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  1. Sara Alva
    You misled me with the whole "police are going to get involved" thing :-P I was expected Dean to get in trouble or something, hehe. Poor Jason, he can't catch a break :-( Oh, and I agree with Nephylim, I miss Peter
  2. Sara Alva
    So I feel nosy reading people's blogs . . . but I suppose they are there to be read . . . and I figure more well-wishing can't hurt I too am so excited for you! He/She/They will be so lucky, being born into such a loving family :-)
  3. Sara Alva
    Aw, cute conversation with Dean at the end
  4. Sara Alva
    Dom's The Lon(n)g Way, then J. Ross' In Due Time
  5. Sara Alva

    Social Skills

    Sara Alva posted a story in Fiction

    Connor Owens is a violinist, a college freshman, and an extreme introvert . . . but when he reluctantly takes a job tutoring for the athletic department, he meets someone who just might be the ticket out of his self-imposed prison.
  6. Sara Alva
    Definitely hooked. Great start, great descriptions . . . intriguing character :-)
  7. Sara Alva

    The One He Loved

    Sara Alva commented on Ieshwar's story chapter in The One He Loved

    Lovely, bittersweet piece. Great job.
  8. Sara Alva

    Chapter 2

    Sara Alva commented on AleMaho's story chapter in Chapter 2

    Oh! That was sneaky with the dream bit!
  9. Sara Alva

    The Key

    Sara Alva commented on Lugh's story chapter in The Key

    Lovely piece. Chester's exchange with his great-grandfather was so touching . . . and great ending!
  10. Sara Alva

    Effy's Home

    Sara Alva commented on Nephylim's story chapter in Effy's Home

    Another great short piece. I too loved the way you led up to Ephraim from all the outside POVs . . . something different, and interesting! And a sweet ending :-)
  11. Sara Alva
    Look at me, finally all caught up! (BTW I can totally read faster than that when I'm not trying to write stuff at the same time :-P) . . . oh, wait, that's not a good thing, because now I'm stuck with a cliffhanger! Grrr!
  12. Sara Alva
    Whoa. Just . . . whoa. As this story progresses you seem to be packing more and more of an emotional punch into each chapter. Boy am I glad the next one's already up :-)
  13. Sara Alva
    LOL
  14. Sara Alva
    Wow, I was really surprised at first at how Jason handled the situation with Blake after the name-calling incident . . . I thought he was being too nice, blaming himself too much . . . I guess he's a better person than I am :-P
  15. Sara Alva
    Oooh, I got nervous during shower scene . . . and even though nothing happened, I can see why Peter would be a little upset.
  16. Sara Alva
    I wanna see Peter beat someone up :-P
  17. Sara Alva
    I could never text while driving . . . I don't have a phone w/ a keyboard and I have a strange allergy to text-talk . . . I'd get in an accident for sure trying to type "What's up?" with the apostrophe and everything. It's taken me 15 years of internet usage to be able to use lol :-P
  18. Sara Alva
    Yay! :-P
  19. Sara Alva
    Ugh . . . Jason's mom . . . it still boggles my mind how a mother could turn away a child like that . . . I mean, I know it happens, but it's still shocking. I hope things get better on that front . . . but I know in real life stuff doesn't always work out. Also, I loved the little bits when you mentioned Jason cursing, and being surprised his parents didn't call him out . . . it just reminded me of those first terrifying times I cursed in the heat of the moment in front of my parents, and no matter how dramatic the situation was, or how emotional I was feeling, there was still this little moment of holy shit I just said f**k in front of my parents . . .lol
  20. Sara Alva
    It's good Jason has Dean on his side since it seems his mom isn't likely to take the news well . . .
  21. Sara Alva
    *Cue dramatic music* I guess this is where things take a turn for the not-so-fluffy . . . One little thought: Did you choose to write in 3rd person limited, or 3rd person omniscient? I thought it was limited . . . I can only remember one little paragraph that seemed to slip into someone else's thoughts . . . but in this chapter some scenes take place without Jason being there. It's not a major issue and b/c I'm into the story so much by now it hardly stands out . . . again I only mention b/c when I started writing I was having issues w/ deciding which POV to go with . . . they both have their advantages and disadvantages.
  22. Sara Alva
    Yay for Darryl! I really like stories/ movies that explore straight-gay friendships
  23. Sara Alva

    Chapter 1

    Sara Alva commented on Nephylim's story chapter in Chapter 1

    You have a knack for packing a powerful punch into a compact story. I always want to know more, but I'm not unsatisfied :-)
  24. Sara Alva
    Aw, the L word! Man, Pete's insecurities about the money issue run pretty deep, huh.
  25. Sara Alva
    Aww, I felt so sorry for Jason during the gift scene! I've always been on Peter's side of things w/ the money issue, never saw it from the different perspective before
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