Andrew Q Gordon

That you can see aspect of your life in this story makes me happy, the idea was for it to be true to life but entertaining, and by true to life I mean people will read it and say just what you did, it reminded me of . . . Thanks for reading Trev and taking the time to comment.

Damn dude that is SO harsh - the dude in the avatar is Q from James Bond when he was like 80. My picture is on my profile. Wow, my weekend is off to such a great start - thanks Chase.

HC, Wow, I will say this was a bit confusing but in the way it should be - who was yelling at Madame R? If Ho-o want her dead, why didn't she help Adam like she had in the past? Why didn't Ho-o stop Jacob? What the heck in Madame Rooste's deal? Who is she and why does Ho-o hate her so much? Is she the spirit that died during the demon war? A spirit that was an allied of the dead spirit? And Jacob? Is he okay? what did he have to give to Lord Raehzul to make his dead to save Adam? And why would he do it in the first place? I mean what ever affects Jacob is going to affect Adam given they are tethered together by Ho-o. Of course I don't want answers right now, I want to see how things wrap up before I ask for an explanation. Great chapter, waiting for 30 now. Andy

Mike, I remember reading that certain posts - game and humor for example - do not count for the count in the forum. They do count for the total on the Profile. So both are correct. I thought - wrongly obviously - that it was the profile count that mattered and allowed you to change your title - I was incorrect, you need 500 post that count in the forum number, not the profile number. Andy

I know we talked before when this was posted on the old eFiction site, but I really love this chapter and this story - it is one of my favorites on the whole site - Billy and David just seem to pop out of the screen and feel so real. The whole awkwardness, the friendship, the tensions, everything, it is like I am there for everything. I ask you to hurry up with chapter 13 and beyond, but I don't want to rush you, not when you are doing it this well.

Okay, took me a bit to realize you had everything up and posted, Sorry, guess I wasn't as attentive as I could have been. I understood from prior chapters that Alex had died and come back, but I didn't realize he was killed by Keegan's dad, nice twist. As I said in the review on your story, the end is great partly because it left so much unresolved; the parents & Keegan, the other passenger who died, the Meyers, what about Greece? Thanks for leaving it all to our imagination. So much resolved so fast it was truly good stuff. I think I read in a status update of yours about how this was going to be a movie, True?? If so, that is pretty great. best of luck. Andy

No I don't watch Mad Money, I watch very little TV. My father loves the guy and whenever he visits or I am there I see snippets of it. The best was when he was on Jon Stewart who ripped him apart. That was the most I watch of him ever LOL. http://www.thedailyshow.com/watch/thu-march-12-2009/jim-cramer-pt--1

Louis, Had I not read most of this before you finished it, I would have posted a few more reviews. So one is going to have to suffice - The ending is so touching but bittersweet and a tad unsatisfying in a very good way. How easy to wrap things up in a neat little bow and then say the end. Rather, you gather up the loose ends, and leave them there foe each of us to decide how to put them together. This was truly an amazing ending. If I recall correctly, this is going to be a movie - so best of luck with it. I very much enjoyed this - and contrary to what you said at first our two stories are nothing alike, yours is masterful

Mike, That was funny - who is that guy? At first I thought it was Jim Cramer but definitely not him lol.

Nope no help at all, better get the black cap and ventilator out.

Viv, As a reader, when I read the end, I don't expect a sequel but as others have said, it is hard to let go of a character that has griped me - that is the mark of a great writer if through words you can establish an emotional connection with the reader. If the reader wants more you've done your job very well. As a writer (aspiring writer perhaps?) the end doesn't mean the end of the character but the end of anything interesting in their lifes. Who really wants to read about getting up changing diapers, going to work, coming home, cooking dinner, reading and going to bed. [that is mostly my life now - with the changing diapers tossed in as wishful thinking in hopes the surrogate is pregnant this time] With the conflict resolved, the story isn't quite so interesting. So while I could 'see' what the characters do after the 'end' I am not sure I could 1) see it well enough to make an entire story and 2) make it interesting. Oh well. I hope to have such a problem - being asked for a sequel - some day Andy

Hey Trev, thanks for reading and commenting, I appreciate it. Don't get the 'Big Bang Theory' Reference, PM me with an explanation? Thanks

I was the king - well probably queen but no one knew it at the time - of getting laps after practice, I was such a smart ass and I couldn't keep my yap shut. I suppose in some ways it helped as I have MOSTLY lost that smartass streak. Mostly

Trevor you crack me up Yes, you can be officially in love if you like

Thanks for the comment, I hoped the soccer stuff ran true for folks, never know until I put it out there and let it flap in the breeze. You are right, it would be interesting to see what if Jason were some bench warmer, and didn't have his best friend at his side to speak up for him. But that isn't this story now is it?? As for Dean, well he is THAT good. I don't think he is as level headed as Jason, partly because Jason was usually there to watch over him and keep him out of trouble. But yeah he is a good kid but . . .

What I didn't want was something too trite - oh they win AND guess what, Peter wakes up. As I said, Peter's condition will be dealt with again in Chapter 35, until then - No comment on Dean - nope no more comments, that's all for now. Thanks B-man Andy

Hmmm, I'm only kinda a lawyer, being a prosecutor [some call me a persecutor] limits my lawyerly skills some BUT it does seem to be popular so it will get definite consideration Thanks Mari! Doh!!! I realized that after the field to change my title failed to appear. That was rather anticlimactic wasn't it? Oh well more time to think of something snappy. Thanks for the note, now I gotta get back to posting 49 [48 after this] more posts to use whatever suggestions I get. Shhhhhh - you can't go spreading around that I have a heart, people [well defendants, their families and the defense attorney's at least] usually call me an asshole or worse - my fav to date was/is LWF. [little white faggot] Too bad I can't use that - too crude. Andy

What?!? Did I say Dean was gonna get in trouble?? Um all I said was he is not likely to abandon his quest to get drunk. As for punching folks, I remember being out with straight friends and being a call a fag - they wanted to hit the guy(s) and would always stop them, they're just words and since I don't know these people anymore than Jason would know these other guys, why bother. Also, on the pitch, it is easy to image a player who got burned looking for any insult to hurl at Jason - fag just being the most obvious at the moment.

Okay, so I realized my next post was going to be my 500th and I decided to try to make it a good one - I was going to post to post it on my story discussion page, but figured, a) not many people read it, and b ) just a tad too egocentric - hell I realize my ego is too big already. So then I thought maybe I should say thanks to someone(s) but that seemed trite - besides, hopefully the people I would thank already have been told by me personally thanks. Then I remembered that I can make up some witty name for myself once i reach 500. Since I don't have anything particularly begging to be used, I figured I use this post to solicit ideas for what to use. So if you can to help, please do so. Preferably here in the forum, but if you want to send me insulting suggestion without the general readership knowing, PM me [And I will be sure to post them in the forum and let everyone know who sent it to me as well ] So with that, let the one or two people [being generous here I know] who give a rats ass about what I use on my profile, fire off their suggestions. Thanks Andy

So Faith is a right royal prick isn't he? But I guess if he is one of the 'elevated slaves' who made it beyond the chained and naked state, he would be loyal to the core to his master. Okay, not good enough. He doesn't have to be happy about what he is doing, so he is just an irredeemable asshole. One Tiny complaint - sorry I just can't help myself - it would have been more effective if you hadn't explain the panic button thing. Now when help arrives - and I assume it will, we will know what happened and how. Had you just described what happened, and left it as the phone rang, we wouldn't expect anything and the suspense would be better. Minor complaint, but there you have it Slowly I make my way through the story - I don't want to go too fast cause then it will be over. Andy

I won't comment on a social life, wait until the next chapter for more on that, but I think Amanda is forcing him to carry on to keep Jason's mind off of his guilt. [Don't you love when the people who create things speak as if their creations are alive?? Agreed, totally tacky lol] As for Andy, please, I sign everything that way so people will know to use it.

Chapter 1 ?!?!? LOL okay so I use firefox, what can I say. Other than the soccer, the martial arts, the scene with mom coming around AND the use of Firefox, I am NOTHING like Jason

Funny how this comes out as suspense and tension. I really wanted to show Jason 'living with' Peter's injury. I have to say there are SO many little things you suggested that totally made it more realistic - I won't go into all of them but you have helped me so much with this particular set of chapters - I know folks think I am dragging this out and teasing them, but I didn't want it to be - he's hurt, we're sad. he's better/worse, he's back to normal/dead. If that comes across as teasing/taunting, I apologize - [okay not really, I think it is needed ] There is a bit more soccer left in the season so we might see another match - they did make the playoffs after all Matt, First the whole point of the discussion topic IS for you to do just what you did - I fully expect to write you back when I work on the short story of the trial. I have asked a couple other readers for input on things I wanted to add into the story that I felt they would know something I could use. If I don't have to make it up entirely it makes if feel more real. They Henrys are going to be involved again - but not for a little bit. Can't have too many stories bouncing around at once. To me - and to Benji as well I think - they are amony my favorite characters in this story - I wish I could do more with them but it would take me too far a field. Maybe in the trial phase. Thank you both for the comments . Andy

So, I read this and was what the . . . is she talking about. Turns out I had the view signature lines turned off so I never saw that part, Sorry Phoenix, just ignore my request. I see it now.

IDK about the pizza place but it is unlikely that Dean has abandoned all hope of getting his drunk on before the weekend is out. Hmm was that a foreshadow of things to come? Thanks .