child like pleadings, even now, that he didn't know, were so biting. River's strength, to help Silver find his voice, while struggling to stay at a professional distance adds a dimension to his character that has been peeking out but never fully developed. It is clear he knows he is about to cross a boundary that he can never retreat from, but he also knows it is one he can't refuse or else Silver will never re-emerge. His plight is also filled with hurt, because he can't be friend, carer and lover, but to him he needs to be all three to truly help his patient. So very nicely done my dear Kudos indeed.

IDK, personally i think this one is mighty cool: :mace: And then there is this: but I suppose you didn't grow up on Jerry Springer so it might lose a bit. This one: leaves me And of course I never mind getting this, or this, or this, Sometimes this when I am by myself I feel like And of course, this like to think this is how I am most of the time though more often then not I resemble But welcome a few days late and don't mind the excess of emoticon - Andy

Sara, I agree totally that music can and is so expressive when done well that Jared could easily have fallen for the guy who played it who was also his tutor and was kind and patient with him. As for the rest, I will keep silent and let you and Anyta work it I out as you two see best - not my place to interfere. Andy

Personally I hated this, i think you have to have the worst Beta reader EVER!!!!! Actually I think this was a great chapter. Not sure what's gonna happen next - [really I don't - i haven't been given 16 to look at yet] but I just love the tiny details - puffs of cookie breathe, wrong keys, chip bags on the ground. All of that tells me more about the character and what they are doing. It adds depth to them as we try to keep up with the action. It gives us little smiles along the way. You are very good at making us smile, be sad, be anxious and rooting for your characters. Its a gift and I for one am glad you share it with us. Andy

All caught up - yes I am SUCH a speed reader reading TWO chapter is SUCH a praise worthy accomplishment, I know. Couple comments that I touched on the blog one of which is farcical. First the Farcical - Tell Conner he has to exercise more - period. No excuses. At 18 this could be as good as it gets. Old fat and Bald is a terrible thing to be as a gay man. Since you can't control age or hair line, weight is the only thing he needs to worry about - NO ONE likes a skinny gay man - trust me. If you don't believe me ask Peter and Jason - there you have it. Okay for some serious stuff. As you know I am a fan of realism. Sure every 'story' has an element of fantasy but the best stuff works when the fantasy is not some unbelievable thing - like it might be a fantasy for the jock to fall for the violin player but so long as it doesn't happen that they for the first time the violin player walks over says I live alone come be my boy friend I love you more than life itself and the Jock says Same here. They go back, the Jock's coach is there, turning down the bed handing out condoms telling them to be safe. That is an exaggeration but you get what I mean. You do a good job of avoiding this. But I have a question. I mean it is clear Jared is smitten, and that he is using their time to get closer to Connor BUT we never see ANY interaction between the two that reveals anything of substance about Conner to Jared. Not that this can't have happened, but perhaps you need to flesh out WHY Jared is so smitten? Conner isn't ugly, or hideous but he is certainly not the male equivalent of Ronnie the gorgeous psycho GF. So this can't be a 'I saw you and had to have you because you are so gorgeous,' kinda romance. Clearly Jared saw the true Connor, be it through his music, through his words, something. And although we know he has listened in on Connor playing, is that it? Was that the hook? Or were there conversations between the two we were not privy to where Connor gave more insight into who he is to Jared. Other than that, I find your writing to be engaging and easy to read. It flows so well that it don't find myself going. what??? Conner's development is really quite good and now we are seeing more of Jared and you doing it so nice. We learn it you don't tell us. So for what my two cents was worth, there it is. Bravo for this and I hate you for hooking me in to ANOTHER story . Andy

Deans reasons, though not really well spelled out were that he's trying to keep tabs on Jason to be sure he is okay. After he broke down in his room before the pool hall and then how he was cursing and smacking the steering wheel, Dean is just trying to watch over and be there for Jason. Thanks for reading - Andy

BW - No I really plan to tease or play god, but seriously, do people REALLY Want me to spoil the ending? I just don't know how to respond any better when folks say this or that. Like you said, there is no 'right' answer for me I can say this - if it helps - I am making good progress on the remaining chapters after a stall so I expect to get er done soon. since I have few chapters left to write, every time I finish one, I will post an extra chapter. Fair enough? Thanks for reading, and the comments

I promise I am not a tease - really, okay maybe a bit but I am following what I promised from the start, 2 a week til I finish - at least I have been clear from the outset not to expect more than I can or will deliver. Oh and I have no current plans for a sequel - I have a couple other projects I want to work on. Thanks for reading matt, I appreciate it. Benji, You make a good point about being tossed off. I would think the incident in the pool would galvanize the University and the National Office of the Fraternity to expel that chapter. Time, space and effort constrain me from going into details for everything that might happen. And, I never thought about that LOL. My sense is that unless Jason pressed charges, this would go no where. Just as how it is, if he isn't feeling threatened or intimidated, it is going to be hard to prove witnesses tampering - attempt maybe but still. As for Darryl, well as close as he and Jason are, he knew what Jason was asking - take care of Dean. And as the time line suggests the police were there fairly quickly. Thanks for your support, you have always been great at helping me with your comments. Nope no one said anything about a movie or tv series. Not sure how I would feel about someone corrupting my 'baby' to adapt it to movie/tv formats lol. But thanks for the suggestion

I think I get one Story review in addition to one per chapter. I think I will turn in my chit now while I am about half way through. As someone who is trying to be a writer - even if just part time - I feel humbled by this story and how it just pulled me in. Rarely - and I do mean rarely - do characters grab like River and Silver have. In a way I feel like they are my friends. Now I know people say that about stories and some say it too often, but this is truly one of those. The interaction between the two is astounding, phenomenal, incredibly emotional, thought provoking and real. That's a lot of adjectives, they are all apt. This is an amazingly wonderful story despite how heart wrenching sad it is at times. Yes Silver's plight is sad, but River's situation is not much better. In part he feels that helping Silver will redeem him for failing - in his mind - to save Nikki, both before and after his abduction, but he fails to see how this will affect his heart. Yes Silver is beautiful and desirable, but he is truly beautiful inside, something only River has seen so far. THAT is where true love is found, nurtured and grows for a lifetime. Beauty is skin deep and River's feelings are borne not of the skin but the soul. Denying himself to save Silver will leave him barren, and a part of him knows this, but knowing the pain he is setting himself up for, he chooses to accept that rather than let Silver suffer any more. It is beautiful and touching and sad and wonderful all at once. And it is such a tribute to your skills as a writer to be able to accomplish this. I do not believe I have ever been this effuse in my comments before, but I think this was the perfect time to express them. Thank you so much for this. Andy

Hey Nephy, thanks so much for this. What I was/am trying to show is how this affects Jason and his life - like I have said in other responses, Peter is in a coma. I could just snap my fingers and make him better immediately or I could try to show how his injury and condition affect those closest to him. I am not dragging his situation out, just to drag it out. I think this is how it would/might progress. I HOPE when it is resolved folks will agree it was a natural and realistic portrayal, but time will tell. Thanks for everything, I take your comments very seriously as I so admire your work.

Someone once said, a death is hardest on the living, they have to carry on - and NO I SWEAR that is not a hint that Peter dies. I am keeping a tight lip on what happens. My point was with Peter in a coma, how Jason handles it is the main conflict at the moment. I am not dragging out Peter's situation, well not really and certainly not on purpose - but the injury WAS severe. One can't expect him to snap back like Wolverine. His fate for good or ill will be revealed in about 4 chapters or so. BUT just to allay fears that the delay is a sign he will die, one could also take it as a sign he is healing and if he were going to die his condition would get worse. Just sayin