Sara Alva
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1st person present tense How exciting. You said in chat that the writing is 'informal', but really, that's the only way I've ever seen first person present tense done in a way that makes me want to read it. You want to get sucked into the narrative that runs through the MC's head . . . and that's exactly what you did, because after the first few sentences I stopped thinking about what tense it was written in and started concentrating on the story
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How did I not know you had a blog? Tough question. I think I had 2 chapters of expo before real stuff started happening, but what works for one story won't necessarily work for another. You don't want to rush things, either. Any way to combine the character building w/ the action? Maybe the action could start towards the end of the chapter? If you need to put in info to make future chaps work, then I guess another chapter of exposition might be a necessity. Well, I'm not sure that was helpful at all.
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Baby update - it's no longer an 'it' it's a 'she'
Sara Alva commented on Andrew Q Gordon's blog entry in Reset, Reload, Redo
Andy I don't think it's bad that you wanted a son. I mean, I have a definite preference, and have had it since way before I was married Of course, you know you'll love the kid no mater what I've been in LA for 6 yrs and I've never been to the Inland Empire. Sounds like I'm not missing much. -
Chapter 5 - Working Out the Day's Events
Sara Alva commented on comicfan's story chapter in Chapter 5 - Working Out the Day's Events
Okay I really want to make that blueberry thing. Maybe I will in my (possible) new house. Also, it was nice to see the reflection in this chapter framed with a little action-- really helps to keep reader interest that way. -
Reading this . . . well, it hurt. The hopelessness of the main character could bring on a sense of desolation in the reader, but then again, it could also spur people to want to change the world--maybe in just a small way-- to save people from this kind of hurt.
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Now look what you've done-- like my to-read list isn't long enough. I'll be reading this story for sure. Yes, I'm one of those Pern followers . . . but I rather like that this story is very 'independent' b/c it's been a while since I've read the other books. When I get the chance I'll read this through, b/c the first chapter definitely got my attention.
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that was smart, I'd have never thought of that Happy birthday Frosty, princess of GA
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Feliz cumpleanos
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Beautiful story. Thanks for posting it.
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Chapter 4 - Meeting Mr. Reeds
Sara Alva commented on comicfan's story chapter in Chapter 4 - Meeting Mr. Reeds
I like what you said in response to Cia's review. I kinda like the "realistic" stories, sometimes more than the twisty ones. Haha, Charlie got mistaken for a kid! Happened to me once -
Chapter 3 - A Life Saved
Sara Alva commented on comicfan's story chapter in Chapter 3 - A Life Saved
Poor Charlie- must be feeling so guilty right now! And oh, yeah, forgetting to call in to school, he's excused this time, lol, but it's one of those things as a teacher that you're stuck with. You can't ever show up 'a little late' w/o everyone knowing -
Apology... Explanation... Excuse... However you want to take it!
Sara Alva commented on Frostina's blog entry in Chatter from the Chatterbox
Oh Frosty . . . I'm so sorry you have all this going on I don't think I have any good advice, 'cause I've never been in your shoes (other than having a mother lash out at me . . .) but we are here for you, ready to lend an ear whenever you need it. I know we're just random internet people, but sometimes just venting can help Hoping for the best for you and your family. -
I really like it when I can "get something" from a poem (as opposed to the times when I'm left going huh? -- though I usually blame myself for that, lol ). Anywho, I 'got something' from this, and I just thought I'd say I admire your ability to share this personal poetry w/ us.
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I do try my best to get out one a week Thanks!
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Hehe that's a good tactic for reading to avoid cliffhangers-- maybe I'll give it a try sometime. Thanks for the review!
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sorry . . .
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I'm sorry, I suck at commenting on poetry, because I don't read it often. This one definitely felt emotional, like others said. I think I probably liked this one the best.
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LOL. I was like "What the-- ohhhhh." Hehe. The beginning made me think of the lyrics to a Beatles song. Later Beatles, not the early peppy stuff.
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Short and sweet. I like it.
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Okay, review below mine, so sweet! Hehe. You lucky lady Well, a nice start to my day, reading such beautiful poem. Agreeing w/ what other's said-- you can tell that this poem has personal implications, which, imo, means it conveys emotions that much better. It does so well, in fact, that I could draw a personal connection of my own. Look at me, reading poetry and sorta getting it Great job Frosty!
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Hm I suppose if I were trying to alleviate the stress, I'd write or read. But sadly my usual go-to is to complain first, not that that helps any Now, as for the story, if this is something that you actually do, *you* know it can happen in real life and therefore I'd suggest you write it with conviction. Sure, you may have people telling you that it's unrealistic, but that may only be because they've never seen/experienced something similar. You'll know better, and perhaps be broadening peoples' horizons. If they still disagree . . . well, oh well, ya can't please everyone all of the time.
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Okay, that's exactly what popped into my head yesterday afternoon. Weird. Reminded me of that show Dark Angel, where "the pulse" wiped out all the technology. It would certainly suck if this website disappeared. Thanks to those who keep it running
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Chapter 2 - After the rain
Sara Alva commented on comicfan's story chapter in Chapter 2 - After the rain
Yikes! Wish I could say something smart like Sam, lol, but he's already got that covered. So yeah, I got to the end and thought "yikes!" . Good chapter ending, leaves us wanting more. -
feliz cumpleanos
